Head Road: Top of White Mountain

If it doesn't work, just use this article to practice, attract some loyal fans, and then use this setting framework to rewrite an article. It's not a waste. I think the author is very capable. As for the outline, just cover it a little here and there, and then do the beanbag analysis.

After reading it, I have to say that in Lao Qi's "Book Friends Are Insufferable", you are this 👍

It would be too easy to eunuch if you just generate electricity for love.

It was a smooth read, with new ways and new ideas. I look forward to signing the contract.

How many book lovers are reading it now? I'm afraid I won't be able to continue like this without positive feedback from the author.

I don't know what to say, I'm a repeater

The author could write more about treasure hunting and land reclamation in secret areas. This part is much more interesting 🙂

Without Qi Xiu, and not planning to participate in stealing babies, let's see how the author comes up with new ideas.

A little suggestion, Qi Xiu had some interactions with Chu Hongshang only after becoming a golden elixir, and those little woman looks only came later. Nowadays, Chu and Qin are the vassals of more than ten people who are practicing Qi. Chu should not say a word to them. In the early stage, we should write more about Chu Duo, such as raising a banner to steal the baby, Chu Hong talks too much, and feels easy to talk, and Nascent Soul is angry, and laying the foundation is considered a fool.

There is no contract and no traffic. I hope the author will persist. It seems that Zhang Minglu wrote hundreds of chapters before signing the contract.

There's a lot of traffic over there, maybe it'll have a miraculous effect.

