There's Something Off About My Supernatural Profession

Chapter One: The productive forces and relations of production are seriously mismatched. Technology has entered the psionic age, and there are even photon weapons, yet slavery still exists. This is the greatest waste of labor power. The world structure needs to be seriously changed.

Don't drag it out. Once you've finished telling the story, move on. I could tell what you were trying to say after reading just one paragraph. You spent several chapters describing it, but it wasn't even the main plot.

The outline seems okay so far, but I notice a few minor flaws. First, the level system is vague, or rather, the protagonist's mechanics blur the hierarchy. It's easy to attack opponents of higher levels; there's little difference between Tier 1 and Tier 5 – as long as you have a gun, you're good to go. The only difference between Tier 1 and Tier 5 seems to be the number of shots you can fire.

The quality is so high, it doesn't seem like it was written by a novice at all, but what's even stranger is that the score is so bad.

Plot: After opening the map of the capital city, I felt that the protagonist was too weak. For example, the current competition for the title of king in this otherworldly cultivation doesn't seem to have anything to do with the seventh-level protagonist. The title of king above the twentieth level is too far removed from the protagonist, so there is no sense of participation or enjoyment.

It was so good that after reading it, I wanted to see how the author's previous book turned out.

It's not badly written, but the protagonist, befitting his clergy, is quite hypocritical. The villain, Bai Long, is right; the protagonist and he are essentially the same type of person, just with different needs. The protagonist merely uses his subordinates as tools to gain faith.

Bai Long is quite right, the protagonist is a hypocrite.

The premise is good, but the main and supporting characters are rather dim-witted 😅, making it a rather lackluster novel.

No, how could they directly recognize that the protagonist was the military slave they hired? And then immediately determine that he was the one who was trying to coerce him into a deal?