Cultivation of Immortality for Hundreds of Life: My Liver Becomes the Lord of Ten Thousand Dharmas

It can be seen that the author really wants to write a good book, but here are a few questions about this book. I hope the author can think carefully before opening a new book and not make the same mistake again 1. About the protagonist himself 1. Who is he? Unclear self-understanding The protagonist is a "game player", but it is just an empty setting. Has he integrated into this world? Or just a passerby? If he is a passer-by, then he is a "player" in the game world? Or a "witness" who sees everything? None of this is shown in these articles. 2. Where is he going? The direction of the goal is uncertain As a character who can be reincarnated infinitely, he naturally has the attribute of transcendence in time, so "can he gain immortality?" This natural reason for cultivating immortality does not exist, so what is the fundamental reason for his improvement in cultivation? 2. About the shaping of the sect As a cluster, the sect has three cores: structure-organizational form, behavior-action program, and purpose-interest demands The cluster gathers for common interest demands, acts together to achieve the demands, and forms a certain organizational structure to complete the action, then: 1. What are the sect's interest demands? In other words, what is the reason for the gathering of the individuals that make up the sect? Is it a multi-industry chain that requires each division of labor to produce various types of resources? Or does it require huge quantities of something that cannot be collected individually? Or do we need a joint research environment from multiple directions and angles? Or huddle together for warmth under high pressure? It is not mentioned in the book, but it can be vaguely guessed that the main reason is to upgrade the "treasure land" for breakthrough, but this thing... Is not shown at all in the entire article. 2. The action mode of the sect Recruiting disciples from all over the place, and then performing actions similar to [division of specialization/research], inner sect training/outer sect general affairs, what is the hierarchical correspondence between these two systems? The mundane tasks performed by the outer sect provide resources for the inner sect to practice off-the-job practice. So how are the resources of the outer sect produced? How is the output efficiency? Is this provision unilateral or does it provide feedback? 3. Organizational form of the sect How do the inner/outer sects collaborate? How do peaks collaborate and communicate? Why are the peaks relatively independent but able to remain as one body instead of splitting apart? To sum up, it is "because a sect is needed, so there is a sect". In this case, the sect itself is difficult to maintain, and the necessity of the protagonist to join is also doubtful 3. Plot promotion The protagonist is very passive in the whole process. It can be seen that he has some planning, but not much. Only the behavior before joining the sect is "to achieve the purpose, it is necessary to Want to ***", everything after that was pushed. I saw the author mentioned in the final talk that "the plot should push the protagonist." It's fine that the character serves the plot, but the purpose of the plot is to show the characteristics of the character, not as a simple tool. The protagonist is completely a puppet at the mercy of others, and the charm is not shown at all. So how do you make readers have a sense of involvement? I hope the author can think carefully about these issues, above. ——Lonely Soul, May 8, 25

The protagonist has not inherited anything he learned in previous lives? ? Even Changchun Gong requires re-reading the jade slips before starting to practice it? Didn't you write that you had already practiced this technique in your previous life? And what about the spells practiced in previous lives? I can't handle such a small problem well, I'm speechless.

Can you put your own practice notes in the inventory and write down everything you have learned so that you are not afraid of forgetting it?