1. Chapter 16 mentioned that the masters of the Yushoumen Enclave are usually companion beasts in the late Golden Core stage + early Nascent Soul stage, but Wei Tong's companion beast is the Crazy Jiao in the late Golden Core stage. The book explains that the Southern Chu Clan and the Chu Qin Clan were placed at Heihe Peak to avoid contact with the Yushoumen Enclave, because the masters of the Yushumen Enclave are usually Golden Core + Nascent Soul Companion Beasts. The enclave's leader is treated as a Golden Core, but not as a Nascent Soul, making it difficult to interact with them. But in the end, Wei Tong's companion beast was actually a late-stage golden elixir, so just treat Wei Tong like a golden elixir. Then this reason is directly contradictory and needs to be revised. 2. Chapter Thirteen explains that except for Qin Weiyu, the other nine people who went south were all alone, without any fetters in the world. Qi Xiudu became the leader and moved south. The old leader was a son of his family. After being the leader for decades, it is impossible that all the mortals named Qi in the Chu Qin Clan's territory would die, right? No one came with you? The other eight people were all young people in their teens and twenties who had children at home, and their parents were only in their forties or fifties. How could it be possible that all their parents were dead? Even if your parents are dead, what about your other relatives? What about other tribesmen? All the immortal masters in the family moved south, and it was impossible for mortals with the same surname not to follow them. However, after moving south, the mortals of these nine surnames were gone. Qi Xiuhuang and Gu Ji directly lost their descendants. Only the other six got married and had children to pass on the bloodline. When Chu Wuying was a few years old, Chu Duo said that his parents also passed away. Why is Lao Qiba written as if when a monk is born to a mortal, not only the monk's parents will die, but even other clan members with your surname will die, and the monk is written like a lone star in the sky. Otherwise, it cannot be explained that there are so few monks in the Chu Qin Clan, but the nine people who moved south are all alone, without worldly concerns. 3. The Pei family blames the Chu family for the death of Mr. Pei, who was a treasure hunter. The Pei family and the Chu family have been on good terms for at least hundreds of years. Chu Hongshang and Pei Wen were childhood best friends, and even their lives were willing to be informed. The two families basically have a good relationship with each other for building foundations and practicing qi. Mr. Pei and the Chu family died together while hunting for treasures. It is okay for the Pei family to blame the Chu family, and it is understandable, but However, the Pei family ended up personally. From the head of the family in the early Yuanying stage, to the Chu family who was directly fighting against the two Yuanyings in the golden elixir foundation building and Qi training, the first conspiracy was ruined by Guigu. They still refused to give up, and the two Chus turned into three Chus. They still wanted to fight against the Chu family to the end. The Pei family was only a family in the early Yuanying stage, and their core ally was the Gao family in the early Yuanying stage. How could they have the confidence? Is it too irrational for a family that has been inherited for thousands of years to blindly become a mortal enemy of a former friendly force that is stronger than itself mainly because of the marriage relationship of the family leader hundreds of years ago? 4. It is mentioned in the book that occasionally some monks will see images of themselves as babies, so aren't those who steal babies afraid of this happening among the babies they steal? 5. In the first battle of Shandu Mountain, Wei Tong agreed to let Huo Hu, who was less than 68 years old in the late stage of foundation building, challenge Si Wenguang of Jindan. Is this necessary? For Wei Tong, Huo Hu Golden Pill is definitely more useful than Foundation Establishment. Wei Tong has lived hundreds of years. He doesn't know that if Huo Hu fights Golden Pill Si Wenguang in the later stage of Foundation Establishment, Huo Hu will definitely be seriously injured even if he wins? Serious injury will affect the formation of pills. Therefore, there is absolutely no need for Wei Tong to let Huo Hu fight Si Wenguang at this time. Let Huo Hu form an elixir first. For a genius like Huo Hu, the normal probability of forming an elixir is very high. The Huo Hu after forming the elixir will definitely be more useful than the Huo Hu who built the foundation. 6. When a new Nascent Soul appears in the Chu family, they will participate in the opening war and enfeoff them. Doesn't this weaken the power of the Chu family? The first is to suffer casualties from participating in the opening war, the second is to spread one's own strength, and the third is not to worry that if the Chu family's Yuanying dies and there is no successor Yuanying, Chu Yunfeng will be lost by then? Moreover, only the fourth-level spiritual land is enough to be entrusted. Even if Chu Yunfeng's core fifth-level spiritual land is only enough for one Nascent Soul to practice, there are many fourth-level spiritual lands nearby that are enough for cultivation, and they can also obtain spiritual lands for training like other Nascent Souls joining the General Service Peak. Previously, the Gao family, the Pei family, and the Lu family all had dual souls and could stay in the Qiyun sect. Why is it that you, the Chu family, can't stay in the Qiyun sect and have to be enfeoffed? 7. Why did Lian Shuimen join the Qiyun faction? If you don't want to be a good Baishan Yiba, you don't want the fourth-level cultivation city or the vast territory, but you will go and be a dog in Qi Yun's third-level spiritual land? What is the reason? It's not like Minato has no successor. At that time, Old Man Shui said that he still had three hundred years to live. Three hundred years is enough for a person to live from birth to giving birth to a baby. Therefore, Old Man Shui still had plenty of time to wait for the Nascent Soul Seed to appear behind Minato, and to wait until he still had a few decades left in his life. 8. The book says that Chu Zhen and Lu Yunzi, who were about the same age in the late Yuanying period, competed with each other for the position of leader, but Chu Zhen died when Qi Xiu was 86 years old. However, as of this book, Qi Xiu is already over 300 years old, and Lu Yunzi is still alive and kicking. There is an age difference of more than 200 years. Even if he is Yuanying, This gap is not small 9. Chu Shentong said when Chu asked about Yuanying that Lan Li was a little younger than Chu Hongshang. In the middle stage of Yuanying, the head of the Qiyun Sect basically belongs to him, but the head of the Qiyun Sect also requested to be in the late Yuanying stage. Aren't you afraid that Lan Li would not have broken through to the late Yuanying stage when Lu Yunzi died? It is a very common phenomenon to be the master of the monk realm, so how did Lan Li basically determine the position of leader in the middle stage of Nascent Soul? 10. What do those Jindan forces who start a war and want to establish