Rebirth 87, My Girlfriend Is from 1907

The career lines of the two people are well written, with twists and surprises accumulated step by step. However, there are too many short descriptions of the family life. I skipped a few chapters to eat, go shopping, and save water. I hope to grasp the main line and advance it, reduce the daily plots that are all in one glance, and create a higher-quality work.

Tear it down and set off firecrackers!

I prefer rebirth stories, but some parts made me feel uncomfortable, so I couldn't complain. Many novels from Qidian have a problem, that is, they sell things at various discounts while talking about the scarcity of the thing; while they talk about how difficult it is to make money, they deal with it casually, which is even a waste in my eyes. Every time I see this kind of plot, it gives me an out-of-place sense of dissonance. This is also true of many best-selling works by great writers. Is this a requirement for starting editors? This Wang Xingda is obviously a clown, why should the protagonist stick to him? Of course, I only saw the chapter on fixing the TV, and I don't know the subsequent plot development. I feel that the author's writing style is good and there are many details. This is very advantageous in character creation, but it becomes a poisonous point when it comes to another focus, making money.

I think the real problem is that we have been talking about it in a straightforward way, as some great masters have said before. The golden rule of 3 to 5 chapters in the online literature industry is that every 3 to 5 chapters, there should be a small climax or a small turning point, and then a bigger one after a few chapters, otherwise it will become dull, like chanting a sutra. Furthermore, some details are repeated too many times, and there are many details. Of course, the sense of reality is stronger, but repeated descriptions make people feel verbose, and some contents are written in detail to foreshadow the subsequent content and serve the purpose, rather than detailing everything. Otherwise, there would be no word "detailed and brief".

Heroine

I feel like it's well written, but there are too many good guy cards, and traditional martial arts can't be played. If traditional martial arts could be fought, there would be no modern martial arts novels. If you don't understand this sentence, search it yourself.

The subject matter and concept of this book are very good, and the writing style is excellent. It is worth reading, but there are a few suggestions for reference: 1. After all, it is a time-traveling novel, and daily descriptions are allowed but do not need to take up too much space. The main line must be advanced; 2. It is not exciting enough, and it is a bit overwhelming for the protagonist. The author may have considered the social environment at the time (or maybe he was worried about Mr. Crab 😁), but this is an online article after all, and with such a unique cross-travel, it should be explosive. (Like Ah Cheng, Chen Hansheng and others, they are just small monsters at most. They can be beaten to death as soon as possible. It is difficult to fight with them. Hong Kong and Taiwan, Ni Bang, and Ami will not be too happy to continue beating a few big monsters. Moreover, the environment in these places is more relaxed, and the scale is larger to match the force value of British girls; 3. I hope the author will not commit literary youth disease and feel happy and moved. , Internet readers are not uneducated, but time is fragmented, so the pace should be fast and the fun points should be highlighted. Too many family conflicts affect the desire to read (the two paragraphs about the two brothers marrying their wives are good, but the paragraph about the second brother is better). Let me talk about this first. I hope that the author's good writing style and subject matter can be noticed and liked by more friends. Forgot to remind: update more.

The subject matter is very novel, but the writing is a bit bland.

Boxing of Boxing? Martial arts were just made up in the late Qing Dynasty. Chronicles are nothing interesting if they are divorced from authenticity.

A person who was reborn in later generations, a young girl from the Jianghu of the Republic of China, the story was actually written in a plain and orderly way. Since we are all in Shenzhen, why not go to Hong Kong and have a try. The situation in Hong Kong is suitable for male and female protagonists.

Faster the pace, delete 30%, and you will be a god! There are too many lengthy descriptions.

How long does it take to resolve the identity issue? Why do I see you writing more and more biased, I don't know when I will be able to eat the cake you drew for the readers at the beginning, and the recent chapters are not refreshing at all.

In that era, those who could rise from the bottom were elite➕ruthless people. It is obvious that the male protagonist does not have these conditions. I hope that the author will not write too awesome when writing in the future. It will be more daily and more unique to that era. It is also good to be ordinary. Be a charterer, invest in some factories and stalls, and write stories about little people. Finally, I would like to ask book friends if there are any books of the same type. This kind of book is so suitable for my appetite 😭

Can you please moderately improve the progress? According to the way you write it, 1,000 cards is equivalent to 2 years.

After going to Peking University, I still have to join the army... It's inexplicable😂

The character description is good, but the overall plot is too bland and the pace is slow, which makes me lose my energy.

Good looking

The subject matter is very distinctive, the painting has a strong sense of the times when it was written, and the local characteristics are also quite prominent. However, there are many problems. First, it is too long-winded and repetitive, and the joint defense and arrest without certification are repeated over and over again. Second, the characteristics of the "protagonist" and the future main line planning are not visible.

To be honest, the writing is too detailed and there are many logic problems in some plots. Is it a female author?

It's a pity that Hu Yue was written to death. What a loss 🙂

The father is from 2008, the grandfather is from 2028, the protagonist is from 2088, a three-generation time traveler, reborn in 1985

The titles should be localized. A-sao, Xi-mei/A-ying, Dong-zai or A-dong are more suitable. Dongzi-sister-in-law and the like are spoken in Northern China.

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The subject matter is good and the heroine is well written, but the pace is too slow and there are too many daily descriptions. It's not fun. It's like an assembly line. It's a shabby place to stay. Are you still packing up and planning to live there for the rest of your life before it's put on the shelves? Shouldn't you just quickly earn money and buy an identity to get in? The results are generally correct, and those who can stay are those who have been screened.

I have some geographical knowledge and I don't understand it. Buxin Village should be in Guan Nei. Why is Guan in the article?

Very well written. Many readers have a habit of not following up on reading. They usually save it for a while before starting to kill it. I am the same, so I read it late. The author writes well, please support it with a monthly ticket. This book will be fully ordered.

The title of the book is a bit strange, but the author's writing style is very good, and it doesn't look like an online novel. If the two protagonists were not traveling through time and being reborn, it would be a novel set in and outside the Shenzhen port in the 1980s. The characters are rich and the events are real and believable. After reading a few chapters, it becomes very readable.

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