Mortal: Start from the Game Store

The protagonist travels through the world of immortality wearing a top-notch gadget. Then he scheming with a group of mortals. But the author still thinks this is very normal. If it were normal, would there be so many people saying this in the comment area?

It feels like the author has sacrificed everything for the sake of the end. With this kind of mall system, as long as you have enough stones, the magic weapons, elixirs, and exercises are almost infinite. It can be said that, and then you keep writing about dealing with a mortal. In fact, Qi training can make a quick transition. You can go directly to the basic building, and then engage in reselling, pretending to be a master of alchemy or weapon refining, etc., You can develop quickly with just a few stones. The advantage of this system is that you don't need to download a dungeon.

This plot of exchanging gold for spiritual stones is enough. You've been writing it for a week.

This plot of Mortal Dynasty makes my scalp numb. There is really no need to write this. If you have a golden finger and earn the price difference, you can take off. What does it mean to scheming among mortals every day?

To be honest, I have read so many mortal fanfics. This book is definitely one of the first ones. Unfortunately, the original copy of Mortal Dynasty was not well designed and even a little dissuasive. This book is not even like a fanfic. It is almost all original. The protagonist's growth process from imitating Han Li to be a loner at the beginning and later becoming Mingwu is also well written New Taoist friends, please don't be misled by some people in the comment area. The writing style and content of this book are definitely pretty good

There is such a big thing, it's only after it's put on the shelf that you can reach the foundation building

1. None of the female characters who have had a relationship with the protagonist have a happy ending. One whose life and death are unknown will not be found, and one who knows her whereabouts will not save her (it is also that she only knows her whereabouts, but it is completely difficult to say what happened to her). The second one can still be explained. The opponent is Yuanying, and Jiedan is unable to fight against it. The first one is completely incomprehensible, because you didn't encounter any particularly powerful enemies in Wulonghai, except for the convulsions and swelling, and you had to kill people casually on the way back to the sect after the mission. It turned out that the opponent had a father who was in the core formation stage, but your follow-up plot also said that you can deal with the opponent in the foundation stage. And to this day, I still don't understand why we designed a plot in which the protagonist hides his identity and encounters a difficult woman. Is there any big conspiracy behind your return to the sect after the period of stationing on the island to report? And then you just don't explain the reason and just offer bribes to let people go. Is it normal for people to suspect you? In the original work, Han Li went to the mine with a token that could summon traveling disciples. The focus was on "traveling". Han Li didn't think the mission was dangerous, so he went. The protagonist could have had a more normal behavioral logic at that time, but he had to forcefully create conflicts, but this plot was considered a minor problem. Then the follow-up protagonist, you, wanted to escape the war, so you ran to the Sea of ​​Stars, and you didn't have much time to look for her. OK, it's understandable. I kept writing about how much I missed Hua Yuerong, but in the end, I didn't go back to look for her after forming the elixir, and I didn't have any plans to get the Nascent Soul soon. Seeing this, I really couldn't stand it anymore. Han Li had offended the Ghost Spirit Sect at that time. Wang Chan also knew Han Li, and he even knew the location of the teleportation array. Who did the protagonist offend if he didn't return to the Five Dragon Sea? The Danjie elder who could fight him in the foundation building stage? Does anyone know the location of the teleportation array? Your book reminded me of the historical novel "Step by Step" written many years ago. It also had a plot where the protagonist was harmed by someone and lost his first love, but the author handled it much better. Even if the protagonist's first love really died in that plot, readers would not criticize it, because the relationship and separation are so wonderfully written. The first love has a reason to save the protagonist, and the protagonist is strong enough to immediately take revenge on the person. 2. The author really has a big misunderstanding about fan fiction. I think your writing style is okay. This book is not very popular, and it is indeed related to the fact that it was too far away from the mortal story line in the early stage, but it does not mean that readers like Han Li will like to read it. The author went too far later, and confessed to Han Li. The logic is reasonable, but it is very awkward. The Land of Ghosts and Grudges is full of plots and insights from Han Li, so why not watch the original work and anime. I hope the author can really think about it carefully and grasp the degree of fandom. Personally, I think the primary purpose of fan writing is to make up for some of the bad plots and endings in the original work, and even try to trick Han Li. However, some people accept this method of writing without leaving as many regrets for Han Li. Didn't the author realize that most of the current Mortal fandoms actually borrow the story framework of Mortal, and most of the characters who appear are supporting characters in Mortal rather than the protagonist Han Li? Normally, I personally like books written by younger readers. In this book, the author does have a lot of profound ideas and insights into life. Later on, he even writes that the protagonist is still changing his thinking and growing. This leads to the fact that the protagonist in your novel has a miserable life. In terms of satisfaction, the feeling is not much higher than that of Han Li in the original work, but the story of suffering and hatred is much more than that of the original work. I have to say that the protagonist can grow, but this kind of plot should generally be written in the early stages of the novel. According to the current progress, the protagonist of this book is already at 70 or 80% of the pill formation stage before Zi Ling, who is much younger than the protagonist, points out that the protagonist's life is fake. I really doubt how you, the protagonist, can survive the inner demons of Yuanying? If you are truly dedicated to pursuing the great path, you should not fall in love, let alone accept disciples, and you should not interfere in other people's lives from the beginning. As a result, there was karma, and something happened to someone close to me. Let me say: This is God's will, and I can't help it. In general, this is what this book is like. The writing and story are good, but the protagonist in the author's book is unlikable and too sanctimonious.

