My Rebirth Is Too Strong

It feels like the author has started writing stream of consciousness again like in the previous book, especially in the chapters about eating in a restaurant. The causes and consequences are unclear, and the dialogue transitions are extremely blunt. Try to write more characters' actions to pave the way for the subsequent dialogue.

It's okay, but the disconnection is weird in some places and a bit out of place.

It's okay, but some scene changes are too sudden and look a bit messy. It would be much better if it could be corrected. Come on

I don't understand where the male protagonist is, the succubus? Suddenly there is one king and two queens

Come on, come on, come on, come on! Come on

Many places happened inexplicably. Did the author delete a lot of details? Why did the protagonist seem to be obsessed with several women as soon as he was reborn without cheating?

Dear writer, your new book is very good. I have joined the new book investment group. Please update~