What Kind of Immortality Should I Cultivate?

After reading the first three chapters, I have some personal opinions and opinions. Of course, they only represent one person. If the author feels that what I said is wrong or something else, please ignore the following comments. The first is the introduction of the book. It is a bit lengthy and can't find the focus. Text bombardment similar to the main story line is not suitable for modern online literature. Normally, people don't have the patience to read the entire development of your story. What people want to see is not who your protagonist is or what he did, but whether your protagonist has a personality and what characteristics he has. The outstanding features of the story should be concisely reflected in the introduction. In addition, in terms of content, the modifications are a bit complicated and make people feel tired. Good writing is not based on the accumulation of modifiers, but a natural expression. Imagine going to work all day and wanting to relax, but in the end, you still read a bunch of so-called gorgeous words and sentences. I still have to put effort into understanding what the author wants to express in it. Oh my god, is it so tiring? So the writing still needs to be polished and needs to be more natural, subtraction rather than addition. Also, in terms of plot structure, I feel that the plot is a bit slow, and the contradictions are too late. I haven't read the first chapter yet. The kind of intense conflicts that readers expect, the protagonist's situation is not well represented, making it more difficult to substitute. In addition, the text expressions that do not conform to the understanding of the general public are even more difficult to substitute. The text should be more popular and natural. Don't think about becoming a master in one step. Directly imitating their style often does not work because you do not have a broad audience base. Another aspect is the relationship between the characters. The relationship between the characters and the protagonist is not strong enough, which can easily lead to confusion in the structure of the relationship between the characters. If the reader cannot grasp the memory points, it will cause the reader to read a chapter. I feel like I haven't remembered anything. Don't have so many character relationships in the first three chapters, don't rush to show the background of the story, and don't hide too much from the readers. This may seem contradictory, but in fact it is a degree. You must grasp this degree in writing. Imagine what you will do to the readers if you say too much. I think it's useless to talk a lot without seeing what I want to read, and I will eventually give up. Saying too little will make the reader confused and incomprehensible, so this degree is very important. Let's just say this much. Of course, you don't have to agree with my point of view, but please don't scold me. Please maintain friendly communication. Thank you.