Under One Person: Double Door, Behind the Door Is Zhu Xian

If so many women are of use, Tian Linger and Bi Yao can forget about it. Xiaobai and Xia He are not necessaryright

If you don't write well about emotions, write less. Very poorly written. -At least ninety of the hundred books are similar to yours. I've seen enough

Why is there Xia He? Do you like buses? You don't naively think that Xia He only plays with Lingyu, do you?

I beat Lu Xueqi for five chapters. The original novel only lasted two or three chapters 😅. In the original novel, the fourth level of Yuqing and Lu Xueqi were both injured. This time, the protagonist was changed to the seventh level of Yuqing with the power of double Nine Heavens Divine Weapons and the power of two divine beasts. Still, both were injured and both fell into coma. These days, it is rare for a time traveler to be more useless than the original protagonist. I haven't gotten my results yet, so I'm just thinking about how to improve my studies 🤔

What's going on if Lu Xueqi and Baguio don't accept it? You have to be picky when opening a harem, either you have only one female lead, or you try not to miss out on all of them, standing in the middle won't please both ends, and with your introduction, readers of a real harem will probably run away after just one glance.

See updates. The first point: The purpose of cultivating immortality is for immortality, enjoyment, and seeing the scenery above. This is normal. You are here to protect the people you want to protect, Zhonger, Shabi. You are a reborn person, and it is disgusting that you like minors between 10 and 3-4 years old. Can't you wait until you grow up? Still want to protect? Second point: It is still very important to grasp the scene. You can't just write about one of the two worlds, but also write about Tian Linger for most of them? My eldest brother is about 10 years old, so he has nothing to write about. The third point: I agree with the multiple female protagonists. There are too few scenes in one person's world. And Xia He was okay before she entered the full gender. If you still accept her when she enters the full gender, it would be disgusting. You can't let your woman seduce others. ? ? ? ?

When I saw the introduction, I wanted to complain. Have you watched Under One Person? Will someone like Zhang Chulan be bullied by others? This kind of shameless nonsense is fine if he doesn't bully others, so how can anyone bully him? It's really funny, just writing randomly.

Why do you still want to be Zhang Xiaofan when you are already so stupid? Why can't you create your own character?

To be honest, the writing is not very good. The protagonist does not look like an adult, which indirectly reflects that the author does not look like an adult either. The angles of thinking about the problem are too different.

Your own innate energy can be absorbed by others, so what are you talking about? What rubbish second set

It's OK, it's been modified. But now the change is very conflicting to be honest. Previously, I was dating Tian Linger and flirting with Xia He. Even if the world of mortals refines one's heart, there is no such thing as yours! The pig's feet are described as if they have never seen a woman before, "just save your own woman" I have to say it absolutely 😜

In the first chapter, I had a "body fragrance", which gave me a bad premonition, and then there were some mindless descriptions about sharing my innate energy. I can only say that such a good idea was wasted!

What age are you still in when you see a woman?

It's tasteless, Xia He's plot is a little bit poisonous

Today, the author has a problem. He writes a lot of names of protagonists and supporting characters. Dialogue mode, don't you know how to write? Or don't write names and you don't know who is speaking. Especially when listening to books, there are too many repetitions, which is very annoying. Even in writing, if you repeat so much, the teacher will not give you a high score.

The author changed the basic setting, and also used foreshadowing to give his innate energy to others; The heroine seems to be Tian Linger. The author likes Tian Linger very much and spends a lot of space describing how to fall in love with Tian Linger.

Xia He? Six, higher up, haven't you graduated from junior high school?

The setting about Xiantian Yiqi violates the original setting of the one-person world and is basically GG.

If the innate Qi under one person can be absorbed at will, the world under one person will be a world of pure magic.

To be honest, like AI writing, many places are very inconsistent, the wording is strange, and the sentences are unclear.

The rhythm is wrong. Innate Qi should lead to a world of one person, but why would the article lead to Tian Linger. The emotional line was poorly written and too early. There's no sense of immersion.

Lightning protection~ Lightning protection My old cousin was sweating profusely and didn't understand this thing at all

Guess why not many people watch it

When writing a novel, don't always explain and talk about settings, as this will interrupt the immersion. Just like watching a TV immersive scene, Tu Ran turned off the screen, and then the director jumped out and said: "Sorry! Sorry, this filming may not be understandable to you, let me explain it." Instantly, the sense of substitution and the desire to continue watching were gone.

The only reason this book sucks is that it misses the point. The focus should be on reality, the upgrade of Zhu Xian's world.

Interested in the topic, but don't like to be the protagonist

Saying that the heroine is the best way to write is as long as you tell the reader that the woman is beautiful and has a good figure. Don't worry about personality or anything. On the contrary, if the single female protagonist is not well grasped, the female protagonist and the male protagonist will easily fall apart. It is not suitable to write a novel about killing immortals if there are multiple female protagonists. Many female protagonists are set in a single female protagonist category.

Write well, but forget about Xia He, it can't be counted

Please write less about the same things, as this may lead to cheating on the word count; please also write less about irrelevant things.

It won't affect the plot, it's just to make the content read more smoothly. I am also going to check it again, there are any typos and it does not read smoothly... Of course, if readers have any comments, they can also raise them...