When Duan Muyan Meets Huo Yuhao!

It's not good-looking. All the settings are broken. It's like a primary school student's composition. I suggest you don't read it. General Duanmu has also turned into Sister Duanmu. It doesn't fit in many places. It's ugly as hell.

Even if the content of each plot is small, you also changed General Duanmu's gender, and it was still a primary school student's composition, so many plots fell apart! There are no inverted sentences, and you are fine with the specific content. How did General Duanmu know Tang San? You didn't say anything, let alone wrote at the beginning that after defeating the God Oxel, General Duanmu traveled through time, but you didn't write about the plot line between Tang San and Duanmu. In short, many places are unreasonable.

Author, your pace is too fast. It feels like the story is gone before you finish telling it.

Now Duan Muyan is here too. Awesome Can the author ask a question, can the heroine not want Wang Dong and Ma Xiaotao? Ma Xiaotao's murder was a matter of his own outlook. If it weren't for the cheat in the original work, Huo would have really died. But she didn't think she was wrong. Wang Dong's ability to fuse with Huo Yuhao is very doubtful. Maybe Tang San put a consciousness into Huo Yuhao's spiritual sea at some point. This in itself is all doubtful. So can you do without these two?