Gentleman's Sword

I saw it on Writer's Assistant, let's read and comment on it. First of all, the plot has too few words to tell much, but the setting is very problematic. First of all, your realm division is too complicated. The realm of each country is different. It makes people not want to read it at a glance. There must be a unified realm division. Also, you clearly mentioned the specific realm in the chapter about realm division, but you also mentioned it in Chapter 4. Just mention it, just like a human machine. Since you are going to mention it later, why did you write a chapter about realm division before? And it is just like changing jobs in the game, and it is like nailing which country to death with what weapon. It would be more appropriate to ask the teacher to bring it up when the protagonist is in school. The paragraphs are also too long. It will look better when read in more sections. The chapters are too short. The two chapters together are about the same as one chapter. Also, when it comes to writing about countries, it has the same problem as the division of realms, which affects the perception too much. The comment may be too harsh, but it is indeed the problem. Of course, the author does not have to care at all. There is no need to take it seriously, and don't be angry about it. At the same time, please come and read my books and give me some suggestions and criticisms. Of course, you can also criticize me. Any criticism is welcome.