Warhammer: the Beginning of the Heresy

The writing is pretty good, but there are still a lot of problems with the details, such as plot issues and the fact that the protagonist feels useless. Although the protagonist is indeed an ordinary person and has no big role in the world of Warhammer, we all come to see fan fiction. They are all science fiction novels and the protagonists. So it is reasonable to give the protagonist some plug-ins, right? And the last point, the most important point, is that the protagonist is a Riddler. Originally, it was too frustrating to read the original text, but I came to read the fanfic, but it turned out to be even more frustrating to read the fanfic.

I don't want to change history but I still want to participate in it. The writing is so tangled! You discovered the evidence of rebellion but didn't tell the Emperor even though the Emperor was around. You are acting like a girl!

The author asks the protagonist to learn something that is not as good as the Riddler. He is so nervous.

Destined to drown on the roadside of subspace

I have read Chapter 62 so far, and there are many poisonous points. Here are just a few: 1. The protagonist is very poorly created. The Riddler's work has attracted the attention of the Chaos Power, but he still hides it from all our personnel; he is timid, careless, and wants to change, but does not take action 2. He always reveals the outcome of the incident in advance, such as "From the perspective of hindsight, Rowan at this time should..." This kind of affects the perception 3. According to the post below, I learned that the protagonist in "The Orc Chapter" is a rapist

Brother, big demon, Slaanesh's artifact was specially designed to target the Children of the Empire. How could you have snatched it away so easily? Point

I wanted to write a change, but I was afraid of changing it and I didn't know how to follow the plot. After writing it, nothing was changed until it was released. It was the same as the original plot. One moment I was writing and refused to reveal anything, and the next moment I revealed many key plots. There are so many stories about Warhammer changing the future. Since I am writing this type of book, I just changed it to the end. No matter what the results are, at least the writing is not frustrating and the readers will not feel uncomfortable watching it. What is the point of wanting to change but not dare to change it?

It was well written. I liked the dialogue between the protagonist and the Emperor and the Primarchs. Although it was not very active, it satisfied my general fantasy about the Primarchs. The Fulgrim chapter was very good. Although the storyline seemed ordinary, it made me deeply feel the fear and despair of the planet environment. The sense of urgency was very strong. Fulgrim was wandering on the edge of going crazy. The concept was very good. Even if he casually chatted about art and the like on Fulgrim's ship, it was not boring. On the contrary, it enriched the whole chapter and was very beautiful. When it comes to the orc chapter, personally, it kind of drags down the overall height of the novel. It can drop from 9.8 Points to 2.0 Points (limited to this chapter), because as for the freshness of the orcs, anyone who is a hammer friend will find it boring. How lacking is it, no less than the second year of Yuan He of Saber Ya

The protagonist just knows but doesn't say anything, just like the emperor

I feel like the protagonist is completely useless and completely useless.

To be fair, Warhammer is nothing like what an interstellar civilization exhibits. It is to cram the most backward, feudal, and repressive systems in mankind into one political body, and to suppress combat effectiveness. Even if the genetic modification failure rate is 50%, there should not be only so many interstellar warriors. For example, Guilliman, who has the most, 250,000, is too few. On an interstellar scale,

The protagonist gives me a very strange feeling. It's useless, but all the big shots value the protagonist very much. Although it fades a little later, it still feels weird. The author's writing is good. From now on, I think it's still okay subjectively. I give it a good review.

There are some poisonous points, but there is nothing you can do about it. Few of the articles you have hammered through are non-toxic, but overall they are still good-looking. They can be counted in the T1 echelon of hammering through.

I passively ran away to play with the orcs. In the early stage, you have already developed the magical equipment (your own exclusive ship, your own exclusive equipment, your own subordinates' power) and are expecting to make a big splash. You can go back to before liberation (although you still have the power sword and rosary)... It's so frustrating...

I think it's okay for the author to write some emotional scenes. After all, not everyone likes to fight and kill all day long. I still recommend having some emotional lines.

It doesn't suit me very well. The author likes being the Riddler too much.

When I saw Chapter 30, I just wanted to say that the original 40K was because of the tragedy of the Riddler. Now the protagonist is still the Riddler. I am speechless. I really can't stand it anymore. I just want to ask, will I die if I explain it?

I look forward to seeing more content about the Custodes Devourers who work with the protagonist. Now it feels like the image of the Custodes is a little dry? A bit like a tool man.

Strengthen the protagonist, he has no fighting power at all, he will be hung up and beaten no matter where he goes😡

When the rebellion is launched later, remember to ban Guilliman. It is too much. Guilliman has 300 worlds. He cannot die in the Emperor. Go and see what other legions have introduced. A ball can make up a regiment. 300 Worlds is too much.

666 Only updated two pages a day for who to see? Give me more quickly

Was poisoned. A great starting point, but in the middle he treats people as fools.

After reading the latest chapter, I feel that the author is writing an apocryphal thread. If he continues writing like this, I will not follow it.

Although it is a bit toxic, and the orc chapter does affect the overall look and feel, for me, it is indeed one of the more reasonable and watchable Warhammer fics I have seen so far (I am also a Yunzhui). My favorite is the chapter about the Serpent Temple on Dawen, especially the scene between the protagonist and the Warmaster at the end. It is one of the few chapters that made me moved (I actually cried when I thought about it afterwards). In short, if it is good to read and write more, the author must complete it and not leave it unfinished. I also want to read the story behind the protagonist and Horus

After being a cloud hammer for so long, when I saw the timeline of this book, I just want to say, protagonist, you should kill Erebus now... There is still time before Horus is not injured and can be made into a puff... Threatening the four vendors when necessary, you don't want the Black King to pick peaches...

Exoskeleton Armor

Generally speaking, it is tasteless, so it is not a pity to throw it away. It is okay to use it as a snack Let's just say that when he dealt with the stabbing sword, he chose to hide it from everyone and handle it himself or to clarify the matter to key figures. Both approaches are understandable, but the protagonist chose to conceal the whole matter from Fulgrim, who really controlled the direction of the Third Legion, and told the two company commanders the truth. What kind of brain circuit is this?