Fuyu Fairy Clan

Although the results are not good, I will try my best to finish the first book. Please give your opinions here so that I can improve in time!

At first glance, I looked like a clan of obscene jade immortals.

Hello, after reading the first three chapters, the big problem is actually nothing. It's just the protagonist's identity at the beginning, which is a bit off. Because readers still want to see some of the protagonist's past lives, there is no need to write it. Then, what is the first purpose of the protagonist's time travel? In fact, the supporting character thinks that he is a Yuanying monk who seizes the body. The first highlight of other stories is to quickly let the protagonist know the cruelty of the world of cultivating immortals. There will be no characteristics. The 35-year-old middle-aged man you wrote is quite similar. A normal 30-year-old man will have this expression when he travels to the world of cultivating immortals. If it were a 20-year-old person, he would definitely be very excited. , I thought I could finally become an immortal, but it would be nice to be able to sign a contract. Many people couldn't sign a contract. In fact, there is no problem of age between Sister Jing and some set points. Special expression skills are the most important and then Shuangwen will be happy.

As soon as I came in, I found my identity exposed.

There are still a lot of flaws, and it is still difficult to pretend to be a Yuanying. People who are really Yuanying do not practice their own Kung Fu, but they also practice your family's Kung Fu. How can this happen when I feel numb when I get married? I have to go out to find a shop to identify the owner, and there is no spiritual beast to recognize the master Kung Fu in the Yuanying stage? The True Yuanying pretends to be a child and learns a spell for a long time. As an ordinary person, you know that when you come here, the vision will be considered as seizing the body. If you act like this, the family will think that Pigfoot is scheming for a while, and then think that he has not integrated well and is brainwashing himself anyway.

The first three chapters are too bland, and the practice system is too old-fashioned.

Stop writing, be a eunuch soon, be happy soon.

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Each chapter has two thousand words. Is it interesting?

So far, there seems to be nothing wrong with it, but I don't know if it's like the last book that was released on the street again.

It's a bit disgusting. Cut it off.

It would be better to add a gold finger.

Come on together! Come and read "Nirvana Immortal Clan".

Your family literature is just like a piece of shit.

Good writing, good writing and good reading, please read it!

Very good, when will it be released?

In my opinion, it has to be written the other way around. A single spiritual root is useless, five spiritual roots are a great genius, the more spiritual roots, the more genius, and the eight spiritual roots are the decisive genius to suppress an era. The more spiritual roots there are, the rarer they are. Single spiritual roots are the most numerous and common among low-level monks. Writing a book must have its own characteristics, and the underlying structure must be clearly written. As long as the writing is not bad and the logic is normal, it is a good novel. 😆Don't be a follower. If others write that Shan Linggen is a genius, you should follow suit. 🙂

You should divide it into more segments. It's just a lump. Once you see it, you won't want to look at it.

Sorry, I have a lot of things going on recently, and I have to watch the World Cup again, so I will stop updating for a month! I'm so sorry!