Death of Blood Feather

Hello everyone, I am a newcomer to Warhammer. I wrote a second-generation novel "Death of Bloodfeather". The protagonist Perros (also my OC) was born in the "Glass Agreement" of the Mechanicus. He is a living experiment implanted with the genes of the fallen primarch Fulgrim. He was handed over to the Blood Ravens Chapter, where he struggled under surveillance with the curse of his bloodline and his quest for loyalty. Finally, on the ruins of "Saint Anne's Cradle", he saw through his destiny as an abandoned son, used his free will to burn all his life into the light of pure loyalty, purified the twisted land, and presented to the Emperor the purest proof of loyalty tempered by corrupted blood. There are five chapters in total. The outline of each chapter has been written and will not be interrupted.