Reborn in Tokyo, He Is a Great God in the ACGN Field

I don't dislike the pace of this slow-paced story, and it makes it feel more like life when I read it. It is recommended that you watch the Japanese drama "Restart Life". Like this Japanese drama, you can intersperse some small details of life that are more relevant to the times. Since it is a theme stage with a limited time and place, adding more flavor will naturally strengthen the expression of the theme. There are two areas worth improving. One is that the author's accumulation is still too little. For example, I saw a lot of Akasaka's shadow in the protagonist, but the author didn't seem to know Akasaka well, which made me feel aggrieved from time to time. The other is that there are too many unsightly private goods. For example, the author tried to express that "Weathering with You" is not a bad film based on a set of subjective aesthetic logic, and used many "praises from imaginary readers" to try to prove that this set of subjective aesthetic logic is a set of "ubiquitous public logic" - the author can write whatever he wants. The pen is in the author's hand, and anyone who is not convinced can write it themselves. It's just that it's not good to write this kind of thing. Who would like to read it? The author directly said "Weathering with You is good!" In fact, that's it. There is no need to make up for yourself. It is completely unnecessary. It is really not good to write so many self-moving things. It may even dissuade many readers who think that Weathering with You is bad. Maybe you just say "Weathering with You is good". I laughed and passed away after reading it, but I saw that you were still very serious about your own logic, so this nature has become an output of values. However, the author's aesthetic level is very high, is it meaningful, is it weird, is it full of life, is it weird, is it full of life, and is there nothing at all, so it is recommended to write less of these, XX is just a good sentence. There is no shame in moving, but the mover must have the consciousness of a mover. How many readers are there for "Sky Realm" and how many readers are there for this work? Whether it is the author or Mochizuki-sensei, do they really think that they can write a work of the level of "Sky Realm" with their current situation... Of course, this does not mean that Xingyue or Xinghai Makoto are invincible. They can change it however they want, and it doesn't matter how they write it. I just want to say that once you have to consider how to write well and how to write to attract more readers, you might as well just press the play button and let the recorded audio track content play by itself. Before your creative level and aesthetic level are not enough to attract more readers, do less literary criticism. When writing, keep the consciousness of the porter in mind, and then think carefully about what part and content you can and should write more. I wish Wensi is like morning urine.

The author's early writing was pretty good, and he's been updating it all the way. But after entering V, there were not many explosions, and the pace of the novel did not speed up, making it seem dragging. This will cause the novel to enter a vicious cycle in which "a considerable number of readers start to support the book, novel subscriptions decrease, the author's motivation to update becomes weaker, readers continue to support the book, and updates decrease". I have encountered too many sudden deaths in novels like this.

