I Spread Behelite in This World

After reading it in one night, I thought about it and gave the author some ideas. The author's writing style is a bit green. The details of the scenes and the depiction of characters and actions need to be improved, but it is enough. The author has chosen the subject matter very well and the process is quite interesting. Among them, I call the Jesus chapter wonderful. However, it is a bit anticlimactic. After Jesus turned black, he stopped so easily? Even the way he stopped was persuaded by the God of the Abyss in a few words? This makes people feel that Jesus' blackening has no weight. The only thing that can be said about this paragraph is deus ex machina. I think it can be described in detail here, describing how Jesus' destruction was prevented by humans, and the sacrifices humans made. The shining points of humanity in it finally moved Jesus and made him willing to give humans another chance, instead of being persuaded in a few words, which seemed that Jesus' despair and anger were so cheap. Finally, I would like to give you an opinion. Su Yuan is too strong and is no longer suitable for description from the main perspective. His appearance will only give people a sense of mechanical deity. I suggest that more descriptions be given to those who are desperate after getting Behelite and those who are willing to fight against evil.

Just like the title, the writing is great, no need for eunuchs

A world without hope is boring to look at, and the writing of redemption in the later stage will definitely lead to a thunderstorm, because the fear setting foreshadowed in the previous article has set up a structure, which is quite a strong character for the protagonist, but it is also very contradictory. The purpose of the protagonist's coming to the world is to become a human again, but by the time he arrives, the world has long been catastrophic by his own manipulation and has become an apocalyptic disaster. It is no different from the ghost world. What are you trying to do? This is an extremely contradictory setting. It is foreseeable that I would like to continue to recommend the plot. The description of salvation is inevitable, but it conflicts with the core setting of the full text (relying on equivalent exchange of negative emotions to come to the world). If you write the full text, it will collapse. If you don't write it, it will be a black article. Subscriptions will also be dropped.

Author, you are very stubborn, how dare you touch this subject. This subject matter must not be suppressed, it must be logical. , Although there is a risk of being lost at any time. After you write one book and become famous, readers will follow you if you continue to write the second book under your trumpet. If you force the protagonist to make some illogical plots, you will lose your money and reputation. Even if you are blocked and you continue to open a book, there will be no readers to follow the previous book. It will be a cycle of (open an account → write a book → rush to the market → open an account).

To be honest, the author intended Lu Ji to become the fourth Hand of God, but after reading his information and deeds, it was really inappropriate. His influence on the world was too low. The predecessors of Hand of God are all representatives of an era. They can be the most popular culture, the most mainstream beliefs, and the most influential ideas. But Lu Ji Far from meeting these conditions, he is not as tragic and famous as Che Guevara, nor is he as symbolic as the Palestinian thrower. It can even be said that in terms of influence, the number one male gunner in the Japanese server is above him Lu Ji's popularity, thoughts, and influence are far from enough to become a representative of an era.

This psychological profiling of yours is simply cheating and you can't even act it out. Don't you think it's strange to yourself?

I have read Sword Wind and Great Sword, and the author should not attack me with this. I can only say that this book is a pity. The underlying setting of the dark flow of the Abyss and the mixture of chainsaw man and demon are very interesting, but the core logic is very contradictory. The protagonist does not have any Abyss God character, and the Leziman attributes are not much, as if the author is urging He seems to do this, especially the religious content. It is even more obvious that the author has not carefully read the Old Testament or the Jewish Bible and the New Testament. The description and understanding of this aspect can be said to be very one-sided. The fabricated personality can only be said to be a copy of Father Anderson in the Royal Knights of Hell, and the crazy character of Dracula. He has not been shaped. He can only be said to be a good tailor. The works he sews have clear main colors, but the author wants to sew them all together. The result is that they are not alike. The clues have already been revealed when writing about the bloody battle in Europe. The image of Gawain as a revealer is also inconsistent. The author wants to write about his gradual and firm character. The process of establishing a belief, the result is that the concept is instilled after a few fights, the depressing setting itself is not pleasing, and the writing is often incomprehensible. A lot of content actually has no meaning and function. It could have been written better. The writing style is OK, but the rhythm of the story, the story context and the climax interpretation are not so good.

He wanted to copy Jianfeng and sew up Chainsaw Man, but the author was incompetent and ended up with four different images.

It's a bit like the golden three chapters. At the end of the fourth chapter, the protagonist suddenly pinches a panel and pulls it out. It's a bit unsettling, and the B grid suddenly falls 😅

It collapsed as I wrote it. . . . Plot after release. Highlight a fight between the left and right brains

This book is quite good when written about modern times, but becomes a bit humorous when written about ancient times.

The writing is okay, but the psychological profiling in 23 and 24 is too poisonous and will drive away many people. It is purely a deus ex machina. You might as well change it to the psychological suggestion of the protagonist and let him see the picture.

