Reborn at 15 Years Old, Dimensional Savior

It is written very carefully, but it is also written too carefully. Because the main line will be stretched very long by this kind of daily life that is not of much use, especially the chapters with very few protagonists, and the original family is still introduced. Under the premise that the extraordinary development of the system has been achieved, this family background is of no use at all, because it is too small. In the middle stage, the direct level of extraordinary will be different, and this trivial matter will not be brought to the table at all. If you want to show that the protagonist had a bad life in the past and has regrets, just mention it once. They all write about it, but it seems like a new author always tends to copy his original family situation. In essence, it is the catharsis of private emotions. If there are no additional family members in the subsequent plot, these introduction backgrounds are of no use in the novel and can be deleted completely. It will be released later. If it still maintains this pretentious writing style and only talks about the specific plot for a while after more than ten chapters, it will be really bad. Of course, if the author thinks that the selling point of the story is daily life, then pretend I didn't say so. I remember there used to be an author who liked to write about the daily life of childhood. He wrote about the protagonist until high school, and the content was so bad that he became a eunuch after I didn't read it. If the book has the same style, it will only be bye bye when it is released.

The writing is very good, but the emotional scenes like the girlfriend are a bit disconnected from the main plot. The part in the magic city is handled very well. They meet each other by chance and click to the end.

I went there all afternoon and my collection didn't increase, so why did one drop out? I cried to death 😭😭

The tax evasion setting is very interesting, and it can be regarded as a kind of dislocation system flow. The opening family chapter can be regarded as a complete setting. Although everyone is not interested in love and justice, this is not a deduction. The subsequent plot of eradicating rape and eradicating evil can be said to be the bus of this genre... Well, the setting is buried in the long line, giving people the illusion of showing off their skills, and then you dive into the daily line. It's still a young pull between several women. Objectively speaking, the characters of these women are quite interesting, but your plot is really not very good. Each joke has to be crammed into a set of slap-in-the-face tricks, plus a hint of "angry youth"... These are purely poisonous to the subject matter you have. Imagine that you are clearly on the path of being a god on earth. Can you really resonate with the slight offenses of ordinary people? This protagonist, sometimes confident, sometimes showing such a lack of confidence, made me speechless. The daily elements of love are fine, but you can't have an isolated plot, completely separated from the main line, and form a substantial confrontational relationship with the background setting. For readers who come here for the element of self-centeredness, you are simply not pushing the main line at all and trying your best to stuff low-quality dog ​​food. As for the love element... There is a young love story under the theme of "I can't do anything". What is the difference between this and Warhammer 40k where the golden guy and his junior high school student Bai Yueguang are different? Your setting structure has a big mine. Halfway through the development, it turns into a bad behavior of tricking dogs into killing them. This is blasphemy. I will always reserve the right to bite back. In addition, the protagonist's daily behavior is also a point of dissatisfaction. He said that before he could stop eating beef, he would have to be more careful. In reality? For the first time, the Shark Man starts by choosing his own side. It's just a second development, playing football in front of the whole school, using various abilities to show off and slap people around you... How much do you look down on state agencies? That's all.

The writing is very good, especially the youthful feeling. The protagonist felt very loving when he flirted with those little girls.

After reading only a few chapters, more than a dozen characters appear. It's too many and makes the reader dizzy.

The climax I had been waiting for for so long was cut off. You should finish writing this climax at least, and then be a eunuch! The anticipation was so high before, but now it suddenly stopped. It's so uncomfortable!

The writing is okay, but I still like the big scenes when it was released. The daily life is also good, but the plot is basically not promoted. There is a main plot in your introduction. At your progress, it's not certain whether you can defeat the Ghost King with 500 cards, let alone the Hokage behind you. If you just want to stop eating beef, the Demon Slayer level is definitely not enough. In this case, how many chapters do you plan to write? It's good for a new author to write one or two million, but if it's too long, it's easy to lose control.

Not bad 🙂 Come on, author

Hurry up and fight Chapter 180 before you fight a ghost

It's a bit dull, and the author's emotional descriptions are too straightforward. He doesn't seem to be particularly good at writing about family relationships. Based on my many years of experience in reading novels, if the author is going to sign a contract to continue this book, he must either improve his writing or find a reason to buy a family and end the relationship with the heroine.

The AI ​​picture of Han Qingmeng's image generated according to the author's description, does the author feel it is suitable? Personally, I think it's okay, mainly because the image is more elegant and the temperament is more suitable.

It's well written, but it's a pity that it hasn't been published yet. I voted for it twice a month to support it.

The theme is a bit vague. Just reading the free chapters and introduction, I thought it was rebirth + self-contained urban superpowers + youthful campus love. As a result, the painting style suddenly changed after it was put on the shelves, alien worlds invaded, and extraordinary battles took place. If I planned to write this kind of content from the beginning, then the previous free chapters would be too slow. If it is a simple rebirth + a unique urban superpower + youth campus love, then the content after it is put on the shelves is purely based on imagination. To summarize, this book is likely to collapse. If it turns to infinite later, the previous free chapters will be extremely poisonous. If it does not turn to infinite, there is a high probability that its combat power will collapse later. Because the only method is to not take the initiative to attack, to avoid relying on violence in all plots, and to prevent the collapse of combat power. Instead, violence is used as the bottom line, and the self-confidence and all-attribute advantages brought by the unique method are used to advance the plot. Simply put, it is the old antique collecting flow or the eye flow of information. In this way, it can be more "watery", I mean more "pretend" chapters, and occasionally it can be used to travel abroad and create some weird stories, which is a popular behind-the-scenes pretense. Currently, it seems that 'Tamadé has taken over the entire world with his own strength! ' This is a late-stage symptom of being too lazy to use your brain and just thinking about using your own super power.

Hurry up and have some, the magician fights the twelve ghost moons, give everyone some extraordinary shock

It seems that this novel is nothing. It is quite good. It does not become a eunuch in the middle and late stages, which can be regarded as reducing expectations.

Come on, were you hacked again yesterday?

The author is one of the few people I have seen who can combine the daily life of school and the solitary life. The daily life of youth written is actually quite good. It made me smile knowingly. I want to read it slowly. Some people say that the protagonist upgrades slowly, but you have to consider that the time in the book is only about a month. The main villain of Demon Slayer has not appeared. Only a blackened pig has appeared, and the protagonist is only 15 years old. His youth has just begun. It is understandable that his combat power does not grow so fast (although it is essentially based on the system) In the final analysis, the author has not updated enough. If you update 10,000 words a day, the protagonist will grow much faster, and readers will enjoy reading it.

Not bad, okay, not bad

If it's not on the shelves, just show me this. That cadre can't see so much and tells you that the monthly ticket is gone! ! !

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