Legend of the Fantasy Brave

After reading the first few chapters, it's not a problem with the writing, it feels like it's a problem with the pacing and world presentation or the sense of immersion. I read seven or eight chapters in a row, but as a reader, I was confused. I felt that the world shown at the beginning was a bit too vague. You wrote enough details, but it made me not want to continue or rush to read. The problem can be summarized as three golden chapters or something like that. If you write about the world you want, you don't have to read it, but if you want others to recognize it, you have to understand it. There is too much information. It is not like the beginning of an online article. It should at least be placed in the middle of the whole book, or a game CG that provides a world view. I also feel this problem with other writers, but they have more readers. Coupled with the fact that the current total number of words is not enough, there are generally not as many people pursuing reading as there are people keeping books. So you should still be able to play solo for a while.

The writing is quite good. There is no sluggish plot so far. The author's writing is very immersive and the character design is also great. From the beginning, the character Dongyang gave people a cold, bitter and hateful feeling. Later, when he got along with Yu Hai, he slowly thawed out his frozen self and became a heart of love hidden under the cold appearance. , And also had some lovely contrasts. Later, I met Yake, who had a crush on her. I didn't know what magical sparks would be sparked later. I look forward to it. The eternal pistachio of Yuhai, the eternal light, the cuteness of Yuhai. The author updates it every Monday. I feel that the update is still a bit slow. Can you update it more every week? It's not enough (sad)

The imagination and logic are quite good, I hope the writing can be more refined.