The writing style of this book is better than that of most mortal fanfiction, but many people come to the fanfic to see the intersection between the protagonist and the mortal characters (not necessarily Han Li, but also the characters in the book). However, the author set up such a big plug-in and ended up writing a slow-paced workplace story 😥. Many readers couldn't wait for you to write that the protagonist met the characters in the book and abandoned the book. I can't hold on after reading it now. I'm destined to see you again.

It would be most satisfying for this kind of top-level plug-in to directly act as a bad guy in the two worlds. Wouldn't it be good to engage in a chamber of commerce to buy low and sell high? If you put it into operation, 1 million spiritual stones a year is not a dream. You must have said it. The low-level people in the world of cultivating immortals should be content with it. But the problem is that this plug-in of yours is a game. You can definitely get Yuanying puppets to come out to protect you. As long as it can come, it will snowball.

I'm afraid I'm not from a female channel, and I'm scheming with mortals in articles about cultivating immortals.

It's almost a 700,000-word paper, but I haven't linked to the original work yet, and I haven't concluded any elixirs yet. It's too slow, really.

For his own plan, he first indirectly made King Qi crazy, causing many innocent people in the Prince of Qi's palace to be killed. The protagonist pretends to be King Qi and kills a group of mortals who resisted King Qi's tyranny?

To be honest, it's a bit useless. The setting of the novel is very good. The plot has some problems. The protagonist's sect is worse than Huang Maple Valley. It doesn't give you any benefits, but it's a lot of tasks. Also, the protagonist starts practicing without mentioning improving his cultivation level and building a foundation. He gets the teleportation array and has to form a pill to leave. If he doesn't quickly find a place to retreat, he wanders around. The Taoist monk also comes and goes offline inexplicably. The most suitable place for the protagonist is to open a store like Tianxing City. If you don't have Yuanying, you can't go out and open a store. You can sell anything. You can sell any kind of knotted pills and knotted souls. You can sell them seven or eight times for takeout. Equipment is the hardest thing to raise prices, so it's better to sell raw materials.

