After Being Picked up by a God, I Learned My Own Magic

Dude, change the punctuation! Don't bring the habit of using punctuation in daily conversations into novels!

There are a lot of punctuation problems in the first few chapters, and the author can completely check such minor problems by himself. In terms of writing, I heard that writing more and longer can lead to a basic improvement.

Did you write it seriously? I also came here from the bottom of the video.

Pay attention to the intervals between each paragraph, this will greatly affect reading.

The text is so densely packed that it makes my scalp tingling, and there is almost no description of the environment. There seems to be no sense of crisis, and I can't relate to it. The cause is a direct result, for example, the baby is in a dilapidated house, and the protagonist is discovered while the door is still closed. .

Let's talk about the most direct problem /No main line /No sense of substitution /No foreshadowing The perspective and scene are too separated. /The reading experience is too poor, jumping around, I don't know what I'm seeing. /You can be slow in the early stage, use simple words, tell a good story, and there must be a main line.