Warhammer 40K on the Chessboard

The real world of the protagonist is a bit poisonous, especially the panacea. Anyone who has taken a political class knows that the protagonist is seeking his own death.

Warhammer is okay, Real World is a failure. Unnecessary real-life kinship, warhammer item rewards with unknown meanings, (Want to write a black technology management article? I don't know if it's serious, but it is.)

Don't mention the real world too much. Most people who are interested should want to see Warhammer.

Taking into account readers' reactions, I will vigorously delete all plot lines related to real-life plots. Subsequent rewards will be directed towards chess piece gains. I would give the protagonist more skills that can affect the board, rather than real-world technology.

It's still fun to read it if the author changes his gender. But the full transformation of the original body behind you seems boring, and it feels like the same routine template is repeated over and over again. I just suggested that it would be fun to have both boys and girls. It would not be fun at all if you turned them all into girls.

laughing to death

When writing a Warhammer box, just write about the Warhammer world and the protagonist playing chess pieces. If you add urban cool content, it will be very abrupt. Just let the protagonist collect characters and equipment from the Warhammer world to make chess pieces, sell them for money and collect them. To give the protagonist a lot of special benefits, we need to make up for these benefits, so we have to write a lot of plots about the protagonist's real-life activities. When I saw the protagonist's space warrior transformation surgery at the beginning, I could imagine a cool plot where the author would let the protagonist kill the enemies of the East in real life. But I came to see Warhammer, not to read the urban cool article about the return of the Space Marines.

The introduction is Goge Maoge, right? What is Gomao Goge?

The subject matter is indeed interesting, and the writing is brilliant in some places, but I read the book for the comfort of reading, not to see how you are rich. Some parts are vague and unclear, so forget it. The names of the characters are confusing, sometimes Khorne, sometimes fear, and some chapters are written in a running sequence. Why not streamline it and polish the writing of the following text?

Put those bad guys from Space King in, and beat the pirated version to the genuine version.