Machinery Is the Noblest Magic

The protagonist should gain the ability to recover, otherwise it feels like it's over, and it's hard to comment if it feels like it's not fun enough at the moment.

The boss's fifth retirement commission is coming soon. I want to go to Silver Moon Kingdom to kill Alex with Aviya, Abangden, and Luoshan. The matter is very difficult and time is very tight, so the update can only be done in 4K at the moment. If I want to add more updates, I will have to wait until I come back from Silver Moon Kingdom. I expect to be back in a month. If I come back alive, I will work hard to write more. Love you and pray for alms, McCree.

It's well written, but the protagonist is too frustrated.

The author's pace should speed up. What initially attracted people to this book was the novel character and situation of the protagonist. Everyone is looking forward to the highlight of the dormant protagonist strategizing as a behind-the-scenes controller and the exciting point of identity being revealed. However, recent updates have focused on the one-sided emotional line between the female protagonist and the male protagonist and a group of people. The supporting characters, I understand the author's foreshadowing, but to be honest, they are not very attractive, and the characters and behaviors of the supporting characters, including the heroine, are not unique and outstanding. The readers' initial expectations were not met. I personally recommend speeding up the pace of the story, giving the protagonist more descriptions, highlights, and highlighting changes to make the story more epic and romantic. Always understand that it is always the protagonist and not the supporting role that everyone expects and pays the most attention to. This is also the biggest problem in my opinion. The protagonist cannot be sacrificed for the so-called group portrait or realism.

The author is currently writing very well, and I hope to see a different book

It's broken, you two came into my hands.

That Colin must be the Red Messenger

The writing is okay, the writing style is a bit green but the story is still attractive. The induced narration at the beginning of the chapter makes people feel bright, but the subsequent setting development is still too dry. Then I have reservations about the design of the protagonist's character. The author probably wanted to design the protagonist into a thoughtful and scheming boss, but it gave me the impression that he was very dull and didn't live like a human being. Especially when it comes to pursuing women, it was a bit deliberate. Although there is no big problem at the moment, I still hope that the author can handle the emotional drama better.

Damn it, I thought the protagonist was the one who killed his drinking sister in the first chapter. That was so interesting.

It's just weird, I want to see it but don't want to see it

Not bad, good, ready to eat

It started to become interesting when Foel designed the drawings. He became a lot more three-dimensional and full.

If you write well, if you work hard, you should be able to become a great writer. Monthly tickets are originally used for lottery draws, but think about those writers who don't lack these monthly tickets. Instead, you may need the encouragement of this monthly ticket.

Look at the emotional drama between the male and female protagonists, it's so well written.

It's a pity that the starting point now only has room for cool articles and funny articles.

Although I have been maintaining the book, I have been voting monthly, and the number of fans is not low. Generally speaking, I can write well, but not being able to persist is the biggest problem. First of all, the plot is very in-depth and has a strong sense of history, especially the author's sentence "If being a lamb is my destiny, then so is struggle." This plot design has surpassed the Internet novel, just like a traditional Western fantasy novel. Then, another thing I like is the writing style. How can I describe it? It is like a knight's biography. It is very distinctive and the expression is full and perfect. The shortcomings are the rhythm of the plot, the use of foreshadowing and foreshadowing, and the introduction of the world view. The author is a bit self-indulgent in this part, but it is also a small problem for the radio. In summary, the biggest reason for the poor performance is that it is not satisfying enough, and the other part is that it is not finished. Readers cannot see such a long plot, and many of them are keeping books. Similar to "Genius Club", novels featuring plots will not have results if they are not written to a certain extent, but Dian Niang's push, alas, everyone understands. In short, I am not surprised that the author has discontinued the book, but I hope that the next one will be better. I will try to finish it. Only a good book that is completed will have the credibility to be read and can also accumulate a lot of experience. I just found out today that the author has stopped updating. I will give you the last monthly ticket, although it is useless.

When will the protagonist stop feeling aggrieved and kick me?

It's been a week since I learned that this book would be discontinued, and I'm still distracted. I haven't had a good sleep for a few days, and I keep thinking about the characters and stories in the book. But what's even more sad than being reluctant to part with this book is that I gradually discovered that maybe I didn't like this book that much. Judging from the outline, even if the book continues to be updated, I may not be able to accept it one day. After thinking about it, I still venture to say why readers may not like it for the author's reference. First of all, the quality of this book is impeccable, but the title may be very discouraging. In addition, the first chapter is of a wedge nature, with unclear characters and unclear purposes. There is no protagonist and no one knows what the person is doing. It makes people confused and loses many readers. As long as they can persist until Colin appears in the second chapter, they may be attracted by the author's excellent writing. Then, readers do not necessarily need to watch a "pretentious" short and fast plot, but readers do need timely emotional feedback. There are also many slow-burning books that are popular. They do not rely on Long Aotian's cool writing, but their quiet and warm atmosphere is what readers want. Authors don't have to worry about not being read by readers for their non-pretentious books. There is a huge market for online articles, and there is no need to worry about the audience for any genre. The only way you can't sell something is if you don't sell anything. For example, quite a few readers of this book read for the relationship between Atifa and Colin, but the relationship between the two has not progressed. In the second volume, since Atifa approached the Red Messenger, almost fifty chapters have passed since Atifa learned that Colin learned how to cook for her, even if you include the later revelation that Silver Moonlight is her favorite person, to the next sweet spot when Colin said that Tia and Atifa were very similar, and then to the supposed "breaking point" when Colin admitted that he was attracted to Atifa and stabbing him was acting, another forty chapters have passed. Everyone in the comment area is eagerly waiting to eat Atifa's candy, but after waiting for two volumes, it seems that they can't find many sweet heartbeat memories, and they can only tearfully swallow glass shards from the knives on the floor. Readers are not so picky about food, but they will starve to death if they have nothing to eat. This can be said to have led to the "rhythm" problem reported in the comment area. Another example is that the second volume has Atifah lurking next to Colin, and the two people reverse their identities from the first volume. This is an extremely genius design, and I was amazed when I read it. I think there are many people like me who have wild imaginations about the development of the new relationship between the two and are looking forward to it. However, in the process of Atifa joining the Red Messenger, from McCree's assessment, to the first mission, to acting with Vivian, and finally having to fail in training again and need additional remedies, he officially joined the Red Messenger Group. At this point, Atifah and Colin haven't even begun to develop. It is so long and convoluted that the reader is not expecting it and is as frustrated and frustrated as Atifa by the series of surprises and failures. There is also the beginning of the second volume. After the end of the first volume, the scene and the perspective of the characters are suddenly changed. The reader is very confused. A group of people who don't know who they are are doing something they don't know. The readers expect to see the concerned Atifa and Colin, or at least the familiar Shia, but they have to wait for two or three days to know what this is about. This kind of confusion is very discouraging for readers.

