Mortal: Starts with Three Entries

Don't change the settings. Don't change the plug-in. If it doesn't cause problems, don't change it.

The first chapter is superfluous. This is a fan! Fans! Fans! Who cares about your character design as a fan? As long as it's not a naughty 🐢male licking🐶nanny, how many people care about your character's character? Even if you want the protagonist to be more fleshed-out, you should explain it once or twice in the following text. For example, when the protagonist makes a certain choice between something and someone, you can use one or two paragraphs to explain what experiences the protagonist had in his previous life that led him to make this choice, instead of using the entire first chapter to create some bullshit character for him. For fan fiction, just use the fast food novel template - I have traveled through time and space to the xx world. My current identity is xx, and I want to do xx things in the future... Otherwise, forget about fan fiction. Even if it is an original text, if you really want to establish a character, a chapter of two or three thousand words will not be able to sustain it. Let me take Doupo as an example. Xiao Yan's character design is divided into several stages in Dou Po. He is a genius who fell in the beginning. In a few years, his relatives at home went from being flattered to turning their backs on him. His fiancée broke off the engagement, but at least he still had the love of his father and brother Qingmei. The three-year appointment with his fiancée became his early goal. After three years of agreement, his family was wiped out, his father disappeared, his teacher was kidnapped, his brother took life-shortening drugs, and Qingmei was forced to go home. These became the goals he had to become stronger. The sincere relationship between Qingmei, his father and brother, and him can be reflected here again... I emphasize again, this is a fan, and readers, at least for me, just want to quickly see the protagonist enter the original plot and interact with the original characters. Originally, I didn't want to say so much. I refreshed my book and saw that it was a mortal fan. I clicked in and wanted to see what it was about, what was the start? Will I grab the little green bottle? How many beauties should I accept? When I came in, it was 2025😓...

My suggestion is that if you write a story about wanting to get a bottle, then get it honestly, otherwise don't write it.

Such a big cheat or a single heroine? Withdrawn

Han Li, who was the protagonist in the original work, had to survive as a grandson when he met a Yuanying in the early stage. In the early Yuan Dynasty, he had to hide from the Queen of Yuan Dynasty. In this book, he kills the Yuanying by forming pills. . . After the destruction of the Yuan Dynasty at the beginning of the Yuan Dynasty, can you please stop being funny? It is seriously inconsistent with the original combat effectiveness. In the original work, everyone below Nascent Soul is an ant. Can you understand this sentence?

The hook is too big, Tianlinggen, it also brings cultivation speed, luck, farming acceleration plug-in, foundation building at the age of 9, and even accepted Han Li as his apprentice! You are not afraid of dying quickly! The whole Tiannan was led by a 10-year-old child, and he was very speechless! Who would believe that you are not the author of female videos?

I found a problem in fan fiction. Sexual repression is so severe. When you see a girl, you want to praise her for her strength. The problem is that you are weaker than yourself. You are still running away after everything is over. You are powerful. Even if you want to accept at least some normal women who are not dragsters. If you're a woman, do you think I'm worthy of you? Do you have money? Are you powerful? Do you have the power? Do you have the resources to give her? Having nothing means force majeure, otherwise your head would be used as a pasture.

Didn't it mean that Han Li's plug-in was given by himself? Main character. Where does the courage come from? After seeing several novels, I went to grab Han Li's plug-in at the beginning.

This book changed the setting too much. The reason why Mortal Cultivation of Immortality is outstanding is because the cornerstone of combat power has not collapsed. Everyone in it is unique and there are no idiots. There is no such thing as a bastard spirit, and he bows to the other person when he bows his head. I personally think that the most unreasonable aspect of this book is the issue of combat power. If you are at the peak of Dan formation and use formations or some Yin people's magic weapons to kill the early Nascent Soul, it's okay. But you were only in the middle stage of forming the elixir, and you beat the old monster Nascent Soul to death head-on. How has this cornerstone of combat power collapsed? Then when you become Yuanying, the old monster who transforms into gods won't be able to run away when he sees you.

It's so licking and disgusting. I really think of Han Li as my biological father. There are also some inexplicable female channel plots. If you don't know, you would think you are Nantong and like Han Li.

That's enough. I can still understand that the Demonic Invasion is ahead of schedule due to the influence of the protagonist. How did the Chaos Star Sea Golden Thunder Bamboo come into being in advance? The most outrageous thing is that the Void Palace was born a hundred years in advance. The Tiannan War caused everything to be advanced? Are all the subsequent copies advanced? What book are you writing?

As an adult, and a man at that, why are you pretending to be cute? It's so disgusting You are not Emperor Huangtian. Emperor Huangtian was a real child when he was a child. Are you?

