The Prisoner of Hogwarts

After reading some, I feel that the labels of Strongman Stream and Return of the Strong should be removed. I was deceived by these two labels 😭 and thought it was Grindelwald's strength. The strength of these two labels must be compared with Lao Deng and Voldemort 55, as well as the transformation after "Return". You have to be sure or very sure that you can beat it. If you don't have these two labels, you may not read it and you may not have such high expectations for the protagonist's strength. Now, because you misjudged the protagonist's strength based on the label at the beginning, it makes you feel frustrated watching it, but it's not that frustrating. It's very uncomfortable.

I've read a lot of fanfic, but a lot of the pacing has problems. Either there are too many daily routines, the plot is too slow, or it is just a pure and refreshing story, and the supporting characters have no meaning. You can clearly feel that the author's writing style is very good, the psychological description and environmental description are very good, and the whole book has a strong sense of immersion. The pace is also very good. Anyway, once I opened it, I couldn't help but keep reading. I especially like the Prisoner Chapter. The description of the Weasley family on the way to the station is very realistic and realistic. However, the character and charisma of the protagonist are still not described enough. I don't know if I am holding it back. Although there will be some side descriptions of other aspects, such as the attitude of the house elf and Reggie towards the protagonist, the establishment process of the chamber of commerce and what the protagonist has done in the past have not been described. The character is still very unstable. In addition, there is one thing that I always feel is very inconsistent, that is, the protagonist clearly knows the context of the entire plot (all listed), but when faced with the secret room incident, he behaves as if he knows nothing. It is mainly because he can act as if he knows nothing. However, in the author's description, I feel that the protagonist really knows nothing. This sense of inconsistency is very strange. It is better to just remember the general context of the initial setting, but not understand the details at all. In addition, it is best to describe magic research in as much detail as possible. Currently, I feel that the protagonist does not have to worry about the Chamber of Commerce, and other people are doing the gathering of information. There is basically no description in class, and the research is carried out relatively casually. For a while, I felt like "he seems to be very busy, but he has no idea what he is doing." Moreover, the research on the soul was really sudden. It seemed that he succeeded in researching it just when he wanted to. There was no perfect process at all, because the signature magic was obviously "clouds and mist" and "soul-suspended life-locking", which had nothing to do with the soul. Please tell me clearly how you studied this ten years of imprisonment, Hun Dan. This is just a shortcoming. The author will keep up the good work. Monthly tickets have been provided.

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The writing is quite good. The protagonist has his own ideals and aspirations. He does not simply follow the original plot, but uses the original plot to follow his own path. I wrote my own plot and characters. Keep up the good work!

If there were no Legacy of Hogwarts, the protagonist would still be capable, but just a hundred people? Just kill so many people to become a legendary figure? Comparable to Mad-Eye? Still imprisoned in the Forbidden Forest, Greenwald's treatment? Is it worthy?

Have you ever been a prisoner? Some things were written randomly, so I took it for granted.

This article is definitely not boring, the opening grid is full, and the setting is relatively novel. But the recent performance of the protagonist is a bit unworthy of this setting. He proposed a very superficial theory and then used his own strength to prove it? What is the difference between this and success = talent + hard work? My assessment is that I sit at the same table as the black elementary school student next door.

You don't understand the race war at all. House elves are the glory of the ancestors. Before whites enslave blacks, blacks enslave whites. The first choice between two species is always war. Only when the strength is determined can the way of treatment be chosen.

I thought the protagonist was Grindelwald's type, but it turned out that the protagonist was worse than Voldemort, and he didn't want to see the protagonist anywhere.

Looking at this introduction, the protagonist was imprisoned by Dumbledore. Not only did he not take revenge after he came out, but he also rushed to help?

Malfoy is now your subordinate, and you are his boss. Even if you are the boss in name only, what is the difference between using Malfoy to find out if Barty is exposed, and yourself being exposed? It's too low to handle it this way.

Great Summoning Technique-Is there any Shennong 🙂

It's not the one in the introduction that hunted hundreds of dark wizards. I know, of course I know that Harry Potter is like this. Voldemort didn't kill as many as the protagonist, but this one killed hundreds of dark wizards and became a big devil, hahahaha. So how many hundreds were killed today?

In Harry Potter's seemingly huge but actually simple world view, don't set it too deep. The plot prefix After reading more than a dozen chapters, it is revealed that it involves private executions, secret organizations, post-war remnants, and the freedom of elves The protagonist is also given a background story involving many original characters, and is also burdened with a lot of emotions I can only think that the author is suffering from literary youth.

I still don't understand it. Even though Slip is a dark wizard, he is not treated like this. The protagonist should at least be considered a positive character. How can he be so defenseless against a dark wizard? Too poisonous

It was only after reading Chapter 5 that I realized that the protagonist was an "indigenous"

Dear author, can the oath followed by Dumbledore be lifted? Otherwise, my wife will feel aggrieved😅

I don't know why I feel so weird when I see a protagonist with a Chinese name mixed in with a group of foreigners in a Western fantasy novel.

I will use witchcraft, curses, potions, and alchemy to create the extraordinary new coronavirus, use the little wizard to bring the original solution home, and then wipe out the entire British Muggle community in one wave, directly exterminating the increase in Muggle wizards, and also use the huge death resentment to upgrade into an evil god. Dumbledore, this is your choice.

Since we couldn't kill them, we could just strip them naked, hang them up, and parade them through the streets. If they cannot die physiologically, they should die socially.

When I saw this introduction, my first reaction was that the biggest mistake Albus Dumbledore made in his life was that he suffered a love brain attack when he was 17 years old and was bewitched by Grindelwald. 😄 If it weren't for this, he would have suffered from PTSD and languished in Hogwarts for the rest of his life.

