Reborn at 15: Savior of the Dimensions

It is written very carefully, but it is also written too carefully. Because the main line will be stretched very long by this kind of daily life that is not of much use, especially the chapters with very few protagonists, and the original family is still introduced. Under the premise that the extraordinary development of the system has been achieved, this family background is of no use at all, because it is too small. In the middle stage, the direct level of extraordinary will be different, and this trivial matter will not be brought to the table at all. If you want to show that the protagonist had a bad life in the past and has regrets, just mention it once. They all write about it, but it seems like a new author always tends to copy his original family situation. In essence, it is the catharsis of private emotions. If there are no additional family members in the subsequent plot, these introduction backgrounds are of no use in the novel and can be deleted completely. It will be released later. If it still maintains this pretentious writing style and only talks about the specific plot for a while after more than ten chapters, it will be really bad. Of course, if the author thinks that the selling point of the story is daily life, then pretend I didn't say so. I remember there used to be an author who liked to write about the daily life of childhood. He wrote about the protagonist until high school, and the content was so bad that he became a eunuch after I didn't read it. If the book has the same style, it will only be bye bye when it is released.

The writing is very good, but the emotional scenes like the girlfriend are a bit disconnected from the main plot. The part in the magic city is handled very well. They meet each other by chance and click to the end.

I went there all afternoon and my collection didn't increase, so why did one drop out? I cried to death 😭😭

The climax I had been waiting for for so long was cut off. You should finish writing this climax at least, and then be a eunuch! The anticipation was so high before, but now it suddenly stopped. It's so uncomfortable!

The writing is very good, especially the youthful feeling. The protagonist felt very loving when he flirted with those little girls.

The tax evasion setting is very interesting, and it can be regarded as a kind of dislocation system flow. The opening family chapter can be regarded as a complete setting. Although everyone is not interested in love and justice, this is not a deduction. The subsequent plot of eradicating rape and eradicating evil can be said to be the bus of this genre... Well, the setting is buried in the long line, giving people the illusion of showing off their skills, and then you dive into the daily line. It's still a young pull between several women. Objectively speaking, the characters of these women are quite interesting, but your plot is really not very good. Each joke has to be crammed into a set of slap-in-the-face tricks, plus a hint of "angry youth"... These are purely poisonous to the subject matter you have. Imagine that you are clearly on the path of being a god on earth. Can you really resonate with the slight offenses of ordinary people? This protagonist, sometimes confident, sometimes showing such a lack of confidence, made me speechless. The daily elements of love are fine, but you can't have an isolated plot, completely separated from the main line, and form a substantial confrontational relationship with the background setting. For readers who come here for the element of self-centeredness, you are simply not pushing the main line at all and trying your best to stuff low-quality dog ​​food. As for the love element... There is a young love story under the theme of "I can't do anything". What is the difference between this and Warhammer 40k where the golden guy and his junior high school student Bai Yueguang are different? Your setting structure has a big mine. Halfway through the development, it turns into a bad behavior of tricking dogs into killing them. This is blasphemy. I will always reserve the right to bite back. In addition, the protagonist's daily behavior is also a point of dissatisfaction. He said that before he could stop eating beef, he would have to be more careful. In reality? For the first time, the Shark Man starts by choosing his own side. It's just a second development, playing football in front of the whole school, using various abilities to show off and slap people around you... How much do you look down on state agencies? That's all.

The writing is okay, but I still like the big scenes when it was released. The daily life is also good, but the plot is basically not promoted. There is a main plot in your introduction. At your progress, it's not certain whether you can defeat the Ghost King with 500 cards, let alone the Hokage behind you. If you just want to stop eating beef, the Demon Slayer level is definitely not enough. In this case, how many chapters do you plan to write? It's good for a new author to write one or two million, but if it's too long, it's easy to lose control.

After reading only a few chapters, more than a dozen characters appear. It's too many and makes the reader dizzy.

The AI ​​picture of Han Qingmeng's image generated according to the author's description, does the author feel it is suitable? Personally, I think it's okay, mainly because the image is more elegant and the temperament is more suitable.

Hurry up and fight Chapter 180 before you fight a ghost