Purple Road

The autumn wind rustles the leaves, leaving you with a sad dream. We once promised to be of the same mind and share the same adversity, but we can't rely on each other when we go astray.

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Come on, come on, I also hope everyone will come to see my "Lingxiao World", the writing is very good, please support me and pay more attention to me

After reading it, it is probably better than many contracted works. It seems that signing is also a metaphysics~ You are welcome to check out my work "Fengyi Three Kingdoms: The Art of the Father and a Daughter"

Let's talk about the good points first. I think the author's description of the ring is thorough, vivid and very immersive: The things that I think can be improved are for reference only and may not be correct. I hope the author will not blame: 1. The description of the character's expression after speaking is a bit redundant. You can already feel the surprise and excitement from the words and punctuation. In fact, there is no need to explain it again. It is true in many places. This way 2. The characters are flat. For the characters in the first chapter, Professor Wang, Fatty and the protagonist Xuan Yue, it is difficult for readers to form memory points through the description of exploring the ancient tomb. Because it is too ordinary, because it is gloomy, everyone is afraid, and because it is ancient, everyone is very excited. Readers know this will happen when they see the ancient tomb being explored, and then it is true after reading it. The story needs a bit of drama, and the characters need characteristics. After exploring the ancient tomb for a long time, I still don't know why everyone came to explore and what they want to get. It seems that they are just following their feelings. At least explain the background and motivations of these characters I hope the author will get better and better! Sign up soon!

I came across your novel from the community review, where your review said that you did not sign the 200,000-plus words. Out of curiosity, I read your novel and read about the first five chapters. One problem is that it may be my own problem. I think the author of your novel is a little bit incomprehensible. Generally speaking, normal fantasy fairy tales pursue the kind of emotion that can be experienced by the protagonist, that is, being able to be immersed in the scene and feel the excitement or emotion.

The description of the environment is very detailed and the characters are very specific. After thinking about it carefully, I realized that it may be too detailed. Even if I read ten lines at a glance on my mobile phone, I would still feel "tired". Try it, reduce the description of the environment, and give it more dialogue. Then forcibly break lines after three or two sentences in the paragraph, (I feel much better when watching it on the computer) For dialogue, you can try to be more vulgar and fast-paced, such as a fight, Speak harshly, fight, you don't have to say a word, I will say a word, fight twice, insert a reaction, or describe the damage caused. Then cut again, let the perspective jump, and let the readers figure out what happened in the middle Or omit things that the readers know. (A little poor opinion!)

Come on, support each other, and preach together! Welcome to step back into the bookshelf and encourage each other on the long journey!

I haven't been here for a few days and there are a few more people in the team.

Come on, let's encourage each other!

This talent is used to write articles about cultivating immortals and farming, describing various spiritual grasses and various spiritual beasts. With this detailed description, it can be directly used as an AI prompt word. You can try to write a short story based on the mythical beast cleaning short drama on Douyin.

A book on history, "Upstream in the Late Ming Dynasty" is an advertisement for Guibao! ! !

Writing a book is not easy, so stay with me!

You can write well. Check out the book I wrote, "Through the Book: Isn't It Good to Live the Life You Want?", What's the story like?

It's now 730,000 words long and has not been signed yet. . It's great to be able to persevere Look at mine, it's also very good.

May the Night Deer God bless you with a successful contract signing

It's much better than mine (I resurrected millions of gods and demons). I don't want to update during the contract review, and I usually don't pass the cross-review. I apply for the contract later, and I only have one chance, and I usually don't pass it.

Without data support, it is difficult to proceed.

I saw you, why haven't I signed the contract yet?