My Spiritual Roots Are over 100 Million Points

I generally don't comment on the works of other authors, but when I saw your girlfriend advertising my book, I thought that sincerity is rare in the current environment, so I clicked in and took a look. If it's well written, I'll recommend it to my readers. But I have to say, you have a big problem. I am not qualified to comment too much, but your introduction makes people have no desire to read it. It is not like an introduction, but a preliminary outline for people to appreciate. Just from the introduction, I can guess that your writing quality is very poor. After clicking on the text, I was a little disappointed. If you only have good writing skills, the text has a story, and you have your own aura, it's okay to say... Let me ask you frankly, did you type these words yourself? I have seen AI scraps next door. Your taste is too strong. I really want to believe that your girlfriend knows nothing about your novels, but after reading the text, I really doubt whether you have a girlfriend. You cannot see the expression of the author in your words. In layman's terms, it is impersonal. If you really have a girlfriend and let her know that you write novels, but what she works so hard to promote is just a perfunctory work generated by AI, then are you letting her down a bit?

Not to mention how well the author writes, I am very envious of the author for having such a girlfriend 🙂

If it's true, it's true love... As a newbie, the author's writing style is qualified, the plot description is very smooth, and there is no problem in changing the perspective. However, the plot is relatively old-fashioned, and the title and introduction are not attractive enough. After reading a few chapters, there is no hook that hooks people to continue reading...🤔

The introduction and title of the book feel like they are hopeless. None of the Star Rings I have read in the past 12 years or so have been like this. This introduction is purely for dissuasion. The story plot is too cliche and the characters' behaviors are too stereotyped. I don't think anyone can be attracted by the revival of spiritual energy and the return of a dragon king. Of course, if you trick people into it, there may be some novices who can continue reading. After all, readers still have inertia. Polish the introduction first, if you really want to write it. If you really want to write about this subject, a spiritual energy recovery plus a timeline, you can look at a similar plot from the book about the magic girl who is dictatorial for eternity. Using his writing style, the first chapter, if it has to be a humiliating start, I will just break off the engagement mode. I never thought that I was actually Xiao Yan. The rendering of the scene and the integration of the situation are very important, especially the first few chapters. The title and introduction of the book include the first few chapters. I will read it again in the next few days and try to write more. This book is probably useless, but you can practice it. I envy your girlfriend who is so supportive of you (not chicken belly, your girlfriend has clearly expressed support for one of your careers and expressed support for your interests, which is relatively rare, that is to say, the communication between you is relatively smooth, and then there may be some topics to talk about, which shows that the relationship between you is very good, and you may be more tolerant of each other in the process of life). When I see a young couple who likes each other and is about to get married, of course my brother supports it. She supports you very much and hopes that you can go on forever and have a happy wedding (in advance).

Your girlfriend is so nice, I've seen her several times

Let's write it first. If there aren't even ten pictures, I can't see the problem.

I thought this genre was old-fashioned 10 years ago, let alone now.

I have also written novels, and the criterion for signing a contract is to see the natural influx of readers, not to pull them in this way. The editor can see whether there is a natural flow of follow-up readers, and use this as a criterion to decide whether to sign a contract. If you do this now, the editor will pass it as soon as he sees it.

Madam, you don't want your boyfriend's books to be read by no one, right? 😏 Don't look back, I am you... 🪖

The story is a bit old-fashioned, and the characters are quite stereotyped. Characters are not black and white. What everyone likes to see is the growth of the characters and the diversity and contradictions of the protagonists and supporting characters. It is recommended to improve it

When newbies write novels, don't push the power of the world view too high. Otherwise, you won't be able to grasp it. Also, read this introduction. It's too fake, too empty, and too self-centered. You must understand that whether it's a novel or reality, it cannot function normally without one person. Otherwise, it will appear that the protagonist is too intellectual and extremely conceited.

This introduction is invincible, I don't want to read it at all, and it only has 10,000 words, so what can I do?

I am a bit eager for quick success. If I want to become a qualified online writer, I must at least write a completed online article with more than one million words.

It is recommended that the title should be changed. It starts with spiritual energy recovery. This is a template from many years ago. It will make people feel cliche at the beginning. In addition, the chaotic body is the constitution and the spiritual root is the talent. Logically speaking, these two cannot be confused. Even if you have your own logic, it should not change everyone's conventional understanding. Just like the classical cultivation of immortality starts from refining Qi and building foundation, or it is called refining essence and Qi...

This book is a must-read, but if the author really wants to develop in this direction, he can use it as a practice. First, introduce the big problems. The first is too ancient and too childish. The second is too long. You have not thought clearly about what the selling point of your book is and what you want to write. At present, this book has not been criticized. On the one hand, no one has pure love for it. On the other hand, many people do not want to read your content.

Come on, write a million-word online article first. Anyway, if you don't have perseverance, you won't be able to eat online articles. And being prepared to write millions of words is also the psychological preparation of a street writer.

The writing is a bit too young, and it feels like you polished it with AI. To be honest, even if you revised it later, it still has a strong AI flavor. This is also mentioned by Seal Boss. Now the editors have an internal AI detection system, and 99% of them can detect it. Once found, they are thrown directly into the trash can. Most editors hate AI. The plot is a bit old. Take a look at the books on the ranking list and study their construction and recycling. That is to say, take apart the book. If you can't stand it, just change it to another one. Reading about thirty chapters in one book is enough. Look for the introduction that is similar to the one on the ranking list. Take it as a reference. Now you are just confused by the outline, so please scan the rankings more often. This line of work is quite tiring, and it's not as profitable as in previous years. It's good to be a part-timer without any results after signing a contract. It's okay to practice writing without signing a contract. If that girlfriend is real, then I wish you a happy marriage...

You can change the beginning. This beginning is easy to persuade.

Being attracted, if nothing else, collect it and support Mianwei

The environment in the comment area is very good, which is rare to see

Please change the introduction. I don't want to read it after reading the introduction.

If this is your first book, then the writing is okay But if you really want to talk about the content, generally how to put it... The mainstream nowadays is actually not very popular. This kind of thing is hit in the head by reality at the beginning, and then the male protagonist is really cowardly and chooses to give in in the face of life (just like what was said above, this kind of The writing method is too old), you may say that this is the behavior of normal people, but since you want to write the protagonist, it is impossible for him to really follow the process of normal people. What is the protagonist? It is all kinds of abilities, all kinds of slaps in the face or headwinds or direct crushing. In other words, you have problems at the beginning, and you have a fan base. I would say that it may be because you want to suppress your desire first and give him more patience, but when people see you as a newcomer, they just read it twice and feel that it is not to their liking. Especially when the protagonist's original girlfriend broke up due to practical reasons, most people left the book when they saw that the male protagonist really didn't pursue him. To put it bluntly, I feel that this book I jumped on the book... If you are really determined to write online articles, just use this book as an exercise to practice your writing and plotting, and even if you are lucky, your performance in signing the contract will definitely be average Also, the plot arrangements such as slaps in the face are a bit old-fashioned. This thing requires reading more books, there is no other way