The pacing problem is too big. I can't tell whether you are writing a war narrative or an adventure story. It is too little to say that it is a unit drama with a twist. Nondescript. Some of the explosive points become boring if they are delayed, and the foreshadowing does not attract much interest in reading, and it is not well buried. It was quite a failure in writing.

Do you think this book is good? Good! But it is good, just like glass fragments. Each piece can shine under the gaze, but it is not complete and can even be called broken. This book has no main line, and even some chapters have no hooks. The long descriptions and settings of the environment intensify this sense of fragmentation. Secondly, it does not follow the tradition of online novels and says that the protagonist is a time traveler, which will dissuade online readers. The atmosphere of depression throughout the article is also fatal. You can be depressed, but you cannot stay depressed. Just imagine, after working for a day, when you get home, do you like to watch something light or something heavy? Of course, if the author wants to write a masterpiece, not an entire Internet article, just pretend I didn't say it above. But even in a masterpiece, such as "One Hundred Years of Solitude", the description of the environment is not just a simple description of the environment. It is also rough and detailed, and only key places and objects will be described with emphasis.

Looks good, feels like an American drama

I have nothing to say about the author's writing style. I think it is very good. I am quite satisfied after reading the outline of the last chapter. As an old bookworm who likes to read cool harem stories. 1. It's not fun enough. The author finally realized this. Maybe it's because the writing style is more like a group portrait. When I saw the end of the first or second volume, I couldn't help but want to read it. I feel that the protagonist is too useless, meaningless, and all kinds of expressions of his ambitions are just tailoring 2. I personally like the harem, and I am quite satisfied with the outline. But just looking at the plot, there is nothing that makes people feel ambiguous and heart-beating. Some of it feels very realistic. I am afraid of tragedy in the later stage, or because the protagonist is too cowardly, I feel that there is no sense of camaraderie with the female character. 3. It is too group portrait. There are too many words about the roommate of the protagonist at the beginning, and the same is true for some later situations. Although the supporting roles should be written well, it always makes me feel that the author writes the protagonist in a way that is useless and not like the protagonist 4. Another suggestion is to write a better title. The current title is perfunctory and does not make people want to click on it All in all, I hope you will do well in the next book!

Memorial

There are many hints in the plot that Colin has a major relationship with the Silver Moon 1 In the setting, Colin never lies. My parents said that I am an unintentional person with a weak understanding of emotions. It seems that Colin's original purpose was to spy and kill people. 2: Colin knew that the Silver Moon Kingdom had devoted all its efforts to develop a real world-destroying weapon and ultimately failed, leaving only a semi-finished product. He also knew that this thing was only developed after the fall of the Silver Moon Empire and was called the Silver Moon Watch. He later explained to Foel that leap weapons usually cannot be in human form. 3: My surname is the surname of an old noble of the Silver Moon Kingdom of Alpet. Like my father, I was a soldier of the Silver Moon Kingdom and was stationed at the junction of the Silver Moon Kingdom and the Kingdom of Armet. The Red Messenger killed Silver Moon Glory in the military camp of the Silver Moon Kingdom. The Silver Moon Kingdom should have the strongest military force at that time. The book describes that he killed Silver Moon Glory, the strongest mechanic on the continent, in front of the strongest psychics, magicians, fighters, apprentices and thieves in the continent. 4 Colin's self-report has a high credibility with Yingfan III. Background: 100 years ago, the Silver Moon Kingdom could be said to be a great thing that made the entire continent tremble. King Yingfan I declared war on the world and began to conquer the world. During the process of conquering the world, he died of illness in the military camp. During the Incompetent King II, he was beaten back to the previous territory and the territory was divided into two. The third King's son, Silver Moon Glory, was killed by the Red Messenger when he was about to basically annex the Kingdom of Amate. Conclusion Colin is most likely the Silver Moon Watcher, and the Silver Moon Glory may be cast from his own body. But there is currently no motive, because after his death, the Silver Moon Kingdom was further divided, which led to the country's weakening and eventual destruction. Colin did not directly contribute to the Silver Moon Kingdom. In the plot, Colin and Yingfan III both wanted Shia to leave this country that was preparing for destruction. Colin has a good relationship with Yingfan III?