Starting point for writing novels, especially fanfics or popular fanfics There are only two ways to write a good beginning 1. Interesting blend of plots 2. Strong sense of substitution + realism This book starts with Not interesting I can't experience the sense of immersion in this book. The author can check out the e-sports category. The writing is average, but it is to write a time-travel and go back to the opening commentary video to sell cakes. The first few chapters of the novel will not be bad. I forgot the name of the book that is now in the top of the classification The author of this book seems to have a very high start, but it feels distorted I can't understand at all that your protagonist's character and ability will be imprisoned for ten years and negotiate terms with Deng. If you want to write about negotiating terms, you can't lay it out like this. It feels like it must be done like this. If you want to write a cycle to put the protagonist's character and Deng's character together within a limited framework, they will come out of the plot on their own. It can't be forced. I wrote about what the protagonist must do, what the supporting role must do, and what the villain must do

How is the writing, and why is it so unclear in the comment section?

Generally speaking, the book first tortures the master, a little torture, a big torture, or the Kingdom Blood type of torture over and over again, and then makes you feel good, with ups and downs. This book is not abusive in the early stage, not in the middle stage, and not in the later stage. Just when you thought you were going to have a great time all the way to the end, and the finale was going to have a big climax and beat Voldemort to the point where his mentality collapsed, suddenly there came an inexplicable story about the God of Death taking over to test the torture of the main character. In fact, he is not very abusive, and he can barely have an abuser index of about 6 to 7, but the timing of this abuse is really wonderful, inexplicably wonderful. If I have to say that it is related to any literary writing method, it may be the joke style "Absurdism" that is particularly popular among the younger generation in recent years. To be honest, this writing style is a pity. The author should not have thought of the ending by himself. This ending gives rise to hemorrhoids. I was so angry in the middle of the night and wasted my precious sleep. Oh, I really deserved it. I should have been sleeping. I read nothing in the middle of the night. I just went to the toilet and I didn't even have the nerve to look in the mirror.

The protagonist is indeed a prisoner. He was imprisoned by Dumbledore in the early and middle stages, and by the author in the later period. In front of the Death Hall, the protagonist is imprisoned in a time loop. Regulus does not summon the protagonist for some reason. The protagonist has just appeared in a few chapters, and the author cannot figure out how Voldemort beat the protagonist and Dumbledore imprisoned the protagonist again. After dozens of chapters of the battle between the coalition forces and the corpse eaters, the protagonist could do nothing and watched his comrades being killed. Near the end, an unforeseen "I Love Magic, I Choose the World" appeared. The world chose me. The deus ex machina imprisoned Voldemort instead of killing him. Voldemort enjoyed being the victor for dozens of chapters, while Harry and the others suppressed the story for dozens of chapters, suppressing it first and then rising. I can't see where it was rising. Voldemort was imprisoned lightly, and there was no development after victory, nor was there any follow-up to the First Order.

I have become more literary and artistic recently 🙂. These chapters all have similar sentence structures that appear repeatedly. They can't be from AI, right?

Then Prisoner 2: Time Reincarnation, Prisoner 3: Death Valley. I feel like I'm not here to watch the Hogwarts story, but to watch the protagonist go to jail. The Hogwarts jail chapter is okay. Later, I will reincarnate and jail for dozens of chapters. I will play two chapters after coming out and then going back to jail. The future direction is foreseeable. After dozens of chapters in prison, Voldemort continues to fight. In the desperate moment, the protagonist is released from prison and beats Voldemort in two chapters. The book will be completed ten years later. Changing the protagonist to a natural disaster makes no difference in the look and feel. It feels the same as Voldemort being struck to death by lightning or being hit by a meteorite. It is just as sudden and cold. The biggest winner in the whole book is Voldemort. In the original world line, he was beaten by Dumbledore, but now he is beaten by Dumbledore from the front. In the three battles, the protagonist was beaten once and suppressed. In the last time, he was beaten but the protagonist himself was imprisoned. Under the premise that Voldemort is bound to fail, this horizontal comparison of Voldemort's original work and other works is like winning the lottery. The more I write, the more I feel that Voldemort is actually the protagonist. Dumbledore, the greatest white wizard of this century who imprisoned the protagonist for ten years, is used to confront the most powerful Dark Lord in history; the First Order, an elite military organization that insists on justice and enforces orders and prohibitions, is used to set off the powerful strength of the Death Eaters. Lynch, who possesses infinite willpower and has accomplished great feats in the reincarnation of time, has returned as a king. He was pulled away by the justice of death at a critical moment to set off Voldemort's destiny. He also faced death with a Horcrux. I, Voldemort, fly freely, but you, Lynch, are addicted to jail.

In the end, this ending and this plot are too much for everyone to discuss. Haha, I just want to jump to the ending. I don't understand how this is written. I'm confused and regretful.

The protagonist brought a rooster and said that when he looked directly at the basilisk, if he lost consciousness, the magic that bound the rooster would fail, and then the rooster would crow and kill the basilisk. Then the question would arise. The rooster may not crow immediately, and if the rooster looked directly into the eyes of the basilisk, would it die? Is this mentioned in the setting of the original work? Well, actually this question is meaningless. If the protagonist loses consciousness, the author will definitely let the rooster crow.

The scene when Lynch disappears is very strange. The logic of the whole book is clear, but at the end he starts to play the role of a fighter, and in a very depressing environment. Personally, I think Voldemort should have died as soon as he reached the Death Hall. This kind of forced suppression conflicts too much with the writing style.