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Summary of Poisonous Points in Internet Articles 1. When encountering an enemy that is too strong, you should run away instead of bursting into a small universe, awakening mysterious power, having epiphanies and breakthroughs in battle. 2. When being chased by the enemy, you should remain anonymous and act in a low-key manner instead of continuing to take high-profile murderous risks. 3. Killing people, seizing treasures, mutilating corpses, and eradicating traces to avoid being approached by enemies or even harming relatives and friends should be the basic IQ of the protagonist. 4. Make good use of your own talents/cheats/plug-ins, which should be based on the protagonist's basic IQ. 5. It should be the protagonist's basic IQ to hide one's cheats/plug-ins, avoid being discovered, kill people and seize treasures. 6. Do not ridicule others in person for no reason, including the protagonist. It should be the basic IQ of the villains, supporting characters and passers-by. 7. If you work for others, including women, you should negotiate the remuneration in advance. 8. Talking in a battle will make both sides look stupid. The more words there are, the more stupid they will be. 9. Taking risks requires a sufficient reason. 10. Realm division is the cornerstone of the combat power system. If you casually cross large realms to kill enemies, the combat power system will soon collapse. 11. Being able to take care of oneself without the protagonist needing to save lives frequently should be the basic IQ of the protagonist's relatives and friends. 12. Monks will not be slaves to mortals. 13. Being free and unrestrained is a fairy. 14. Tell more stories and less reasoning.

If three-tenths of the people in the comment section of a book are trolling randomly and without any logic, then they may be readers who like to troll people without thinking. If more than half of the readers are trolling based on evidence, and they are also trolling unreasonable parts of the book, then it proves that there is a big problem with the plot of your book. You can revise it quickly while there are only a few dozen chapters. When you are revising the next one or two hundred chapters, the hundreds of people who abandoned the book will never read your book again. Regardless of whether you revise it or not, the first impression readers will have is that the writing of the book is too rubbish and there is no need to read it. Fortunately, Qidian does not have a function to block the author.

The front is pretty good, but it's a bit too brainless. What's the use of buying a bunch of low-level talismans with 300 spirit stones? It can only be used in the late stage. Shouldn't it be mid-level or high-level? It has high damage and high defense. Also, it's too stupid to go back to the sect to develop. Normal people shouldn't live in a fairy city, pretend to be a master of various arts, open a shop, and develop in a wretched way. No one can stop you. No matter how you spin up the plot, it will go well

Looking at it from the beginning, the plot actually doesn't have too many bad points, but the pace is too slow and the excitement is a bit lacking 🙂

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The second time I read it, I only read dozens of chapters, and I couldn't bear it. Why is it always the inner drama of the protagonist? Either his eyes are cold, or his mouth is sneering. Has anyone seen the back? Does it look good? Tell me.

The author thinks that his perception is correct, which leads to poor handling of plot issues. It can neither cater to the market nor cater to itself. The essence is still arrogant. I feel that what I write is logical and not purely refreshing. It is better to let go of yourself and the next book will be brilliant. People yearn for beautiful things. It's also cool. Such as the inscription on the gold medal, showing the saint in front of others, adding fragrance to the red sleeves, helping the country, turning the tide when it is falling, and supporting the building when it is about to collapse. Lying drunk on the battlefield, banishing wolves as slaves, expelling the Tartars, restoring China, carrying it forward, and rebuilding a prosperous age. They have wisdom and ideals. The essence of the fairy tale is the same, and it is the same for any theme. Grasp these core points, and your writing skills are not bad. Why worry about not subscribing? The novel is also a compensation, satisfying people's fantasies about beautiful things.

The writing in the beginning of Mortal Dynasty was so bad, it made me pick my feet with embarrassment.

Isn't it that Luan Xing Hai was so well written, but he didn't write it again later? You have to fight against your Wulonghai, right? Originally, I estimated that I would have to make do with Junding, and just write about Tiannan and Luanxinghai honestly. If I had to, I would just focus on Wulonghai. As a result, no one read the recent update, and the author probably gave up.

It's a pity that another book that expands the world view and characters of Mortal Cultivation of Immortality is not included.

What do you want to portray in this large-scale love story? Romance about cultivating immortality?

Your only remedy now is to finish writing Wulonghai within ten chapters, and then write Tiannan honestly

It's an unstable update, and it's the fundamental reason why people quit reading it. If updates are not stable, this book may be like this. Gala?

What does it mean? Will it start to stop when the tape period comes?

Without the Holy Mother, without wisdom, the killing is decisive

When you get to Nascent Soul, you turn your spiritual roots into five spiritual roots and practice Yuan Magnetic Divine Light. Buy a Yuancishan in the mall. It took Han Li three hundred years longer to break through from the peak of Yuanying to becoming a god than from the beginning of cultivation to the peak of Yuanying.