The Only Player Who Started from Luofu Xianzhou

It's this kind of thing that seems to be traveling through a world, but it turns out that it's still in a similar universe. The Demon Slayer World turns into a World Bubble and is close to the Iron Collapsing World.

I took a look and found that it is an infinite flow plot, although some details were not handled well (for example: the protagonist is greeted by Alan when he arrives at the space station. Alan said that the protagonist will meet Esta. Let's not mention Esta's family identity. The protagonist is from a grassroots background and has no money and power. When he arrives at the space station, he Being personally received by the confidant of the second-in-command of the space station? The game text mentions that the number of personnel on the space station is more than a thousand, and the captain in charge of defense will not receive a grassroots tourist no matter how hard he is), but the article is smooth and the meaning is clear, you can take a look. I still have to complain about the pacing. In the first four chapters, the specific relationship with Qingque is not written (only the relationship between tenant and charterer, chef and diner is not enough) and the plot is too fast. The content of less than 30,000 words has been skipped for four days. This does not mean that it should be written slowly, but in order to open the new map and the main plot, I did not enter the novice village, but just walked around the periphery. It was too impatient. There are many things that can be expanded on in the first five chapters, such as why Qingque came to the Diheng Division, how he met the protagonist who set up a stall to sell goods on the way to take office, how they got together to make ends meet by accident, how he enthusiastically provided the protagonist with a place to rent, etc. When writing, be careful not to rush the plot. Being long-winded is better than changing scenes without any transition. Long-winded writing can make people feel annoyed at best. Writing too fast will make people confused and incomprehensible. The last little suggestion may be due to personal promotion. There are many readers who hate or even dislike the protagonist being overly bound to the system. If the author wants to try to attract the interest of this group of readers, he can slightly reduce the presence of the system. However (Stacked Armor), it is the author's own decision whether to implement my little suggestion. Don't be led away by my nonsense. Talk in sleep at 3:57

Everything else is fine, but why are you still reading the new book? If you ask me, Demon Slayer is so bad, skipping Demon Slayer seems okay, but the first part is too long, which really affects the interest of many readers.

Humorous author, this ghost slayer makes me black-eyed, and the author turns into a fictional historian, hahaha

It's okay, it's okay. There are just some small details that are not handled well. Regarding the debt of Yaliro 6. All the information about the Lord of Extermination is not enough to eliminate the debt of a small planet in Yaliluo. The author didn't handle this well.

If there is a ghost slayer, then bye bye. I'm so confused that I'm still writing these things.

Seeing so many partial chapters about Demon Slayer, I didn't want to read them anymore. It would affect the viewing experience.

Author, how much do you think you can write this time? Is there an outline?

It's almost Chinese New Year. Let's see how many readers there are and send a red envelope.

Can anyone tell me if I can skip Demon Slayer in the early stage?

If you don't sign a contract, you won't be able to vote if you want to vote monthly 😵

It just feels a bit toxic to be restricted by my body all the time.

Check the card to give the author some popularity ^_^

There are so few comments recently 😭😭 Is there anyone who can read it, please?