The Realm of Mist: I Have a Safe House

The setting is not bad, but the writing is average, the character emotional descriptions are too single, and some descriptions are repeated. There is still potential for improvement in the future.

What are you writing about? Chapter 100, the safe house has not appeared twice, and the upgrade conditions are not even known, and the combat effectiveness has collapsed? Are you sure what you are writing now is not fantasy? Where are the elements of fog, safe house, and terror? Do you just rely on words to brag?

The writing style here is not very good. It seems that the protagonist is very strong, but the author deliberately suppresses the protagonist.

The world setting is pretty good. But the writing and plot are too lame.

I came here for the safe house, but I didn't see it for several days.

He had a nuclear bomb in his hand and had to make a living by making a slingshot. . . . . .

It's a good subject matter, but the writing style and character setting are really inconsistent. The protagonist seems to be mindless, but you will get better at writing it gradually, right? Join and see what happens next

Except for the description of the safe house at the beginning, there is no sense of existence at all later. This is the title of your book. Why should the safe house play a certain role?

Is it cut? Let's reopen it. Make it scary and make the main plot clear. For example, relying on safe houses to develop and grow...

I write here and there. The character of the protagonist is inconsistent. I also don't understand the combat power system. Can anyone explain to me what the protagonist's strength is now? I see that he is now stronger and sometimes weaker. The props are not detailed. Some places are even nonsense. The last few chapters are full of nonsense. Is it a knife or something? In the next few chapters, you can use it to turn it into shoes or something. Of course, this is just an example, but there are indeed some inappropriate descriptions. The protagonist also has a split personality. For example, there is a prop that is still there and he said it is not there. Well, I believed it, but after using it in the next few chapters, I was really convinced.

The previous writing about Kuroshio Port was okay. After arriving at Kuroshio Port, the plot suddenly became confusing. After arriving at Kuroshio Port, the plot felt very confusing and difficult to understand. You shouldn't speed up suddenly at this time. What you should do at this time is to have a basic introduction and exploration of Kuroshio Port. However, in order to highlight the dangers of Kuroshio Port, you chose to speed up suddenly, so that the protagonist group will be exposed to various dangers as soon as they arrive at the venue. I know you want to write about the danger level of Kuroshio Port, but how you write it now is completely wrong. Kuroshio Port can be dangerous, but you can't let it get messed up, and you can't choose not to write about the basic content of Kuroshio Port and the exploration of the protagonist group in order to highlight the danger of Kuroshio Port. My basic feeling now about the Kuroshio Port volume is that I got off the car, went to the church, and prepared to contain it. There is no intermediate transition. To be honest, although the world view shows the invasion of contained objects, since there is a safe house, you have to use the safe house to write about it. I am relatively confused about the map of Kuroshio Port now. After arriving at a map, first ensure that the safe house is deployed and explore the map. Expand the relevant content of the map through exploration, instead of rushing to promote the plot and create conflicts when arriving at a map. By the way, you should update more often. It is best to send out two or four pictures at the same time. Don't choose to send out two pictures a day separately in order to catch up with the update.

The setting is very good, if you write it well, it should get better.

The characters are a bit confusing. Sometimes who is called Bai and who is the protagonist? Sometimes who is the protagonist? The protagonists are all written in confusion.

If you learn from the dark night of Desperate Times, your results should be much better.

It's very well written, at least it still retains that scary atmosphere, and it doesn't have that sense of script.

It's just a bit hard to see. This game has stitched together many different settings, bad news, monsters, and good news, it's all stitched together😆😆😆

I can only say that the creativity is okay, but the plot and character descriptions are just terrible.

In addition to being too difficult, it is a certain death outcome for ordinary people.

Click to finish the book and let me receive the investment income

The first copy in the early stage is slightly worse, but the later copies are more interesting. As the author writes, he gets a lot better at characterizing the characters that he was not good at. It can be seen that the author is making progress. The worldview and plot are also really attractive. The author's data has not changed much in the past month or two. I hope the author can continue writing. But just do what you can and write if you can. After all, people have to eat. This way the next book will definitely improve a lot.

Chapter 26 said that if the protagonist had not helped others, they would have died a long time ago. It was not because of what you helped others. It seems that no matter what choice you make, there will be no problem. Also, why did the vines not attack you two? Is the protagonist very powerful? Why are others afraid of the protagonist? Do you think other people are cowards without weapons, or do you think the protagonist is super? People, everyone has to listen to the protagonist. Normally, other local cowards will ask the protagonist to explore the way. Why does another person tell the protagonist everything? In a novel, other supporting characters have to listen to the protagonist and help the protagonist without any reason. There seems to be no reason for the choice of the two of you, right?