Fight for Immortality!

After reading a few chapters, I have some suggestions as an old bookworm. 1. The protagonist is a bit of a bitch, which readers won't like. 2. The protagonist spent 4-5 pieces of talisman paper to repair a hatchet for a villager. Isn't this disrespecting himself?

The choice of words and sentences makes me feel uncomfortable when reading, and there is an indescribable unsmooth feeling.

I had mixed feelings after reading it. The author's writing style is smooth and the story is told clearly and neatly, making it easy for people to read it in one go. If "no mistakes" is used as the criterion, it is definitely a qualified or even good work. But here's the problem – it's too "right". It's like a home-cooked dish made strictly according to the recipe. It tastes good but lacks the surprise to excite the taste buds. The plots, characters and ideas in the book seem to be found in other similar works, but they lack a unique "soul mark" that belongs to the author. I can feel that the author has a solid foundation of skills, but this skill seems to be used in the "safe zone". He does not dare to take risks or break the rules. In the end, the temperament of the whole book seems a bit... Bland. Just like a good student with excellent academic performance, he handed over a standard answer, but did not show his unbridled creativity. So, my suggestion is: be braver. I hope that in the next creation, the author will boldly inject the truly turbulent emotions and unique perspectives into his writing. There is no need to pursue stability, even if the style is strong or even controversial, it is far more moving than "correct but boring". Overall, this is a book that shows potential but has not yet fully blossomed. I look forward to seeing this author put aside his inhibitions and write something that truly bears his name. After the author reads it, if he feels it is inappropriate, he can delete it🙂

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After reading more than a dozen chapters, let me tell you my feelings. In the beginning, I was faced with my own weakness, but the government forced me to fight for my life. Moreover, my own Taoism seems to have been forcibly conquered from generation to generation since the founding of the Patriarch. It is about to be cut off, and then I also face being plotted against my senior sister. After I went to the front line, I flipped through the following chapters, and it seemed to be directly related to the ancestor's warning of "Don't join Bei Yan". Or was he forced to join? Or did you have to get involved with them because you had no choice? After this paragraph, please feel it, author, do you feel any pleasure? The overall feeling is like a mountain pressing down on an egg, making people wander between life and death. You are not an old author, nor a great writer. Readers have no sense of trust in you. You will not be happy until you can persist after hundreds of thousands of words. You can't even persist in the free period. Overall, I feel "suffocated" in two words.

I see that many readers are struggling with this, so let me use the words of the latest reader. 1. The cultivation class in this world is strict (this is a setting, there are specific reasons, but it has not been revealed yet). 2. There is the simplest reason, to take one more step on the road to immortality. Throughout the ages, there have been two senior brothers who went down the mountain to look for a way out, but ninety-nine percent of them have no effect (not only Xiao Qing Guan, but also most of the Fetus Breath Taoist lineages. I have left one percent room for it). If you want to take one more step on the road to immortality, you can only rely on the power of the inheritance. So the question is, what reason do you have for other upper-level orthodoxy to accept you? As for self-creation, it is even more childish. How can a fetal breath monk have the ability to create his own practice method? Therefore, Bei Yan's recruitment is both a disaster and an opportunity. I have also named him in the article. 3. Ideological issues, this is a different world of immortals and heroes, and the view of orthodoxy is not the same as ours. It is understandable to be a little persistent. But there are also those who are not persistent, such as the junior sister who is likely to return to secular life, and Chen Qin. In fact, I have named many things in the article, both overtly and covertly. Everything is traceable. Finally, thank you readers for your support.

Look at the tag "Mortal Flow" and click in to take a look at "Fetal Breathing Realm". . . .

If this grows up, these people must not be slaughtered.

Wonderful, thousands of people and thousands of tastes, come on

I don't know what the author is thinking. It's fair to say that the Taoist tradition is almost extinct and still respond to the call. It makes sense for a founder to give it a try in order to practice qi and pass on the inheritance. After knowing that there is no hope, why not try to create his own? If one generation can't do it, then 2 to 4 generations can't do it. Even if you don't gain much, you have at least tried hard. I feel like everyone in this lineage is just waiting to die. The author's writing is very unpleasant.

It's weird, the world view is not introduced, the protagonist is vaguely introduced, and the plot at the beginning is not attractive at all.

Hey, something happened. I went away for more than 20 times to catch up on my studies. I don't know if I can come back. I am a bit reluctant, so let me write more. There aren't many in the first place, so let's read on and see that there are thirty less! ! Grass! ! ! ! Don't look at the data anymore, write it down first and then talk about it!

That magic pen is not a killing weapon. Don't use it to hit people. It can't hit people head-on.

Readers read books for pleasure

The writing is so good, it's a pity for the eunuch

Come on, we are all on the street now, but at least my brother's writing is better than mine 😭

Well written. It's only over 100,000 words now. If you're not famous, you need to write hundreds of thousands of words or more to still maintain this quality. Do you look at any well-written books about mortals cultivating immortality that are not popular?

If the roots are cut off again, not a single ticket will be lost!

Well written, the practice system has not lost the wisdom of the predecessors