What? They Actually Exist?!

How did Sanguan Zheng and Duo heroine appear at the same time😄

Can you write a book? I haven't seen the male protagonist menstruate until now. What, is the male protagonist menopausal? Have you ever been a male protagonist? I took some things for granted and wrote them randomly.

It's very well written, and I'll give you the monthly pass. The narrative pace is just right, the character interactions are not awkward, and there's no sense of pretense. The best thing about it is the character of the male protagonist. He's calm, gentle, and moral. It's not very common at the beginning. Just write at your own pace.

I have read more than 40 chapters of the light novel. The flavor is too strong. All the people are very nice. The good ones are unreasonable, such as Uncle Zhao. How can you be given land in a real rural area? People also have wives and children. How can there be so many good people in daily life. Also, Taishang Qingqing has been written badly in many works since I was a child. I feel that the Immortal Sect here has nothing new and is too bad. I hope there will be some foreshadowing to round it out. Give me a good idea

Personal opinion, don't criticize if you like it or hate it Advantages and disadvantages coexist First of all, I only saw the end of the copy of Cowherd and Weaver Girl. Immortal Sect disciples came to Blue Star to find Cowherd and said they would kill him. I didn't see much content Advantages 1. The writing is very good, especially the love between men and women. It is very good. The author must have written light novels before. Speaking of romance novels 2. The setting is pretty good. I have seen similar settings in other novels, but it is normal. After all, there are only a few settings. It is normal to use them back and forth There are so many shortcomings, or points that need improvement 1. There are too many riddle points, not The riddles are not good, but they are too dense. It's like reading a detective novel, flipping back and forth. It's interesting at first, but then you get tired 2. The first copy ends a little hastily, but it's actually not bad. 3. There are some problems with the details. The subject matter of the novel is different, and the point of view is naturally different. It's a light novel. It focuses on characters, romance, etc., While dungeon novels focus on compact plots. This book should be regarded as a type of fantasy novel plus light novel. I feel that the author should divide it regularly. For example, the light novel theme should be the main theme, and the imaginary novel is supplemented. The plot should be softer, and the female protagonist and the male protagonist interact with each other, and what is the experience of dungeon after dungeon. Or if it is mainly about fantasy novels, supplemented by light novels, and focuses on the rhythm of the plot, then the emotional plot must be ignored. It has to have a focus. At present, I feel that the focus of this book is not clear. I like to read light novels and imaginative essays. I read copies one by one. I will find this book interesting at first glance, but I will feel tired after reading it for a long time. You can't satisfy the preferences of two different groups at the same time. My suggestion is to focus on the light novels you are good at. Write less foreshadowing, riddles and so on, so that it will be better. Finally, a personal opinion, don't criticize if you don't like it. I am purely speaking from my feelings, just read it for fun

It's really good (´∀`*), but the introduction is a bit low. If I hadn't read the comment section, I wouldn't have clicked in. The main reason is that the plot is relatively novel and the characters are very clear.

For example, it's a dream. Can you endure the days when you are young and strong? I really can't help it, I want to fuck a girl when I see her

What a treasure, this book is so delicate

I originally read it with the intention of reading it for fun, but I didn't expect that so far I have a good grasp of the pacing and the writing is not bad. It's very comfortable to read along the way. However, there are many cases in this type of articles that are strong in the early stage, but soon start to weaken in the early and middle stages. I think this is mainly due to four reasons: the type of dungeon is single, the power is increased too quickly, and the dungeon is seriously disconnected from the main world. The dungeon is just for finding a new heroine or gaining connections (you can add some dungeons that only enhance yourself for a short period of time). Finally, I hope the author will have a good grasp of the number of female protagonists. I think 2 to 3 is enough. If there are more other situations, it will not end well. It can be said to be a classic lesson for this type of writing. It's a good book so far, good luck to the author.

The writing is okay. There was this type before. But it all sucked. The reason is simple, those women came to reality too early. Pen and ink are limited, and if there are too many people, there won't be enough. Moreover, these women have distinct personalities and it is impossible for them to eat from the same pot. This resulted in the author having to force a harem into the harem by using a deity. Or there is another route, these women are all the same person, but they have been reincarnated and gone through tribulations, and finally become one.