Tokyo: Magical Girls Crushed My IPO Dream

It's just a scam. A magical girl is nothing if she doesn't believe in love and hope.

The idea of ​​​​the opening chapter is a bit old-fashioned, like a Japanese light novel. Personally, I feel that the opening chapter lacks the novelty and interest to continue reading. It's rebirth, revenge, lover's resurrection, etc. This kind of opening coupled with the niche track of magical girls, even the novelty of having a magical girl villain as the protagonist cannot offset the boring beginning.

The protagonist of your rebirth stream takes the initiative to attack and escape from danger. How can the reader enjoy watching it? Your information is gone to the dog, and he has to leapfrog and fight monsters before he has developed. The protagonist has developed beautifully before the teacher appears. After he comes out, the academy copy is led by the nose. Someone must come to suppress the protagonist. What kind of revenge should I write if I am unhappy with revenge

A rare mature magical girl work, it must be a certain guy's vest. This kind of work is the easiest to cut. Let's wait and see.

Can you please stop updating? The writing is really ugly.

Last week, I talked about the collapse of the character image in the chapter. After saving it for a week, I came back and looked at it. I laughed to death. It was so bad that I didn't change it at all. Classic Akaashi plot. Remind new readers and those who have been reading this book for a long time, the plot behind this book is already the same as other ordinary garbage of the same genre, so you don't need to read it.

No matter how you think about it, beating up a girl with a bad personality is delicious🤤

80 Chapters in progress Because I have tasted too many poisons, this early version is already good for the same type. It is really boring and I can't find anything good to read. It can be used as food It has obviously changed after it was put on the shelf. Especially the first ten chapters are very affecting the perception. The free chapter can only be one. After I finished talking about it, I like to split it into several chapters after it is put on the shelf, but I can still read it. The character issues mentioned in the bookmarks will be discussed later when I read them. Ordinary poisonous spots cannot make me die of poison. It is really painful to have no food and grass. If you can't find something good, you can take a look. This book is still okay for now.

I don't understand why every time I fight, I have to fight with all my strength to win by a narrow margin. It doesn't fit the character of the protagonist who runs a company, and it also feels too unqualified.

Let's talk about the advantages first. I have to say that what I wrote above is really good. The battles are very tense, the daily routine and the small ambiguities are well done. The sisters and teachers have very distinct personalities and are well established. But what is written behind it? There is daily life, ambiguity, and fighting in the front, and they are all well balanced, but what does it mean that it just sucks in the back? In the beginning, I wrote a long paragraph about saving Qingmei, and then Qingmei disappeared directly. She appeared like a clown several times and then quarreled without telling the reason, leaving readers to guess. The introduction of the parallel world is even more outrageous, especially the chapters after chapter 212. Have you read it yourself? Have you ever introduced the end of the world from the side like this and used a passerby character who has never appeared to describe it repeatedly for several chapters? Still using such a depressing writing style to pile it up? Do you know that you are one chapter a day? I clicked on it for several days in a row and made no progress, still describing how scared the guy who never appeared was. Do you think the readers are all fools? And the more I write about it, whether it's combat or daily life, my hips start to stretch.