Mixing It Up in the World of Elves, Starting with Selling Candy

It's really disgusting to write plots all day long about pretending to be slapped in the face and being picked on by powerful people. What kind of break-up battle is there? You, a trainer, come to compete with the protagonist's pastry chef, a student researcher who has not graduated? The protagonist has a bunch of inventions that have been snatched up like crazy.

This description is absolutely outrageous!! Candy that grants immunity to type effects? With this, you can easily defeat any legendary Pokémon. Why bother training your strength? Just eat the candy!

What's the point of this description? Pokémon food is a very broad category. Does it mean that all other food will disappear, leaving only Pokémon food and energy cubes? It's like saying that in a certain world all human cuisine has disappeared, leaving only compressed biscuits and steamed buns. That would be quite creative.

Where did this come from? Is this still a Pokémon? Logically speaking, Pokémon is a pseudo-utopia. Pokémon's own world view is called a simple folk custom. Even the core goals of various villain organizations are to "purify the world". After half of reading, it turns out that some people have sinister hearts, gangsters, powerful people, and upper-class idiots.

The Pokémon world created by the author even has a distinctly classy feel to it 😅

Your dessert shop gets harassed by local bullies every few days, and your shop gets vandalized every day. What a waste of your strength, you elves! You need connections to survive in this world. You have such good resources, but you didn't establish connections with the higher-ups. You're constantly being harassed by petty thugs. Lillie has a lot of influence too, but her mother hasn't reacted at all to this.

This description is unbelievable! Wild Pokémon grow up eating air, right? 🥵

The gangland causing trouble is fine once or twice, but writing it again makes the protagonist seem useless. You have mythical beasts, the strength to go toe-to-toe with legendary beasts, these inventions, and a good relationship with the Champion. In other regions, you'd be treated like royalty. It also shows that in Lucerne, there are always people stealing your recipes, reporters, and so on.

Sigh, there's a misconception about Pokémon: all events revolve around famous NPCs. You see, all the candies are sold to either the Champion or the Gym Leader, while ordinary players become background characters. It's always legendary Pokémon that appear, which isn't very engaging.

The character's persona has collapsed. You don't expect a Pokémon protagonist to be a saint, but at least they should be positive and proactive, correcting their mistakes and loving Pokémon. However, the protagonist's behavior is increasingly deviating from this direction. They talk a good game, but their actions don't reflect that at all. Then, just when the plot is about to unfold, they force a single sentence to bring the story back on track. Writing quality: zero stars.