Everyone's Dungeon Is Difficult, but Yours Is so Casual?

Your grandfather, whom you haven't seen for a long time, writes you a letter, hoping that you will go back and inherit the family's wealth. You open the letter: Our family has declined...

This author just made the common mistake of newbies, crazily expanding a bunch of useless content, so you just write it, find someone to create this sunflower, and that's it, and go straight back to the dungeon. You have to expand it, and after you create it, you have to find someone to copy it, but it's useless. The readers are attracted by the content of the dungeon in front of you, and they don't want to read these at all.

You, the author, are really awesome. You write one chapter a day. You occasionally stop updating, and then the latest chapter is a mess! Do you want to write this animator as the heroine? When I first met, I was taken aback by the charm (the author's description of her appearance left me stunned), and then I gave a detailed description of her workshop. With 2,000 words, I knew that this woman was a monster maker. There was no other useful information at all. Forget it, I removed it To be honest, I still like your content, but 2,000 words a day is too outrageous

Although I don't really want to interfere with the author's writing ideas, the author's updates in the past few days are obviously problematic. It can be seen from the data that most people don't like to read the updates in the past few days. Everything after chapter 40 can be deleted. The previous plot was about a new adventurer coming into contact with a new type of dungeon to untie his knot, and wanted to sign a contract with the protagonist. The climax of signing the contract is coming soon. You jump directly to designing the creatures. After designing the creatures, who would want to watch if you go to play Pokémon battle?

The data is wrong. It costs 210 yuan to hire a high-level black iron mercenary for a month in the dungeon. In the following article, the price of hiring ordinary people has reached 150 yuan a month. It is only 12 hours. If it is a full day, it costs 300 yuan a month. How do you make the data? Ordinary people are more valuable than high-level black iron mercenaries.

I wrote a lot of things that shouldn't be written... But there wasn't much that should be written 😅😅 Apart from dungeons and players' reactions, I don't know what the use is of writing so much else. It's all meaningless content and has no image at all.

The updates are too few and too slow. If you are either working more or part-time, the results will be bad sooner or later. The pace of the plot is ridiculously slow. I didn't even want to order the latest chapter. I wanted to wait for a few more chapters to read together. As a result, the book will die sooner or later.

Writing Plants vs. Zombies adds a bunch of inexplicable settings, which is not as concise and clear as the original version. Dr. Zombie turned directly into a flying man, I laughed

Is your value reasonable? Let's not talk about how to produce bronze from black iron. How about the percentage of the healing potion?

The idea is good, but it's a pity that it has been discontinued. I can only assume that the book is gone.

General comments: The writing is too scattered, the details are inappropriate, and the main line is unclear First, let's talk about the protagonist The protagonist is a high school student who has just graduated. After the college entrance examination, choose to become a dungeon lord. He has a friend of the opposite sex named You Mingzhi. Under his guidance, You Mingzhi became a great lord. The author seems to want to write an emotional line, but doesn't dare? This point is simply handled like this. After graduating from high school, the protagonist and You Mingzhi got married. With the support of her family and the assistance of the protagonist, You Mingzhi becomes a great lord. However, the protagonist does not want to live in a soft meal, so he borrows 100,000 from You Mingzhi to run the dungeon. Second, let's talk about the setting The setting of this book is that this world has two parts, one is the shining universe, which is the glorious universe. One is a universe shrouded in darkness, which is the dark universe. The dark universe has an undercurrent, which is constantly eroding the glorious universe. In order to fight against the undercurrent, the will of the glorious universe created the profession of lord. Lords can open dungeons, and people in the glorious universe can change their jobs to adventurers. Adventurers clear the dungeon, receive rewards, and fight against the undercurrent. The setting of this book is that a lord, by opening difficult dungeons, continuously upgrades and achieves the highest achievement. Standing on the front line against the undercurrent. When those who came after saw the rise of this lord, they all wanted to imitate this lord and constantly increase the difficulty of the dungeon. This results in the dungeon becoming more and more difficult. The protagonist took a different approach and decided to change his thinking. Instead of taking the difficult stream, he opened a dungeon where farming was easy. Third, let's talk about the plot. The protagonist plagiarizes Stardew Valley at the beginning and creates a replica of Stardew Valley. With Stardew Valley, the protagonist made his first pot of gold. Then he went to the market to recruit mercenaries. Let the mercenaries go on an undertide expedition. The number of mercenaries is three, two men and one woman. The details here are inappropriate. Describes three mercenaries in detail and outlines why the protagonist recruits mercenaries. The three mercenaries can be abbreviated, just state their combat capabilities clearly. The protagonist's purpose should be written in detail and why he wants to recruit mercenaries. Because mercenaries can obtain territory beads by fighting against the undercurrent. The protagonist uses territory beads to expand the dungeon and add more dungeons. At the same time, during the Dark Tide Expedition, mercenaries may bring back the people of the Dark Universe. These dark people are a good labor force. Next, the protagonist goes to the creature creator to create a smiling sunflower. Based on this point, the creature creator is written in detail. It also introduced You Mingzhi's grandfather. Actually, this part can be abbreviated. Just explain clearly where these things come from. For example, the protagonist is the chairman of the underground city. I felt that I had too many things to do, so I hired a general manager and called him Mr. You. Mr. You is the younger brother of You Mingzhi. At the same time, he is also the protagonist's friend. Mr. You ran an errand and contacted a biological manufacturer to produce a large number of smiling sunflowers. Throughout the entire article, there is also mention of hiring a general manager, but only briefly. In this way, relying on Youzong's line, various personnel can be pulled out at any time when necessary. The protagonist does not need to do anything personally and contact the biological manufacturer personally. Just grasp the general direction of the dungeon and focus on serving adventurers. After briefly writing about the chores, you can write in detail about the adventurer's dungeon experience and the protagonist's optimization plan. When adventurers experience this place, there is another problem. The author always likes to write about female adventurers in detail. Looking at the full text, it is basically certain that the author does not have much writing experience. It's not that female adventurers can't be written, they're just difficult to deal with. If you are not careful, you will offend readers and attract the attention of reviewers. To handle female adventurers well requires rich writing experience. Even "Game of Thrones" completely failed in dealing with the female adventurer Arya later in the filming. Therefore, it is a wise choice to briefly write about female adventurers and write about male adventurers in detail. After all, in today's environment, there is absolutely no risk in insulting men. Even if some readers object, some readers will say that as a man, you must be generous. It can be said that writing about male adventurers is basically zero risk. What night, what day, just ignore it and write a short sentence. Focus on male adventurers.

The wonderful place was gone as soon as I saw it

That's good. You can fight in dungeons without fighting! (Fast forward to Wen Banfei)

He looked like he was about to die as soon as he noticed it 😭

If you want to stop it, stop it. Use any excuse to ask for leave.

There are two bugs. One is that eating parsnips permanently increases one's constitution. If you eat 10,000 parsnips, you will not be invincible? The other two maps where you play villagers are okay, but what if there are more in the future? Or does the player's farm belong to themselves and the outside is a public place shared by all players?

Too slow, too slow. You can't write 10,000 words a day for such a weak plot? Could it be that he is a part-time author?

There are many books of this type, right? You can go and take a look. It is indeed written in a decent way at the front, but why does it become weird later? Come on

These pictures are so boring. I have no idea what the purpose of this dungeon is to compete with each other. They have all the conditions to decide which side wins based solely on good reviews, and I don't know what the benefits will be after winning.