Become Stronger Starting from Linking Creatures

I will write it with all my heart, because I will never give up if I love it.

Many people choose whether to read a book mainly based on the introduction. Your introduction will make people pass at a glance. Generally speaking, the introduction should not describe what the protagonist did, etc., But mainly introduce the world view in general, and it must be able to capture the reader's heart. Generally, when I see the introduction of the protagonist in the introduction, I feel that this book is not suitable for reading, and the writing is not good enough. When the protagonist appears, you should create an eye-catching plot for him to appear, instead of just talking a lot of nonsense in the introduction. Secondly, don't use idioms if you can. Your introduction gives me the feeling that this book is not well written, but it also uses a lot of idioms, which makes the reader feel very embarrassed, and there are many words. This is an online novel. You need to make people understand what you are writing at once, rather than using some idioms and words to highlight your literary level. A good novel can make people understand what you are writing. People are involved in the plot instead of piling up words. Some idioms used in the wrong scene and content will pull the reader out of the plot at once, which is very embarrassing. For example, in your introduction, the world is paradoxical to the earth. The application of paradox lies in truth and falsehood, right and wrong, and essence. What you obviously want to express here is a similar meaning, but your use of this idiom is a wrong sentence. I was very embarrassed after reading the introduction. My suggestions for you: 1. In the introduction, give a general introduction to the world view. Don't be detailed, but have a sense of mystery. The protagonist should not appear in the introduction; 2. Try not to use idioms and some uncommon words in the article to highlight the writing level. Articles written by Qidian Platinum writers rarely use idioms and uncommon words. , Even if it is used, it should be applied to the appropriate scene so that it does not feel abrupt when reading. If words or idioms are used in the wrong scene, it will be embarrassing to read. No matter how exciting the plot is, it will not be read if it cannot be integrated into it; I have only read the introduction at the moment, and the introduction has persuaded me to quit. After you modify the introduction, I will give you new suggestions after reading the content.

No, buddy, you just gave up now, but no one is reading. I came out of the darkness of the desperate situation and saw you asking people to look around. Whether it is your main job or your side job, the number of words you have written is too few. There may be a mature rule in the Internet literature industry. The more words you write, the better your results will be. If you give up at the beginning, there is nothing wrong with it.

I saw a new author, so let's read the book👍

If you don't follow 4000 every day, how can Qidian sign a contract with you? Let it go every other day, and people won't bother you at 7 o'clock. If the author doesn't have the most basic serialization ability, people won't look at you. The writing is mediocre and I didn't understand it. I went to scan the new book list and get some insights.

Let's revise the introduction first. It seems that you want to put everything you want to write in, but it is too long and too complicated. A good introduction only has two points, it is concise and eye-catching, rather than a hodgepodge. Believe me, even if someone reads this book and sees the long introduction, they will be too lazy to read it. If they really don't know how to write it, just think of two points, grasp the theme and set up suspense. If the name is the face of a book, then the introduction is the clothes he wears. No matter how good-looking a person is, if his clothes are smelly and tattered, no one will be willing to get close to him. In the same way, this hodgepodge-like introduction can also dissuade some people from reading this book, and it is definitely not a small number.

After reading it, it's obvious that the author's writing style is good and the details are well drawn, but it just doesn't look good enough. In fact, there's only one reason for this: there are too few routines. Don't underestimate those bad routines, that's the key to a good writing! The main reason why cool articles look cool is because these routines are at work. A simple example: When the protagonist is bullied, the reader expects the protagonist to fight back. When the protagonist fights back, the reader feels happy. When the protagonist is looked down upon, the reader hopes that the protagonist will slap those who look down on him in the face. If the slap is successful, the reader feels happy. These are relatively common and bad routines. Although they are bad, they have been tried and true.

It was confusing at first, with suspense and environment. Goldfinger should at least have some attractive points. The characters should be more fleshed out, it's better to determine the main character, and it's better to write less about the bad jokes about the newcomers at the beginning.

May I ask, the author, when will this work of yours be put on the shelves? Namo Amitabha Congratulations on getting rich Health and longevity All good luck 🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻

The ads are everywhere, it's disgusting. Just like the little stickers on telephone poles. You deserve to be thrown into the street. It is at least normal for you to focus on writing a book instead of advertising.

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After reading the golden first chapter, I would like to express my opinion as a reader: The author's advantage is that he has the skills of line drawing and can also exaggerate the atmosphere. But the disadvantage is that it is not very good at telling stories. The first chapter only explains the situation of the protagonist, traveling to a world with Double Suns, being hunted, holding an egg in his hand, and his companion is dead. The reader has not yet taken on the role, has not yet empathized with the character, and lacks a clear and compelling plot, so the plot is eagerly launched. As a result, it looks very boring. My personal suggestion is to start the chapter by escaping, that's fine, but you need to explain clearly who the protagonist is, what his identity is, what his purpose is, why he ran for his life, and what kind of persecution he suffered? This builds empathy with readers. At the same time, the amount of information is so confusing, escape from the white building, egg. I understand it is a foreshadowing, but 😥 in the early stage it is better to create some small foreshadowing that can be used immediately and detonated. Most people will not be able to persist in the subsequent chapters. Come on, author.