Seven powerful people in the Golden Core stage, plus the protagonist, ambushed three Golden Cores without any intention, and none of them were left alive, oh oh oh! Very awesome!

Why do I feel like a female porn star?

The protagonist has already lived two lives, and he still keeps acting cute. Don't you feel disgusted? And what kind of bad name did he get, Qitian. Anyone who has a sense of shame would not take the name Qitian, who is a middle school student. Even if you take a dog egg, I think it will be more palatable than Qi Tian.

It's so beautiful, I'm cultivating immortality and going to build mechas. I could barely bear it before, but this is really poisoning for me. I was naive, thinking that I would get better and better as I wrote, and I should have run away after reading the first three chapters. I shouldn't have expected anything like this.

Is the author a novice? Can he still say that it is necessary to hide his cultivation level during the foundation building stage? A 9-year-old child in the foundation building stage is afraid that others will not open it, right?

Damn it, I was poisoned to death in Chapter 69. Even 7 vs. 2 Can make them run away. The Divine Weapon Sect is still trying to collect hair, so just surrender. Just when I thought the climax was coming, I ended up with a lump🤢

Just by looking at the first few pictures, I can tell that it relies on ✓ Stone. Without any common sense, an elder who established his foundation in the Divine Weapon Sect is a 🐔 hairy elder.

The first four chapters of this book are extremely toxic and useless. They look like a novel written by a girl. There is nothing touching about it.

In Chapter 45, the protagonist chose farming without hesitation, which almost made me spit out a mouthful of old blood. This obvious fighting power is no longer available. The power of the world of cultivating immortals belongs to oneself, and when the protagonist is eager to improve his strength, he can choose Destiny Man or Sword Bone. Is there any use in increasing the farming speed from five times to ten times? It's better to consider improving farming later when your strength improves rapidly. I guess there are not a few people who think the same as me, right?

Here you can also choose and write down the heroine of this book that you want. The most popular one may be the heroine in the future_(:з∠)_

Everyone who built Gundam is here. This Gundam is so awesome, why are you studying swordsmanship? Just focus on studying Gundam! This kind of fairy tale is very inconsistent and divisive when it comes to a mecha, you know? How about just retreating into seclusion and building a big Gundam to come out and destroy the world? I also really want to complain. This author has to wear butterflies every time he writes about pinching techniques. This is no longer a problem of vocabulary. He writes like this every time and it has never changed.

The best among mortals at the moment is Sanlu's book Not Brainless IQ Online and Not Supervisory...

1. When encountering an enemy that is too strong, you should run away instead of exploding into the universe, awakening the mysterious power, epiphany and breakthrough in battle. 2. When being chased by the enemy, you should remain anonymous and act in a low-key manner instead of continuing to take high-profile murderous risks. 3. Killing people, seizing treasures, mutilating corpses, and eradicating traces to avoid being approached by enemies or even harming relatives and friends should be the basic IQ of the protagonist. 4. Make good use of your own talents/cheats/plug-ins, which should be based on the protagonist's basic IQ. 5. Hide your cheats/plug-ins to avoid being discovered Killing people and grabbing treasures should be the basic IQ of the protagonist. 6. Do not mock others in person for no reason, including the protagonist. It should be based on the basic IQ of the villain, supporting characters and passers-by. 7. If you work for others, including women, you should negotiate the remuneration in advance. 8. Talking loudly during a battle will make both sides look stupid. The more words there are, the more stupid they will be. 9. Taking risks requires sufficient reasons. 10. Realm division is the cornerstone of the combat power system. If you casually cross large realms to kill enemies, the combat power system will soon collapse. 11. Being able to take care of oneself without the protagonist needing to save lives frequently should be the basic IQ of the protagonist's relatives and friends. 12. Monks will not be slaves to mortals. 13. Being free and unrestrained is a fairy. 14. Tell more stories and less reasoning.

Establishing your foundation at the age of nine and taking the old devil as your disciple, you are really talented at being a disgusting person.

The first 10,000 destiny points to upgrade to farming is outrageous. The key is that you didn't farm, so why did you upgrade? Also, I'm curious if the protagonist doesn't use it after getting 100,000 destiny points, is he planning to keep the cubs?

Absurd cheats, endless nonsense, and random writing that I take for granted.

A 25-year-old 27-year-old adult can be so naive after being bombarded with information. The one crying and crying is still a college student. Is it reasonable to write a random and sensational opening chapter about a mortal?

The emotional drama is overwhelming. The plot is a bit exaggerated and too ambitious, far from being in line with ordinary people's worldview. But the writing style is okay, and there is still a little bit of logic.