a sect think? Take the nine families of Jiuxingfang as an example. Each family is a late-stage Jindan sect master + several Jindan forces. They are at least a formal cultivation family. So what was their motivation to join the war? After the opening, there will only be a third-level spiritual land + territory + formal sect. However, there are many third-level spiritual lands in this cultivation world. If they want to grab it, they can find a place to grab it. There are a lot of third-level spiritual lands in Baishan, and the third-level low-grade Kongqu Mountain, Luo Mountain, Shandu Mountain, etc. The book also mentioned that there are many third-level spiritual lands in the Lingmu League and the Dan League. A foundation-building family in the Wei family can occupy the third-level Baisha Mountain, so it is very easy for these Jindan families to grab a third-level spiritual land. , There is absolutely no need to start a war to fight life and death. Jin Dan Wei Tong joined forces with Wei Xuan. There are only three Jin Dan in total. Didn't they just grab the third level of Shandu Mountain? The biggest benefit is that the official cultivator family has become an official sect, but for them, it is actually just ordinary, because the mortals are basically still the mortals of their original family. Another advantage is the third-generation protection, but if you have a few golden elixir forces occupying a third-level mountain gate, if you don't blindly increase your enemies, generally no one will come to rob you. Yan Nanxing also said that in order to open up the war, many people died, even many friends who came to help. The Lingmu Alliance lost two golden elixirs. It can be seen that the casualties in the opening up war were still very large. The article also mentioned that after the war, the Danqing Alliance changed to Danqing Mountain, and their original territory was traded with others (the one who could buy this spiritual land was considered a big force, but this power was never mentioned later, and Lao Qi simply forgot about it). A territory that can produce one Nascent Soul and several golden elixirs is at least a good third-level spiritual land. Why don't the nine families of Jiuxingfang buy this? There is no need to participate in the opening war. 11. What was the motivation for Shi Wanqi and other predecessors of the Yushou Sect to leave the Yushou Sect and live alone? Not to mention that it is easy to enjoy the shade under the big tree. If you go out to live alone, you will definitely not have a fifth-level spiritual land. So when the time comes, your descendants will have babies, and will they eventually join a certain big force? Just like Swanqi, what's the use of running out to open up the Iron Wind Islands? In the future, when future generations have to have babies, won't they still have to seek refuge with Haidong Island, Bingyuan Island or Qiyun Sect? These thighs are not as thick as the Beast Yumen, not to mention that Shi Wanqi also mentioned that many forces have separated from the Beast Yumen over the years and then collapsed (such as the Wei family of Wei Tong), so it would be better not to come out from the Beast Yumen and live alone. 12. A foundation-building pill and a third-level spiritual stone. Huang Shaoneng, an intermediate spiritual cultivation monk in the late stage of Qi training, can earn one foundation-building pill a year. The Chu Qin Sect can earn a lot of third-level spiritual stones in a year by farming in the second-level spiritual land of Xianlin Ao. Old Chu can earn some third-level spiritual stones in a year by farming in the third-level spiritual land of Qinshan, right? How could it be possible to collect a lot of things and sell this and that just for a foundation-building pill? 13. There are at least five of the people who have had their lives canceled in the book - Qi Xiu, Zhang Shishi, Chu Huixin, Chu Wuying, and Shan Nuo. They are basically all cultivation geniuses with only one spiritual root and one life. Moreover, many people have had their lives canceled because their life level is too high and they can't find a companion. According to this probability, this A lot of people in the world of cultivation have lost their lives. If they can't practice, it will be a great loss for the family and the sect. Chu Huixin and a Jindan monk from the Yuanying family can create exercises for those who have lost their lives to practice. More other sects, more families, and more geniuses will definitely be able to create more and better skills, but this is not mentioned in the book. 14. Except for the Five Elements Spiritual Root + Beast Spiritual Root + Instrument Spiritual Root + Thunder Spiritual Root + Wind Spiritual Root, there are no other spiritual roots mentioned in the book, so what spiritual root is Chu Wuying's black and white air mass? What is the spiritual root of the star? What kind of spiritual root is the sun and the moon? What are the spiritual roots of Jade Crane's nine-headed jade seed and invisible life? This is the basic setting of a book, but it is not written in detail 15. Yuhe has a nine-headed jade seed natal life, and an invisible natal life, so Yuhe basically has two natal lives and two spiritual roots. This cultivation talent is similar to that of Qin Changfeng , you must know that when Qi Xiu was slaying demons in the open sea, the children he took with him all had single natal souls and single spiritual roots or double natal souls and single spiritual roots. In other words, Yuhe's dual natal souls and double spiritual roots talents were not noticed by Lao Qi when he was slaying demons in the outer seas, let alone the powerful beast control sect. But when Qi Xiu was 90 years old, he met Huo Hu in Youtan. The article mentioned that Huo Hu was less than 120 years old. Huo Hu was about the same age as Yu He and was his childhood playmate. When Qi Xiu was a hundred years old, Yu He was in the late stage of the Golden Elixir, and Yu He was about 130 years old. The late stage of the golden elixir for a 130-year-old with dual natal and spiritual roots? Qi Xiu was only at the eighth level of the Golden Elixir at the age of 285. He was just in the late stage of the Golden Elixir. Chu Wuying reached the Golden Elixir level at the age of 246, and Jiang Yan reached the Golden Elixir at the age of 186. Yuhe gave birth to a baby when Qi Xiu was 187 years old, and Yuhe was about 217 years old at this time. Qi Xiu, Wuying, and Jiang Yan were all cultivation geniuses with one natal life and one spiritual root, but they were blown away by Yuhe who had two natal lives and two spiritual roots. 16. Why didn't Qi Xiu ask Chu Duo if he could teach Chu Huixin's principles of knowing one's mind and seeing one's nature and Chu Huixin's principles of seeking good fortune and avoiding misfortune to Zhang Shishi in his sect? Back then, Qi Xiu did secret things for Nanchu Clan and saved Chu Duo. He had a great contribution. Don't tell me that Qi Xiu didn't even dare to ask? How do you know if it works without asking? At the beginning, they even dared to ask Chu Duo if he could let Bai Xiaosheng go. This was a matter of great importance to Qi Xiu's good brother Zhang Shishi. Shan Nuo knows how to ask Chu Duo in his practice, but why not ask when it is Zhang Shishi's turn? 17. Say this world of cultivation is not important. At least nine of the eight realms in the Upper Realm came to open it with Law Fire and Justice Ghost. Say this world of cultivation is important. According to the book, after countless years, less than 1% of this world has been opened. Are the people in the Upper Realm just doing it for a living? After so many years, not to mention completely opening up this world, at least we can open up this world to some extent, right? The result is only 1%, and you can't even touch the fish in the eight gates. 