If you look at it from a critical perspective, the writing style is still good, but there is nothing exciting at the moment, and it does not arouse the desire to continue reading. Maybe there needs to be a little more words to describe the main plot, and bring out the excitement.

The writing is good, but I don't know what type of plot you are writing. It is too confusing. I have written 14 chapters and the main plot and background are not explained clearly. I feel that there is no outline. I suggest you write an outline wherever you think of it.

May I ask, the author, why don't you update it? Thank you. Namo Amitabha Good people have a safe life 🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻

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The beginning cannot retain people, and some descriptions from a single point of view are too cumbersome. The descriptions should be scattered in different angles of the six major elements of time, place, character, cause, process, and result. The plot design can be single, but it must be distinctive. Your current content is single and has no characteristics, and the setting has characteristics but cannot be reflected. The subsequent design should consider whether the plot drives the characters, or the characters have distinctive characteristics, and actively choose the direction of the plot. If it is updated, it will be difficult to sign a contract without Daily Update 4000. Is there a complete outline and details? Improving the description of the content of the Dagen and Xiaogen novels becomes filling in the detailed outlines, which can actually speed up the update speed. Come on, give me some monthly votes and recommendation votes to support us.

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With all my heart, Good morning. Below is Yao Xiangyang, Moxue will only say a few words. Many skills are not overwhelming, Studying skills is more important than specialization. Namo Amitabha 🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻 Where should we go? The author also asks the author to choose carefully because the book In the sutra, the forefathers have already given many examples, now, I very much hope that the author has very mature wisdom to deal with all problems effectively. Take good care of it Being virtuous is like being lustful 🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻

The author said, All beautiful dreams must be based on reality. The sky is flying, Be down-to-earth, be brave and diligent, drops of water penetrate the stone, the rope is sawing through the wood, be single-minded, the road is long and difficult, forge ahead, be harmonious, and so on, these in our culture of Greater China, have explained everything. What you get on paper will eventually make you realize it is shallow, I know that this matter must be carried out in earnest. Work hard. Namo Amitabha Congratulations on getting rich Health and longevity All good luck 🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻

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My most heartfelt wishes, I pray that the author will have a good harvest. Namo Amitabha 🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻

Below is Yao Xiangyang. In the deepest part of my heart, I have a special hope that the author will be able to create a brand new world in the field of literature. Namo Amitabha 🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻

The author is great, If you don't have long-term worries, you must have immediate worries. The days seem a little long, Once the arrangements are made, there is nothing to worry about. Namo Amitabha Congratulations on getting rich Health and longevity All good luck 🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻

At the end of the study, I would like to use a humble heart, pray that the author will be great, study hard in the great Chinese studies, and use self-confidence as the driving force, so that the author will be great, and soon have a humble gentleman, gentle and jade-like temperament. Reading is like farming, Diligence leads to fertility. If you are poor, you can be good for yourself. If you are prosperous, you can help the world. Humility makes people progress, Pride makes people fall behind. Work hard to become stronger, Continuously strive for self-improvement. Endless, life and growth. A successful career, all good luck. 🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻

There is no need to raise your whip and work hard, This is a very valuable and valuable saying that the ancients of China have respected for a long time There are only twenty-four hours in a day, Mo Xue really hopes that the author will be great, Doubling and doubling your efforts, it is best to put the biggest regret forget it, let the unprecedented and unprecedented university scholar also willingly accept Your Excellency from the bottom of my heart. Heaven is about to give great responsibilities to this people, He must first suffer his mind and will, work his muscles and bones, hungry his body and skin, be depleted of his body, walk and disturb his actions. Finally, I would like to pray sincerely, I really want to see you become the pillar of our great China, the mainstay, unrivaled as soon as possible. The world is big, only dreams can accompany the author greatly. Not auspicious but unsatisfactory, hard work will bring you good luck. Kindhearted, genuine. 🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻

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The author said, Every starting point should be based on the actual situation. However, both subjectively and objectively, it seems to revolve around the destiny in the dark. However, the ancients once said, if you really want to change your destiny against nature, you still have to think carefully. I think that if you really want to be in the field of literature, for what you think and feel, and for the people you are destined to pay, it must be that the author has a lot of real ability. The old saying goes like this, Real gold needs fire to refine it. From a series of causal relationships, the essence of literature is condensed. If this is the case, expectation will stand out from various contradictions and bring great hope to the author. I remember what Grandpa Mao Zedong said, it said, Ten thousand years is too long, seize the day. My dear author, please work hard, no matter what, the word hard work itself is correct. Namo Amitabha Wish you great luck Everything is the best It is the most worthwhile 🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻

I pray that the author can accomplish the greatest and most magnificent career in his lifetime. Namo Amitabha Congratulations on getting rich Health and longevity All the best 🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻

The author is great, Efforts may have results, If you don't work hard, there will be no results. Namo Amitabha Congratulations on getting rich Health and longevity Five blessings coming Purple air coming from the east A hundred birds paying homage to the phoenix All good luck 🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