Today, when I was reading the PV analysis of the final chapter of fgo, I came across the analysis of the hot-blooded manga. Then I talked about the bloodline and Naruto, and then extended it to the politics in Naruto and the massacre of the Uchiha Itachi clan. If you want to change the plot, there are two directions: first, change Japan's troubled "politics" to politics that conforms to Chinese concepts; second, retain the original Japanese ideas, but retain the ninja settings of the Zabuza and Hatake Sakumo eras and keep them as close to reality as possible It is really good for the audience to understand, connect the setting of the characters with their identity and background, explain the logic of thoughts and actions clearly (especially Uchiha!), Make sure they understand the story, how to develop it, the significance of the protagonist and supporting characters in the story and their role in promoting the plot, and the setting set is also written. These two points are not in conflict, they can complement each other and can even be used all the time. The first one is easy to solve. Now that Naruto fans are everywhere, I won't go into it. The focus is on the second one: Japanese thinking. It is difficult for us Chinese to understand what the Japanese think, especially since the theme of this work is ninja, a special profession unique to Japan. The ninjas in "Naruto" are very different from the actual ninjas in Japan. The latter exist. The former has many characteristics of the latter but is actually more like a setting, a fashionable item. It was completely discarded after Shippuden. The real ninja is the private force of the nobles, a tool to reduce consumption, and a special mercenary. Normally, farmers immediately turn into assassins, killers, spies, death warriors and special forces after receiving the mission. This part overlaps with the early Naruto, but it has also been broken down, subdivided and softened by Naruto, weakened or even not mentioned. In Naruto, the ninja on the surface seems to have human needs and rights, but the essence is still a ninja. It is required to be more in line with the real ninja. The roots of the ANBU and Danzo's subordinates completely humanize the ninja in history. The ninja on the surface gradually transforms into a form similar to a warrior, a soldier or even an army, especially during the Ninja World War. The second, third, and fourth ninja wars always remind me of World War I and World War II. Whose world war was fought by a bunch of ninjas? Before Shippuden, especially when fighting Zabuza, it was always emphasized that "ninja is just a tool, it only needs and can only complete the task." Konoha, who is the most liberal on the surface, teaches that ninjas should protect their companions and the village, but essentially only requires "ninjas to complete their tasks." Hatake Sakumo gave up the mission and chose to rescue his companions. This was obviously an act in line with the will of fire. However, he was always accused of "not completing the mission", the iron rule of the ninja, and eventually committed suicide. This is also a manifestation of this idea that is completely bound to the ninja, and the ninja himself is powerless to change if he wants to. The most shocking thing is that Konoha Village is already a paradise in this worldview and values. Before Zabuza was beaten (yes, it was him again), the identity setting of a ninja was more like a fashion item. It was missing after Shippuden. There was not even a conflict between the identity requirements of a ninja and the instinctive needs of the ninja as a human being. It was more about the village leadership thinking that those ninjas were dissatisfied with the village or "unusable" for various reasons, so they directly or gradually tricked each other to death. The identity of a ninja itself is ruthless, cruel, and the law of the jungle exists. However, Kishimoto uses the daily life, schools, students, and exams in Konoha. Before the chunin exam, there will be student exams and job interviews that are close to the real society. Ninjas will chat like ordinary people, go shopping, open stores, and spend money. A group of female students pursue a handsome male student and compete wildly among themselves. Even the perspective, goals, and emotional needs of the protagonist Naruto weaken the point that "ninjas are tools for killing and are not needed except to complete tasks." As the protagonist, Naruto gives the impression that he is a poor kid who has lost his parents and lacks love and good friends. He is ridiculed and ostracized by the villagers as a demon fox (which is not the case) with various strange content. His purpose is to gain recognition from others. Ninjas and ninjutsu are purely for looking cool, paving the way for a world view that attracts the audience, and making the battle scenes more handsome and flammable. And the first episode was shot like this, Iruka's recognition, competition with Sasuke, pursuit of Haruno Sakura, and the establishment of Team 7. The self-introductions and reactions of the three people did not actually tell the audience that this is a cruel world. The mission of the Land of Waves truly reveals what a ninja is in this world. When Kakashi took the three of them to kill the bandits, the scary attitudes of these three were actually very worth pondering. The average viewer may not react, but this is actually very scary! This is an act of letting children learn to kill, and being indifferent to it, or even showing off! As a 12-year-old child in Class 7, he had no fear of Amomum villosum, not even physical nausea. Naruto felt "shameful" when he didn't react to being attacked by a ninja! He was left behind by Sasuke! When it comes to life, especially your own life, it is actually equated to the kind of competition that children run in a race! Killing bandits is more like a test of courage. These three children and even all the genin who have just