18. The Liuyun Sect, Hehuaguan, and Huangzuo Zhan Family (the official Xiuzhen family) occupied Qinshan in Lao Chu and merged and renamed themselves Liuhua Sect. The Liu family annexed the Zhenlin Gate, and then He used a method to get the Zhenlin Sect's surviving family members to transfer the sect's name to him and change the name to Zhenlin Sect. It was rumored that the successor leader of the Zhenlin Sect was greedy for life and feared death, so he offered to transfer the name, and the Liu family did not intimidate him. The transfer has been peaceful for a long time. (It was later discovered by the Dazhou Academy that the Liu family had coerced the Zhenlin Sect to take over as head of the sect and stole and occupied the sect, so the Liu family was punished) So it can be seen that as long as both parties are sincere, a non-sect force can completely let another sect transfer the sect name to itself. However, the purpose of many forces participating in the war is to formalize the sect name. How many forces fight to the death for a sect name, resulting in heavy casualties. But such a big loophole shows that if you want a formal sect name, you only need to find a declining sect (a bunch of declining sects such as Chu Qin Clan, Qingxi Mountain, Baisha Gang, etc.). It is completely feasible for both parties to trade sincerely and with sufficient benefits to make the other party willingly transfer the sect name to you. There is no need to participate in the opening war and kill a lot of people. This is another unreasonable place. 19. Where does this spiritual stone in the world of cultivation come from? In other novels, the spiritual land is generally the spiritual land, and the spiritual stone mine is the spiritual stone mine. The two are separate, but in this book the spiritual stone is in the spiritual land. If you want the spiritual stone, you have to destroy the spiritual land and mine it. This book has written more than two million words. The mining activities mentioned so far include the Chu Qin Sect's digging of two abandoned spiritual lands, Tianyin Mountain and Shandu Mountain, as well as a little digging on the Danmeng border. (The Yushoumen who sells shrimp camel beasts also said that other shrimp camel beasts will be sold to other places far away) The fact that they dug a little bit at the Danmeng border and was scolded by others to cut off their descendants shows that this cultivation world is not a ruined spiritual land, and it is impossible for most forces to mine. So the question is, where do so many spiritual stones in circulation come from? Just relying on the ruined spiritual land, isn't that a drop in the bucket? 20. Which family of Yuhe is never mentioned in the book. The book explains that Yuhe and Huo Hu of the Huo family of the Yuanying family are playmates who grew up together. His companion beast is the rare fifth-level invisible crane. The invisible crane is the companion beast of Yuhe and also the Tongshen (invisible life). Tongshen is needed for Qi training. How can ordinary forces have a fifth-level invisible crane for Qi training? So it stands to reason that Yuhe was of noble origin, and was most likely a Nascent Soul force, but there is no explanation in the book 21. The Waihai branch protected by the Pei family for three generations pursued Sha Nuo. The reason stated to the outside world was that he saw Sha Nuo snooping near his sect, so he pursued him. However, the Pei family met Sha Nuo near the island where Qin Weiyu stayed. It was thousands of miles away from the island where the Pei family was entrusted. As long as Qi Xiu casually used the Heavenly Order to sue the Pei family, the Pei family would not be able to stop the mind-reading. If found out, the Pei family would definitely be punished, and the protection of three generations of enfeoffment would be gone. Such a huge loophole, so how could the Pei family's offshore branch dare to pursue Sha Nuo one hundred and eight thousand miles away from their fiefdom? This reason is definitely untenable, because then all the sects protected by the three generations of confederations can go out of the sect to kill people at will, and just make up a random reason for killing people: because the other party was snooping near my sect and I found them, so I killed them. That would make them invincible. From now on, all the sects protected by the three generations of enfeoffments can now go out and kill people without being punished. It was okay for the Pei family to kill Sha Nuo when they saw him at first. As long as his hands and feet were clean and no one discovered him, it would be fine. However, the book states that the pursuit lasted for a long time and was far away. Many passers-by saw him on the road. They still dared to continue the pursuit. Are the people of the Pei family all idiots? 22. Why didn't you go to the Death Swamp before going to the depths of the Baishan Mountains and the Awakening Lion Valley? In the past, the depths of the Baishan Mountain and the Awakening Lion Valley must be connected to the Death Swamp. During the Battle of the White Mountain in Chapter 426, the Golden Elixir monks who were transporting goods could take the Death Swamp from the north and fly to the Nine Houses of Jiuxingfang (that is, the original Deepness of the Baishan Mountain) in one go. Chapter 474 stated that the third-level shuttles directly took the Death Swamp from the Jiuxingfang to the Chu Qin Gate, so the Golden Elixir Nascent Soul didn't just fly there? Is it necessary to go to Jiuxingfang and Moyunling to Xingshi Valley? To the north of Awakening Lion Valley is Jiuxingfang, and to the south is Manniu Wasteland. What about the east and west? There is a high probability that it is also a death swamp. Why can't it be bypassed from the east or west? 23. How did the Xing Family, the leader of the Law Enforcement Peak, only have dozens of monks? The number of monks is mainly related to the number of mortals. If there are more mortals, there will naturally be more monks. Xing Mian is at least long live. For so many years, the mortals of the Xing family have not lacked living space, and there have been no wars. I don't know how many thousands of people should be reproduced. How can there be only a few dozen monks in total? There are dozens of monks, and the number of mortals in your family may only be around 10,000. How could it be so few? Unless the Xing family is very strict in running the family, and the mortals of the Xing family will be killed as long as they make a small mistake, such as killing those who fight, killing those who lie, the Xing family kills absolutely most of the mortals, otherwise it cannot be explained that the Xing family has only dozens of monks in total after so many years of reproduction.