I feel like this book is getting more and more boring after its highs and lows 😅 From the beginning to the time it was put on the shelves, and the pursuit of full subscriptions until now, it feels more and more boring and dull. I really like this book! 😭😭😭 The novel plot at the beginning is quite attractive. From the past history to the present, the past, present and future are constantly intertwined. Under the protagonist, who is the mastermind behind the scenes, a different plot is played. As of now, it always feels like it's a bit anticlimactic, and the character's personality has changed too much, and the goal has shifted... That's fine, the important thing is that the process is not shown. Some plots feel inexplicable and do not reach the main points, which reduces people's desire to watch 🥵 If you want to write, just write the chainsaw man, the main plot of Hand of God, and other messy plots that can represent the development of the system. As a result, there is too much foreshadowing for a branch plot, which makes other plots a bit top-heavy 😭[ fn=12]😭 You completely failed to take advantage of your subject matter and wrote the plot happily. In terms of plot, you completely restricted yourself. In fact, it shouldn't be like this. Regarding your settings, there are many places where you can escape... You limit yourself in settings, and you always deviate from the plot. Some things can be written quickly, but they deviate from the main line. ... Character setting: The character of the protagonist, from the very first chapter, is actually good or bad, a person who wants to be freed, with both good and evil, but in the end he becomes a complete villain, without any emotion or intolerance (this aspect is quite bad, it deviates from the character at the beginning, even a transition is not written). Jesus also adapted well to that part. If you could write about the character change of God's Hand, and why the protagonist insists on creating an overlord, it would be based on the character's external performance to analyze the character. There is also the hand of God, which must be able to support the thickness, and the characters must be three-dimensional enough. Jesus and Joan of Arc can still be supported. The second big-headed doll is a bit inferior, but it is acceptable; but if there are two in the modern chapter, it feels a bit inadequate. The Hand of God should be a big figure in history, with enough thickness and enough faith to sacrifice everything! (I personally feel that even Wang Mang can be turned into the Hand of God) In fact, many times when reading books now, it is about the character changes and growth. How the characters have changed from the beginning to the present, look at the performance and some changes in the plot ... In In terms of system, you have completely restricted yourself, basically doomed yourself 😅 The power of human faith is not limited to that point. There are too many possibilities. The influence of the extraordinary will not disappear. The phenomenon itself is a fixation. You can do it boldly! If you split a mountain with sword energy, the mountain will not recover just because your sword energy disappears. (Spell to fight back, Warhammer, Slippery Ghost's grandson... Etc. Can all see the use of longing for creatures) Although your main subject is the underworld, it is not impossible to sew, there are too many works that can be sewed! Even a single sword style is more than just such a system! Extraordinary Sword Wind has too many things besides Behelet, whether it is pure magic, magic products that can exist permanently, or using Behelet to directly make weapons... These things all exist, and there is no need to limit it to Behelet alone. Instead, you only design the plot purely on the chainsaw man that Behelet connects to. You can definitely add many systems, as long as they are compatible with your own settings, no need to be too stubborn! It is absolutely possible to focus on a talented person, a gathering of heroes... Onmyoji spells are no problem, Japan's 8 million gods are no problem, totems are no problem, ripple breathing techniques and internal strength training are no problem (for these practices, you can use faith to strengthen your own perception and transform and strengthen your body. After that, even if you lose the blessing, this state will be retained, and you can still use the power you have cultivated and transformed before), and magical girls can also be used. There are too many ways to write about the application of faith and thoughts, but they are limited to one point. ... I really want to read it, but I feel that the author is getting tired of writing... I hope there will be a remake 😢🙏🙏🙏

The author, the Vatican, must come up with some extraordinary power, otherwise it won't be worth seeing. Human excellence must be consistent with the hierarchical designation of the Holy See. For example, the first level of extraordinary is called a saint, the second level is called a priest, and the third level is called a bishop. . Your D to SSS are not cool at all, and it conflicts with the style of this subject and is very inconsistent.

It's getting boring. The key is that the character of Gawain is an image that is beyond ordinary people but not much. With Ye Ge in front of him, he looks quite cool. I feel that De is not suitable for the role. The key is that he is not lively and does not look like a charming person like a president.

Just write it if you want, because the protagonist has changed the past, and the female profiler has gained the superpower to feel despair because of her ancestors. Write it if you want. There are leftover mobile phones in the dance hall. It happened that a hacker or opponent of the dance hall hacked their camera and took the video. The result is what you wrote.

Sigh, it feels like a pity. Your subject matter is indeed good, but after it was put on the shelf, you made a lot of mistakes, making a book that should have been a small masterpiece, become as good as it is now. I still hope that you can stick to the completion of the book, don't escape from the unfinished outline so quickly, and at least complete the plot foreshadowing of Chainsaw Man. I am not looking forward to the plot of Gawain's Hand of God 😂

The main reason behind the collapse of the behind-the-scenes drama is that the protagonist is too invincible and cannot write an epic story about the character, which leads to a facial expression.