graduated from the ninja village don't care about killing, and will even regard it as "evidence" of their own excellence. A ninja who completes a task is like a player playing a game. If a ninja fails to complete the task, he is a "failure" and is not qualified to live (as a player, why would you play a game if you are not happy)? This is a matter of course. I have said before that the world's requirement for ninjas is completely to exterminate humanity, to bring people alive, oppress and destroy them into tools without thought and self. Zabuza and Kakashi revealed that the graduation test of the Mist Ninja Village is to kill the companions who live with them day and night; after Zabuza failed to assassinate the Mizukage and defected, he still insisted on completing the commission to make money. He had a really good attitude towards the princess. He insisted on completing the commission and never considered giving up the commission or running away; Shiro was losing Afterwards, he actually asked Naruto to kill him. The reason was that "as a ninja, if you have not completed the task, it is worthless, so you are not qualified to live." This kind of thinking does not treat people as human beings, but just expendable tools. Naruto agreed directly after being surprised. Naruto had no objection to the concept of dialogue, and even had some objections. He agreed to a certain extent (otherwise he would just run away); after Shiro's death, Zabuza refused to work for Kado, Kado angrily called Shiro a useless thing and insulted Shiro's body; Kakashi has also been emphasizing in these episodes that "ninjas only need to complete their tasks" and "ninjas have no tears" (in fact, he is a ninja) The longest and most direct manifestation of the oppression and destruction of people by the author's demands); Haruno Sakura was crying while reciting the ninja code of "A ninja must not shed tears"; the most touching thing about Zabuza was that after Haku's death he denied that "Haku is just a tool", desperately protected Haku's body, and truly expressed his feelings as a human being. The charm of Zabuza and Haku is that they have clearly accepted the concept of "ninjas are just tools", but they are still pursuing human needs in essence. The "characters" of Zabuza and Payne emphasize the mistakes of the ninja world and believe that the ninja world should be changed and ninjas should be allowed to live as human beings. The establishment of Konoha is the wish of Senju Hashirama, the strongest among ninjas, the winner, the "God of Ninja", that his children can grow up normally without having to go to the battlefield (but Hashirama will not let go as long as he harms the village, even his own children). This concept is too advanced in the ninja world, but it is really impossible to enter. Konoha Ninja Village is already the best in the ninja world. The graduation of Anbu, Genbu, Mist Ninja and Gaara's father's attitude towards his son are the norm in the ninja world. In the world of Naruto, all ninjas are firmly controlled by the view that "ninjas must complete their tasks, and other than that they are not needed and should not have any." This is true from the God of Ninja and Uchiha Madara, Uchiha Obito, Uchiha Itachi, Nagato, to the newly graduated genin. They both personify themselves and others and do their best to remove obstacles in their eyes, using any means to achieve their goals. Madara Uchiha framed, tortured and controlled Obito Uchiha for the Eye of the Moon plan; Obito Uchiha controlled the fourth generation Mizukage for his own plan, designed Uchiha Itachi to massacre the clan together, and framed and controlled the original Akatsuki organization; Itachi Uchiha kept torturing and stimulating Sasuke in order to let Sasuke follow the path he had planned for him. Sasuke was originally much more stable, but he was provoked to defect by him. And the most terrifying thing is that except for ninjas, the entire society thinks so. From children to businessmen, everyone believes that "ninjas must complete their tasks or they will be unnecessary waste." This leads to the fact that even if a ninja tries to escape from this concept, he cannot forget the consensus of the entire society, let alone his own concept, let alone change this society. For example, Hatake Sakumo chose to give up the mission, but his companions accused him and made him doubt whether it was more important for the ninja to complete the mission or to persist in the will of fire. In the end, he could not convince himself to commit suicide. This was also my confusion when I watched Shippuden later. I no longer felt the harsh requirements for ninjas. It mainly promoted the bonds and friendship between people, and believed that as long as they understood each other, they could have the ideal of peace. It's not that it's bad, but this concept has a strong conflict with the identity of ninjas, and the focus of the plot does not focus on portraying this conflict; Shippuden ninjas are more like a profession similar to chefs and workers, and unmanned businessmen and other business ninjas are more like elites in all walks of life. They are seriously It lacks the ninja form at the beginning of the manga. Compared with the "standard ninja" dark part and roots, it is more like an "ordinary person"; like the background story of Pain (Nagato), I just feel the sadness, pain and powerlessness of war in reality, and lacks the special role of the ninja identity in the story; when Characters like Taiga and Sai who were experimental subjects and lost their hearts and suppressed human emotions should actually be made into chapters like Zabuza, focusing on the social requirements of ninjas to only complete their tasks and the conflicts and changes of current ninjas who want to become human beings, and should be dominated by the main character. Kakuzu Naruto came to strongly promote changes in other ninjas and other ninja clans; the denial of ninjas