The Slough of Taiqing

The content is okay, but four critical issues are more prominent. The first is the problem of typesetting. Times have changed. Authors generally write one long paragraph, sometimes three or four paragraphs per page. The main problem is dialogue processing. You can look at how other books such as Ge Wu Zhi deal with it. The second problem is the connection between chapters and plots. This problem is huge. Some chapters or plots jump very suddenly, lacking foreshadowing and lack of paragraph arrangements to connect the previous and the following. Third, there is no obvious main line. After reading the ninety chapters, I did not feel an obvious line. It may be that it is not arranged well, or it may be that the chapter plot connection problem makes the book look scattered. The image of the fourth protagonist is not good, nor is the image of the family. For example, the plot of selling swords in exchange for items is arranged to a member of a vassal family, and a member of the sword cultivator family kills Jie Xiu. The World of Cultivation of Immortals is written about mother-in-law and mother-in-law, and the enemy family runs away from the beginning to chapter 90, which is very vicious. Your force doesn't have an intelligence system, right?

I've read ten chapters and I think it's okay.

Some students said that foundation building is a bit fast, and it is true. But this book starts from the seventh level of qi training. It is originally intended to skip the qi training stage as quickly as possible, because I personally feel that at this stage, you can only play tricks that are pretentious and slap in the face, which is not interesting.

When I read [Building the Foundation], I felt that the pace was a bit fast. It was too easy to obtain the Purple Mansion Technique. Also, the Chen family's demise was too sudden. There was no foreshadowing in many places, and the Golden Finger seemed to have no effect. All in all, the feeling is just two words [abrupt]!