Blue Blood Resuscitation

After reading six chapters, I think it has great potential, so I'll leave a review. Let's talk about the advantages first. The writing style is relatively good and the writing is very tense, which can give people a strong sense of involvement. The opening hook is also very good. This is an advantage you should maintain. Let's talk about the shortcomings. After reading six chapters, I felt that your pacing was too intense. It was all about fighting, one after another, with no rhythm changes. It was quite tiring to watch. This is the main shortcoming. It is recommended to add some worldview descriptions between intensive battle scenes. These descriptions should not just serve the fighting. The second shortcoming is that the writing style is too detailed. Overly detailed descriptions can be used, but you cannot use this method to describe every thing you see. If you do this, it will weaken the impact of similar descriptions next time, and you will be very tired by the end. The third disadvantage is that the propulsion efficiency is insufficient. There should be some overlap with the first point. The first point is that there are too many fights, and this point is that besides fighting, there are too few meaningful things. I think if you want to improve it, you can write several lines together. Represents only personal views. It may be a bit blunt, but that's what I think as a reader.

It's not easy for newbies. Leave a comment to encourage me. If you don't mind, I'd like to share my thoughts. One is that AI has a strong atmosphere and too many meaningless descriptions. Generally, when we readers read a book, we read the story rather than the description. The description serves the story. Scenery description serves the background and world view, and character description serves the character and personality. All descriptions that are divorced from these two points are worthless. AI doesn't understand this, so it adds a lot of descriptions that affect the perception and interrupt the rhythm of the battle that should be done in one go.                                                                                                                                                                           There is not enough preparation in the story, and the turning point is too sudden. You may think that there is too much description and not enough foreshadowing. In fact, it is because there is not enough valuable description. To sort out the plot, the common people awaken, are accidentally exposed, are hunted down, and are rescued by new forces. These are fine, but the overall amount of information is sparse and unsystematic. 1. How to reflect the conflict between the common people and the nobles (how to lay out the background). For example, when the rescued person expresses his thanks, he says: This is the fate of us common people from generation to generation. Blue-blooded people are born unable to awaken. You can't fight them, so you can survive by being patient. One sentence can not only lay out the world view, make readers empathize, and also make the characters stand up logically (even the appearance of a tool man can serve the plot) 2. The description of the pursuer (how to portray the character) In another way, the two gatekeepers saw the pursuer coming and saluted (obey) Introduce the character's name and noble status), and then chat privately about why he is here. In another conversation, I heard that the noble was injured just after awakening. This is no longer an ordinary commoner, and must be attacked hard (playing a joke), xxx But once xxx, now the commoner will definitely die. A small plot is interspersed, which not only introduces the characters, but also serves the plot, and is also overly natural (again, tool people can also be very useful). Hahaha, I just told you a little bit. I hope it can give the author some help. I happened to be lucky enough to read this book during my rare day off. I wish you a bright future.