and war in the Eye of the Moon plan can be completely transformed into reality. The important story component of ninjas completely loses its effect, just like in "Swinging Camping" if you don't focus on describing camping, then what is Swaying Camping? Change it to "A few things about us taking a walk when we have nothing to do"! The later stories of Shippuden seriously lacked the description and emphasis on the unique identity of ninjas. Except for the battle, it can be replaced with the ordinary world. War is also a war for ordinary people. In the early stages of the comics, chapters such as Kakashi, Tsunade, Orochimaru, Jiraiya, Rain Country, Obito, and the Warring States Period actually depict the pain of ninjas. The point is that this pain is not bound to the identity of a ninja and can be established in any profession. This makes the story not as shocking as Zabuza. Naruto is a shounen manga that promotes hard work, friendship and becoming your ideal self, so there is a serious conflict between the stories of real ninjas and shounen manga. Because you can't show how people can live a healthy life and become their ideal selves while showing how painful it is for ancient Japanese ninjas to live and ninjas cannot change the status quo, so this is bound to be a conflict and there must be a trade-off. Kishimoto chose to abandon the early depiction of real-life ninjas and turned Naruto into a shonen manga world. After we understand the identity of the ninja in the early stages of the work, let's take a look at the setting of the character Uchiha Itachi and the reasons for the massacre. First of all, Uchiha Itachi went to the battlefield and killed people at the age of four! Coupled with the "ninja education" he received, he understood very well how precious Konoha and Konoha's protection of children (extended to 12 years old, not during the war) was in the ninja world. Although Konoha has many shortcomings, it is simply majestic against the backdrop of the original ninjas representing Kirikage Village and other small countries. The purpose of Uchiha Itachi's genocide was to prevent the destruction of the only remaining "paradise" in the ninja world. Konoha's education is that in addition to completing tasks, ninjas must also protect their companions and the village. Although the actual concept is still the same old style, protecting the companions and the village is already a remarkable improvement, and it is already a bit human. It was under this understanding that Uchiha Itachi chose to massacre the clan. He believed that the atmosphere within Uchiha (extreme admiration for the strong and extreme contempt for the weak, such as Obito who did not open his eyes and Itachi who opened his Sharingan) was following the old path of ninjas and would return to the Warring States Period. Especially at that time, the Uchiha were in civil strife. If the hawks came to power and controlled Konoha, and the Uchiha clan's concept (only with eyes opened can power be correct, as long as the eyes are not opened, no matter how kind it is, it is useless), this "only pure land" in the ninja world will also disappear. Uchiha Itachi, who has seen the cruelty of war and knows how destructive the nature of ninjas is, absolutely disagrees, and he does not want his brother Sasuke to become such a person. Moreover, the Ninja world originally coveted the Sharingan, and when there was real internal fighting, except for the internal troubles of Danzo and Orochimaru, other people were wrong, and even the lone wolf robbed ninjas, maybe it would involve Ming's level of passing the exam, and then it would become the fourth and fifth Ninja War, so he chose the method of massacre to completely solve this problem. In addition, there are "Japanese politics". Kishimoto does not have or dare not show normal political ideas. Uchiha Itachi's feelings towards the Uchiha clan and Konoha Village are very strange. It seems that Konoha is Uchiha Itachi's clan, and the Uchiha clan is just "a few people" in a clan. Itachi Uchiha passed the slaughter. It is really strange to kill the "minority" of the Uchiha clan to ensure the survival of the "clan" of Konoha. In a sense, Uchiha Itachi sees himself as a gardener, Konoha as flowers and plants to be pruned, and the Uchiha clan as branches to be pruned. This reflects Uchiha Itachi's awkward thought of Konoha as his true home. I completely don't understand why the Japanese have this kind of thinking. This way of treating the top level of the whole as the place of true loyalty and effectiveness, and dedicating their truly relevant interest groups and political groups to the top level, is really a bit like a cult...  To sum up, I think the reason why the Uchiha Itachi massacre of the clan cannot be accepted by most domestic audiences is: when there are conflicts and conflicts within the family, he chooses to kill the entire clan; he killed the entire clan before the family launched a coup or even was fighting among themselves, even the old, weak, women and children who had no fighting ability and no political threat. The conflict of pursuit has turned into friendship, bond and Japan's troubled politics. Many people have forgotten or simply do not understand how cruel the world of ninjas is, and Konoha is already the best option. As a person who went to the battlefield at the age of four and was forced to suppress himself by ninja education, it is "correct" for Uchiha Itachi to take action against his family in order to preserve Konoha, the best option in the ninja world (I printed quotation marks, I really don't agree!) Naruto is a standard shounen manga protagonist. He promotes his own efforts and changes himself and others as his own ideals and becomes the self he wants. When he felt ashamed of his behavior of being frightened by the enemy and unable to act, and vowed to become a "qualified ninja", it marked the development of his ninja "say what you have to say".        ，，，，！

