Mortals, Draw Cards and Become Immortals!

How should I put it, this book is pretty well written. The character creation is average, especially the details, and the author is just vague and vague. The plot is also average, sparse, distinctive, but very stiff. Just reading Tian Nan's writing, I know that the author cares more about the women and the plot of Luan Xinghai. Some people rush to think about Luan Xinghai, but Tiannan is very sparse. The portrayal of the protagonist is okay, but a bit stiff. The code is written like a robot. I always tell 80% of the side story and then leave it behind and go directly to do another thing. For example, when I went to Chaos Xinghai, I didn't explain anything, and I didn't leave anything behind, such as leaving a message for the master, etc., And Nangong Wan didn't give any explanation in this regard. You can roughly imagine how interesting it would be to write about your Yuanying's return in this way. With a wave of his hand, he can do whatever he wants. Too strong and boring. This is also the fundamental reason why the monthly ticket price of this book is so low. Readers will see no changes in expressions or mood swings throughout the whole process of reading this book. Especially after completing the task, why weren't you given a card? Many places are not explained. I don't know what the author is thinking. Let's continue with the word water

Go to Tianxing Pavilion to buy formations. Are you out of your mind? You can't buy any good formations at all, and they are extremely expensive and have some back-up tactics.

I really don't like that none of the "Mortal" fans cut the Hu Zhang Tian Ping for various reasons to make amends.

I saw this cover picture, as well as a lot of verbose dialogues in the book, and it was a studio narrative written specifically for ordinary people. What the studio likes most is to use items from Eternal Life to distribute as cheat resources. And after it is put on the shelves, it will be replaced by AI to fully expand it, and there will be a whole dialogue. 😰

The protagonist is Tianlinggen. He can't walk when he sees those women in Mo Mansion.

Probably another studio matryoshka book

Details determine success or failure, author. You can write more about many details. It's no problem if you are a little sloppy, as long as there is no problem with the process.

The writing is a piece of shit and poisoned me.

I saw Chapter 4, and suddenly I came up with an idea that could make this book more interesting. For example, the character drawn will have memories of the protagonist, but cannot reveal any information about the system and the protagonist, and after completing the task, he can meet the person he has summoned. He can also do anything to the protagonist, but the author can add a setting. If the character who has been summoned by the system appears in front of the protagonist, and the protagonist has a character card, then a character card can be consumed to specify the character who has been summoned in front of him. Adding such a setting, as long as you have been summoned by the protagonist, you will not dare to offend the protagonist when you appear in front of the protagonist. It will definitely be interesting then.

Shit, the thousand-year-old elixir is not handed over to the sect, but is sold outside? So let me ask you, is the Tianling Root air? If you give the thousand-year elixir to Linghu or your master, will they still treat you badly?

It's too dull, just like a running account, it could use more interaction.

The details are a bit lacking. The lottery for the Ascension Order was not mentioned. Before becoming a disciple, each alchemy gave a bunch of top-level magic tools, and then you bought the magic tools. You can at least add that the properties of this magic weapon and the format are not suitable, so you have to buy it again. Otherwise, I think you already have a bunch of top-level magic tools and you are still buying magic weapons.

Fellow Taoists are welcome to read and comment!

Why is it not obvious how many times you draw cards?

Why don't you give the flames of life?

There wasn't much time left for him, so he kept repeating this sentence after listening to two chapters.

The technique is immature and childish! I don't know that I dare to eat things that are not available for others to poison.

Do you have a small guarantee for drawing cards? Is there a 50% chance of it being wrong?

How did the number of draws come about? I always get the number of draws for no reason.