The protagonist is obviously playing a historical development stream, constantly revising the past history. Although it will be repaired by historical inertia, it will still leave traces on the present 😎 Then the only thing that can be left to the current world is information! It is recommended that the protagonist disguise and explain his/her own intelligence to a certain extent. ① The Netherworld is originally the will of all living beings, and it can be called an alternative alaya. Although it is not known whether the protagonist came to this world because the world has become like this, or he came to this world in this way, it shows that this is the collection of human will. ②The left hand fights the right hand. The protagonist obviously has his own rhythm due to the inertia of the world. If it were put to an unknown person, it would probably be a split in the godhead! (It is also normal to have a split godhead, because as mentioned before, the protagonist appears as a collection of human wills, with good and evil, so he will naturally have a good side and resist the malicious side) ③The church and the protagonist, it is recommended to set the church as a collection of human wills that has been discovered, and to choose the direction in the way of worship, so as to choose and set the church. (Then the corruption of the church further led to the corruption of faith, so the protagonist became like this) ④The Nether World was once a real paradise, a collection of all illusions, neutral and clear, but now it has become extremely muddy. It's turbid (This is the original work, you can add the past to shift the blame to a certain extent) ⑤The essence of the nether world is to respond to each other, and all living beings are always responding to each other 😜 Human beings treat them with malice, and naturally they are treated with malice in return. ⑥Because the chainsaw man is added, it is also very suitable. The contract between the devil (master and apprentice) is actually a contract with God the Father. This is the only thing that can bind them. (Let everyone know that this is the fairest, and not random conditions like the original work, which is the most beneficial to the protagonist) ⑦ The essence of the sacrifice is the same as in He Jianfeng's legend, but the protagonist can add a little difference here, for example, he can use a strong and firm positive will (in fact, those evil thoughts can also be regarded as a firm will), or he can make a sacrifice... But there are too few of these compared to the negative ones, so the Netherworld becomes like this! (After all, according to historical revisionism, everything will be revised. Why can't the protagonist take both sides? Why can't the hero be created after creating a demon king? 😎 Just as things must turn against each other, in a difficult environment, human beings will crave hope and will have positive emotions. This desire for survival is likely to give birth to a brave man... This way, historical revision can also be maintained) ⑧ Betrayal of Section 13, I feel like a devil contractor. ⑨There are so few apostles now, why don't you doubt it? (◇) You can also add a setting here. In a certain era, a group of brave and noble people sacrificed themselves and built a dam (metaphorically, a bit like the black stone of Warhammer Mars Dragon). This strong and towering dam forcibly isolated the Netherworld. This is why the church destroyed a large amount of data. It was obviously prepared to make everyone forget it and seal it completely! Why did Hyundai suddenly appear again? That's even simpler. This is a human Alaya. As the number of humans increases, the size of the nether world will naturally increase. And because of the materialistic materialism of capitalism, it is actually more turbid. The wave begins to hit the world, and a trace of darkness begins to seep out 😏 ... I suggest that the protagonist add these settings when revising history, and also pave the way for the direct arrival in modern times 😃 After all, for the protagonist, everything is contemporary history and can be modified at any time, so there is no problem in adding some settings! This kind of word-of-mouth transmission, the background setting rules passed down from ancient times to the present, is in a sense the most critical!

It was good in the early days, but now it's getting more and more boring.

It just doesn't look good It feels like I've never seen it before, the plot goes in the left ear and out the right ear Don't say this is a Jianfeng fanfic This Chainsaw Man accounts for more than 90% of the body weight Correction is an apostle But the plot has been moving closer to the Chainsaw Man Apostles should have been flying all over the sky, but in the end they were all very restrained

After reading Chapter 146, all I can say is that it's over.

The protagonist's morals are so low that he personally went to the mortal world to sleep with a woman and then killed her. 😅

I've read a lot of Sole Patterns, and they all had fun in the early stage and slowly pretended to be advanced and pretended to be the Riddler, making themselves look very 🐂🍺, but it didn't look good this way. This one is even better. It was pretentious from the beginning. I couldn't stand it when I failed to deliver the red Overlord Egg for the first time. I didn't think the protagonist was very powerful in pretending, I just felt like a clown.

If you like the idea of ​​the mastermind acting alone, you can watch it, but you're just too young.

Anyway, I really like reading it. I have been following it and I have seen The Disciple before I know it. I hope the author will insist on finishing it. I will always support it.

It's right to close the comment section. You're missing out on a very appetizing book by plugging it in.

There are many shortcomings, but they are not too serious. The biggest shortcoming is: people who have not read the original work (such as me) are confused in many places. Is this original work famous? Never heard of it at all

The author's writing style is probably one of the best among books of this type.

Damn it, the genius theme and the correct topic in the text make it even more awesome!