I read the first few chapters... 1999 Is a bit late. I remembered correctly that both Tsukihime and Magical Night were serialized in 1999. Part of fsn's prototype novel fp was written when Mushroom was a student. According to the 1991 year when Mushroom was a student, the year 1991 for fs is probably in line with Mushroom's school age. Eighth Achievement was written in those years. I hope the author can round it out later...

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The heroine and the music line are boring and feel a bit redundant

As the title says, I thought this type of heroine would be Nao Mushroom, who is sexually transformed

Seven chapters of the comic have been released after seventy chapters. It has just started and has not yet been put on the shelves. Novels, music, and comics have all been laid out. In addition, there are quite a lot of emotional dramas with the original heroine. Doesn't the author really think the situation is too big? There are very few updates. It's rare to see an author who understands acgn write acgn, and it's like this now.

The music doesn't match the novels and comics at all, and the female protagonist is even more confusing. She makes me want to jump at the first glance. Those who only want to read comics and novels are not likely to pay attention to the music.

First write about your music that no one wants to watch, something that can be skipped in one sentence, and then write about One Piece, what does it mean, who cares, are you dead? You, bite the lighter if you are not alive.

If so, please respond in unison. If you don't write well, you'll get criticized. If everyone can criticize freely, that's it. 😭 Also there is no author change. It is indeed a relatively self-proclaimed article. The outline is very long and will not suddenly eunuch. This is the first time I write a semi-original article. It is really bad and I can't grasp the rhythm very well. Whether you want to criticize me, place an order after it is put on the shelves, or want to keep the book, whatever makes you happy, do whatever you want. Of course, if you think this book is not that bad, at least I hope you can support the following when it is first ordered. There is nothing else to ask for. Above, thank you orz.

I knew that the consequences of floods in Jinshan must be that readers support books → data drops → eunuchs

When I read it after the New Year, it turned out that I was already a eunuch. The author never listened to the readers' suggestions from beginning to end. He even didn't know what was so exciting about this book and what attracted readers to continue reading.

I won't pursue it anymore. This is the first novel that was so bad that I chased it and deleted it directly. Forget about popularizing science at all times. A simple copy of the article produces very little with so many words, and the development is extremely slow. Author, I would like to ask, if you read novels yourself, would you read this kind of article? This book gives me the feeling that the author is completely insincere and does not want to write well, but only wants to make money through writing.

