From a Friendly Match to Arsenal

Save money: original heroine + bloody love triangle 😅

The protagonist only had four months of youth training, and was not even eligible to apply for the special talent clause, but he actually went straight to play in the Premier League.

Brother, the beginning is cliche. I suggest you change the beginning. Forget about the fight at the beginning. The protagonist is underage, his peers are driving, and the male partner is drinking beer in a bar. I remember that overseas this should be stricter. The female protagonist also drives the male protagonist back, and then directly poisons the body. There is no need to read the rest.

Forget about the emotional turmoil. After seeing Arsenal win the treble, they can break up with Cesc Fabregas and Robin van Persie over the contract renewal issue. Simply because the national team performs well, they can loan out core players like the protagonist, no matter how much fake wine they drink. In reality, Arsenal does this, which is to directly dismember the championship team by other giants. If they put a little pressure on them, they can rent out the core. If they do too much, they can sell them.

Damn it, this book was really written by a talented person. He was already a core player at Arsenal and yet he was loaned out to Inter Milan for a year?

Think about it, why is X round of X season, the most common football season, not written? The biggest advantage of not daring to write time is that it makes it easier to write blindly.

I didn't cry in the early stage and insisted on writing an original girl. It's not that I can't write such a very demanding writing style. Your writing of the female character is very poor. I don't see any character at all, and the character has no causes and consequences. It seems that she is a young lady who likes to be moved by herself and wants to play with you. She is not even as good as the male classmate. The male classmate has causes and consequences, does not take up space, and can be continued later. Then the most important plug-in is not described in detail, but is just mentioned in one stroke. Your description of the plug-in is very important, but you did not write it down, because it can expand the protagonist's route and the overall routine of the entire book, such as the invincible flow, the training effort flow, subdivision, copy flow, competition upgrade flow, and the dead flow of lying down. Then because there are no expansion plug-ins, your protagonist does not raise expectations. After reading chapter 18, there is no description of who the template of the protagonist is and how he plans to move. You see, all football novels basically use templates. Even if they are not broken down, they will give you ability values. You know very clearly what kind of football you are. Members, even if you read Lin Hai Tingtao's book Parallel World, he also set the tone for you in the early stage, which will expand to another topic. The title of Lin Hai's book is called Fox in the Zone. It is clear at a glance. Anyone who reads this category knows what it means. The title of your book just lists the team, and the content does not expand the subdivision of player categories. I don't think it's as good as a campus streamer. The above-mentioned campus streamers can handle all of the above, because this genre is known to be a super slow-burning streamer from the beginning. 😳

You are writing about football. You have already written ten chapters about football, but you only wrote about a community match. Can it take up two chapters? Not to mention the three golden chapters to retain people. What have you written after ten chapters? No wonder your grades are poor, you are putting the cart before the horse. If you want to achieve good results and retain people, the above bloody plots must be overhauled, otherwise your grades will never get better. It is impossible to retain many target groups at the beginning. You have to remember that you are writing about football, and those who click in to read it are also those who like football or are interested in football. After all, you have already written ten chapters, so how much content is there about football?

Everyone knows who the real big deal is, yet they even have the idea of ​​loaning him out. It really feels retarded.

The male protagonist needs to have his own edge, not to mention who is Cesc Fabregas? He cares about Arsenal, he only cares about Barcelona, ​​does he need to scream like a boss every day? Humility is not so modest. Don't write the little law as so important, and don't lick it so much. The main thing is to straighten the male protagonist quickly. It does look a bit embarrassing. Why don't the male protagonist go to Manchester United directly to succeed Ronaldo.