Restarting the World

You are a group traveler, which is a good starting point for the story. But the problem is that the narrative jumps a bit in the first few chapters. Things happened suddenly and too many people wrote about them all at once. Because it is a group portrait, you subconsciously wrote the beginning as a group portrait. If you compare it to watching a TV series, it feels like the camera is constantly cutting to show the audience new characters. The readers are not even familiar with the protagonist yet, so many supporting characters enter the story line at once. So after reading less than 10,000 words, I had an intuitive feeling: it was in the clouds. We are not experienced authors, and doing "group portraits" will only make things more chaotic.

I followed it from XXX, and I saw the dancing master saying that your writing techniques and narrative are quite skillful, and it doesn't look like your first time writing. But unfortunately, you are not writing online articles, so it is useless to say more. Out of curiosity, I caught up and took a look. The first thing is the title of your book. This is not what I said, but almost all editors will suggest that you write a long title, which will be mentioned in a certain video to visually display the type of your selling point. With this title of yours, you have no idea what type of book you are writing? I don't think anyone would click in to see it, unless you are a great person. I don't understand your content, or maybe I'm not the audience for this subject. From the title of the first chapter, it looks like it's science fiction, but I think it's so slow. I read half the chapter and couldn't stand it any longer. I don't know what you want to express? This is my most intuitive feeling from a reader's perspective. At the same time, I also lamented that writing is really difficult. I have been reading the posts posted by the dance master in a certain place. He has read a lot of people and commented on a lot of people's posts. Writing is really difficult!