Read the latest chapter in one go. The author's writing is actually good, but the story line is not well organized. Comics (multiple), music, and romance are all done simultaneously, and the experience of following updates will also become bad. I wrote a little of the plot I was looking forward to and then wrote other things, so I was criticized by many readers. This can be done in rounds, you don't have to do it all. Concentrate on finishing the first medium-length comic first. This plot leaves a cushion for music and love. For example, from time to time, I mention learning music theory from the heroine, and occasionally write about the emotional accumulation in the process of learning from the heroine. The love progress is written more slowly, and for example, I mention games and animations that will definitely be involved in the future. The male protagonist also adds relevant industry skills and knowledge from time to time. These are added from time to time as the level of mentioning, but the most important space is still the most important career of the male protagonist - drawing comics. The male and female protagonists are 18 years old, so they can concentrate on publishing a comic first. After updating for two years, the comic has published about 100 chapters. The male protagonist's reputation has been solidified, the funds are in place, and his musical skills are also improved. The female protagonist's relationship is also in place, so he can go a step further. Then he can write about music with the female protagonist, and then write about the emotional progress in the process of making music. There is no need to set a setting for the heroine to take a year off from school to engage in music and get good grades. Wouldn't it be good for the heroine to concentrate on going to college? Isn't it okay for the 18-year-old heroine to prepare herself after graduating from college and sing and gain experience in her free time? Isn't it better to find an awesome music professor to teach you in college than to find an awesome professional teacher to teach you after you have released a song? The female protagonist is in college, and the male protagonist's first mid- to long-term comic has been completed. During the break in the comic career, he will consider music as a career. It will take 2 years for the comic to be animated. It will not be a big problem to use his own music to make a career (from the article, it seems that he wants to animate in 1 year) ), I originally thought that the heroine's career was bound to the hero from the beginning. The glory of the Knight King in the plot was already written, but my comic career was not progressing enough to be animated, so I was stuck there and gave the heroine other songs, which seemed unsatisfactory. I think it's okay to produce a few pieces of music in the early stages of a music career to build up popularity. The heroine can also help find career helpers in college, such as programming, animation design, and financial operations. It's not that I can't want them all, and I can't spread them out at the same time, but this kind of reading experience, if I encounter those who are following it, the plot is not concentrated enough, and the updates are not large enough. If I read it every day, I would definitely be annoyed. How to update, how much to update, the pace of updating and the grasp of the rhythm of the plot are also a test of the author's ability. So I suggest you keep it, watch it if you can think of it, forget it if you can't. Some books are meant to be read in one sitting. There is no experience at all in re-reading. It depends on the author's own choice.

You should write comics first, and then take comics as the main line. All subplots should serve the comic. For example, games, novels, and music should all serve comics. For example, if you become famous for drawing Fate, you will animate the comic, then you will be asked to compose music yourself, and then release a novel version, a live-action film and television version, etc., And create peripherals. Finally, create the world view of Xingyue. Finally, let's talk about the worldview of other works. It's too early for you to hit things here and there in the early days.

The best-selling work is a remake of One Punch. Can one sit at the same table as Fujimoto?

If I want to see something comprehensive, why don't I go to Commercial City? Can you feel that the love line is boring? I feel numb. Is it because the water is better? They all love to write about that lousy heroine, but all of them are ugly, and they can't write without being forced to write, which is boring.

The author made the original work look like fan art. The dark Japanese-style chuunibyou in Fate has been changed into a dumpling-making plot of an old Chinese. From the most traffic-based method to the safest method of writing.

Looking at the title of your book, it says acgn, but half of the content is about music, not animation, comics, games, or novels. Author, do you dare to add music to the introduction? You also know that music is not used to attract people, right? For a bowl of beef noodles, it's your duty to have enough noodles. Just have some beef, as long as it's worth the price. Good guy, what do you mean by putting the coriander in it? As far as the eye can see, there are coriander everywhere. Why did I go into the store? Didn't your sign say beef noodles? I saw no coriander on the billboard? When I was eating noodles some time ago, I didn't say anything when you put some coriander on it, but now I picked it up with chopsticks and saw no beef, just coriander. Isn't it too much? Is it fraud?

The outline is very long and there will be no sudden eunuchs 😄

It would be much better to cut the emotional scenes in half and write more about career. I especially admire those emotional lines. They can't be written hard.

When you think he is a eunuch, he suddenly pretends to be a corpse and jumps around a few times. When you think he has reformed, he suddenly tells you that he is just walking with you.

I'm the kind of person who reads silently and rarely speaks. I've seen all kinds of interruptions, but I didn't think there was anything wrong with it You said you could either just cut it off or continue writing Now that this whole thing is happening, I thought you were dead, and then you pretended to be dead What's the point, why don't you come out and make a post?

Digging graves, when will I continue to write another book like this? I really like it.

If you want to cut it, just cut it. Don't worry about it. Just update one chapter in ten and a half months and just fool around with people.

With this update, there will only be fewer and fewer readers, and sooner or later the eunuch will

The subject matter is quite to my liking, but it's a pity that it's too self-indulgent. The main plot is confusing and incomprehensible. I can't help but watch it.

It's updated once a month, and now it's less than 400,000 words. I don't expect this book to be finished. It's just a chronic eunuch.

It takes more than 20 chapters to publish a comic, and the male and female protagonists have already started to fall in love in the early stage. Is it the text or the love that I read?