Traveling at the Same Time: Sharing the Essence, Pushing Across the Heavens

What a great idea. In theory, ghosts can really appear in the pirate world, and devil fruits specially designed for ghosts can exist in theory. It can be used as a springboard to create a new pirate version of the Valley of the Gods incident. Since One Piece updated the Valley of Gods incident, no one has done it like you until now. There is a future. Catch Robin, fake history, and take advantage of the world government. I have seen similar ideas in the early years, but unfortunately it is not as good as yours. There are few updates at the moment, so keep up the good work!

It looks strange, a bit messy, and some parts don't read very smoothly. It feels like it was written in AI.

I have seen that writing about one person will not bring good results. He belongs to the standard cesspool world. The plot itself is nothing, the main line is unclear, and the strength positioning is still vague. The Eight Magic Skills are even more poisonous. One person's world is astonishing, but the performance is that a group of people learn it and are hunted down like dogs. In other worlds, if you follow the settings, you will forcefully promote someone. If you don't follow the settings, you will be disgusted by the readers attracted by one person.

The one with the highest combat power in the pirate world right now is Loki. He is a giant, proficient in three-color domineering, and his fruit power is the black dragon Nidhogg, which can transform into a 40,000-meter dragon. Kaido is like a younger brother in front of him, and he destroys the navy headquarters. The whole body is covered with domineering energy, Written by the author himself, how strong are you originally, and then the fruit is an amplifier, it should be a percentage bonus, there are only useless fruit ability users, there is no fw fruit The pirate fruit is purely a great magical power plus a special physique. Author of Bao Chaobiao

The writing of Pirates is quite innovative, at least now I know what the author is going to write after the first glance of other fics.

Defense, defense in various senses

There are problems with the plot at the beginning. It is forced to suffer and the hatred is deep. In One Piece, it has no strength and runs around the world.

After roughly reading it, the evaluation is that the author has his own ideas, and many plots are counter-conventions. It's a pity that I have an idea but my writing skills are a bit poor. I feel that the plot development has no beginning and no end, with only empty ideas and no ability to write well.

Just find a class as soon as you can answer the question

The review said that the setting drew me in, but it looked weird and the writing drove me away.

The author should improve himself. The writing style is too bad, the writing is too messy, and the chapters are too complicated. The idea is good, but the writing style is so good that it spoils it.

Others are pretty good, but the author's writing style of "Mysterious Resurrection" is not that good and the writing is messy. If you haven't read "Mysterious Resurrection", you can skip it directly. I can't understand what the author wrote. I feel that this is purely the product of the author's writing excitement. He could have written it simpler but just didn't.

Author, your writing style is really poor, but your ideas are very good.

I don't know if it's AI or self-inflicted, but it's definitely a mess.

I was a pirate at the beginning and I died. I didn't say anything, so I upgraded and the system was upgraded. I became part of the system. They introduced all my misfortunes inexplicably and then talked about a bunch of ghost locations in the horror house. Then again, it turned out that I died. There was no excessive technique at all, just like four or five novels that cut out two or three paragraphs each and then cross-infected them The author may not have paid attention to the excessive techniques in this type of novel This type of novel generally has a narrative sequence. For example, it starts with talking about Naruto and then they all enter a space. Naruto touches a pirate and enters the pirate story. After an event, he returns to the space and talks a few words back to Naruto. The main Naruto assists the pirate, touch and share, and after the story is over, go to another world If it doesn't work, just write a theme named Naruto World Konoha Village Death Forest, directly guide where it is, and then talk about the events in the Naruto world. After the event, I sit there and say: Am I so crazy about demon slayer? As expected of me, the theme of the transition is Demon Destroy the World somewhere

You are the first person who can make me see and delete books in Tongchuanliu

First of all, praise for being decisive in killing and not being completely controlled by the second brother 🙂

Why did you send the outline directly?

What a piece of trash, Awakening Overlord Color, if you want to say that you lost to the Four Emperors, I won't even scold you, Nine Snakes Island is killing people

It was very messy and I was very fascinated by it. Some of the plots were a bit incomprehensible even if I knew the original work. If I didn't know the plot of the original work, I couldn't understand what the author wrote.

The world suddenly changes, and then there is an inexplicable plot, a vague character of the protagonist in the current world, and a rambling story development. I really admire the author. He can write novels even though he is sleepwalking. I admire myself even more, and I even subscribed.

If you don't share the power, there won't be many people who can read it. Most of the authors are not good enough. I don't know why they are so stubborn.

I just want to complain about Douluo. In the original work, Moon was described as such a sane person. In your writing, is he just a brainless person who pushed out a person with the potential of an extreme Douluo?

It's messy, very messy, even messier than what AI wrote.

The second time I changed it first and then changed it, I didn't read it.

The first chapter of Douluo is a bit interesting. But the rest is not pretty, I hope it ends soon.

The writing feels a bit difficult to read, just like the golden three chapters. When the author said that it must be written well, I wanted to laugh. The large content has been condensed, and as a result, I still have to guess when I read it.

The advantage is that the creative thinking is really interesting. The disadvantage is that part of the writing is messy and too stream-of-consciousness. There is no post-war inventory part. After writing one event, it almost seamlessly transitions to the next one, which makes it a bit tiring to watch.

There is nothing wrong with sharing the essence but not the power of the same world, but it needs to be written with clear levels. For worlds with low power levels, graduation issues must be considered. For example, there is the Jin Yong Gulong martial arts world. When the strength reaches a certain level, there is basically no need to write, unless the world itself breaks through and improves to change its essence due to the reason of having too many essences. Then the world you want to write about cannot move around all the time. It is best to transition after graduation or a plot.

The fighting chapter could have been written as a small climax. He said I took a brief look. No beginning or end. The content is very bland.