The writing skills are very good, surprise surprise

Well written, good luck to the author!

A good book that continues the style of Zhangmenlu! Under the framework of the original world view, it is also unique and the plot is reversed, which makes people's eyes bright. It is highly recommended!

The writing is good. Can you continue writing like the leader?

Come on, once you sign the contract, I will give you extra rewards for all your orders.

The writing skills are not bad, but it is difficult to sign fanfics. I suggest you use this book as a practice book, and then draw on Lao Qi's world view to write a story. After Xuanjian became popular, Chu Sheng's performance in borrowing the worldview has almost caught up with Xuanjian. If Xuanjian's update was too slow, there was no reference for the later plots, and if you don't jump in the later stage, the performance will probably be improved to a higher level.

Fans who have a lot of gains and losses in their fandoms might as well just use the various settings of Zhangmenlu to write the stories they want to write.

Is it possible to make up for the protagonist's regret of not becoming a Nascent Soul faster by following the author's progress? At first glance, I feel that the progress is much faster than that of Lao Qi at the same time. But when I think about it, I have only reached the eighth level of Qi refining. There are still many hurdles.

I hope if you persist, you should be able to succeed

The author insists on writing, and this writing style has the potential to become a god.

It's very interesting to watch, and the narrative frame of the game is relatively smooth and orderly. However, to be honest, readers who have never seen the game will feel that the progress is too fast, and the main line is not very prominent, and the contradictions are not obvious. Another point is that the portrayal of the supporting characters is too thin, lacking detailed descriptions of psychology and behavior. It is recommended that the pace be slowed down, the descriptions of cultivation, life and companions be enriched, and conflicts be highlighted through fighting and disputes to increase the interest of the novel. Otherwise, it will be difficult to attract other casual fans by relying solely on the farming management narrative. Support the author, come on!

I really can't stand talking about Go every day anymore. What's the point of moving in many modern things here? In fact, it won't cause any big sensation at all. Isn't the Tianlimen doing what you are doing? The government has everything, but what happens in the world of cultivation! We Baishan people don't care about it at all.

Because of the leadership position, I love the house and the bird, and say a few words. First, there is too little description of the psychological activities and thoughts of the characters in the book, and the character's personality is not developed. Secondly, the author thinks that the protagonist is too smart, and he always feels like he has everything under control. You have to think about it, why are those who have lived for hundreds of years lagging behind you, who have lived for more than 30 years? This world and the previous one might be a more advanced civilization than ours! Our current civilization is just Confucianism + science.

Great, this book has the potential to be a second one.

Like, come on, rewrite a complete guide to becoming a leader

Personally, I think it's better to read a book where the main character doesn't have too many cheats.