Now that there are still free chapters, I feel the lack of follow-up! The beginning of the chapter was smooth, but now it has fallen into a cliche style. There is no difference whether you have read the latest chapters or not! Basically, every page jumps continuously! The rebirth of the text is not about the merits of one life, but the freshness of the three cunning rabbits, the darkness of the behind-the-scenes planning, and the sense of succession in each life! At the moment, it all feels lacking. Except for the beginning until the protagonist enters the Jinguang Sect, it is better. There are plans from previous lives. But since the protagonist enters the Bingxu, there is nothing interesting, and there is no freshness and planning! Discover some questions and suggestions! ① The protagonist has been reborn in several lives, but there is no plan like the Three Cunning Rabbits. Except for the bloodline in the first life, it makes people feel that Zhuzhuang is an empty shell and has little effect! It is recommended that the protagonist develops more bloodlines and leaves a few back-ups for each life. The strength of each life can be either clan (bloodline), sect (inheritance), demon (control), or monster (control). For example, each clan bloodline develops a hidden line, and the protagonist can use the hidden line to integrate into the clan after each life, solving identity problems, etc.! You can also set up a killer/intelligence organization, such as the Blood Clothes Tower! The owner of the building, Shenlong, has no beginning and end, and in each life he obtains information and makes effective plans of his own! ② A hundred generations of rebirth are not the result of one lifetime! At present, the protagonist has been waiting for too long to practice Qi, and the novelty is gone. In fact, Wanfa conflicts with the author's skill forgetting. It is better to change the cultivation level and start over. The skills will be unlocked as the realm is familiar/remastered when the realm is reached! In the future, the author will get better techniques, and he will be able to lay a strong foundation! Of course, the setting problem lies entirely with the author. ③What is the state of the past life? You can fast forward everything before this life⏩️, otherwise it will be no longer fresh if you delay it for a long time. Except for the necessary foreshadowing, backup, and conspiracy, you can save everything! There are very few plots and tricks at the moment! The freshness of each life is essential, but it cannot be too fragmented! It can't be without passion and excitement! It is currently lacking. Don't blame me for my humble opinion!

Not many authors dare to touch such a big poisonous point as deleting memories. I can only say that you are too brave, author.

To be honest, why doesn't the protagonist write down his secret book and hide it, and if he forgets it when he is resurrected, he can practice it again according to the secret book. To be honest, it's a bit anti-intellectual

Borrowing precious treasures to push the book, "I will clean up the Tibetan Scripture Pavilion at the beginning, and I will complete the incomplete skills." Mortal flow, Gou Dao flow, IQ will not decrease if IQ is online, the protagonist's magical power refers to ancient magic: a wonderful pen creates a dragon, scattering beans to form an army, dividing the ground to form a river, etc. Interested Taoist friends can take a look. If you are bothering me, please contact me. [Asking mortals to recommend each other's authors]

I made a comment before, but thought about it and deleted it. I would like to share some of my reading experience. 1. The martial arts flavor is too strong and the fairy tale flavor is too little. What struck me most clearly was Chapter 8. "Big families from ten miles and eight towns", "rich families" and "mud-legged people". These words are quite inconsistent. The previous chapters also had these feelings. If you are an immortal, even if you are in the Qi-refining stage, you are still an immortal. It is not suitable to use these words that are too down-to-earth, which greatly reduces the quality of the fairy tales. Especially because the protagonist is still building a foundation and being reborn, not starting as a mortal. For example, "Xuanjian Immortal Clan" also tells the story of a very small family. Even if they are completely mortals at the beginning, the fairy tale flavor is quite strong. ...... 2. First of all, the introduction is about time travel into the game. The opening chapter points out the rebirth of foundation building, and there are also bound items. What do readers want to read when they click on this book? The protagonist uses his identity as a game player to crush the information gap. The protagonist uses the background of foundation building and rebirth to show his cunning and cunning. In a word. Readers click in to read exciting articles! So skills will be lost upon death, which essentially makes readers unhappy. The author replied with one sentence when answering questions: In order not to despise death. There is actually a problem with thinking this way. This book is not a popular novel, nor a serious literature, but an Internet article. To express this deep meaning, you basically cannot let the protagonist bear the price (except for those who write very well with strong writing skills).... The starting point is that the protagonist is born not to suffer. You can let the plot and the supporting characters express this sentence, but again, it will still be awkward if it is not written well. 3. If the protagonist has infinite lives. Yes, that's right. It means fighting is fun, or you are cunning, or just plain reckless. If you can't defeat the enemy in one life, you will have ten lifetimes. If you can't defeat the enemy in ten lifetimes, you will have hundreds of lifetimes. There is actually nothing wrong with writing it this way. 4. There is also a book called "Baishi Climbing the Immortal" written by Eunuch. The book is actually pretty good, but it's a pity that it's Eunuch. The author can read it when he has time.

Doesn't anyone understand the author? It feels like the kind of strong man who has worked his way up from the bottom step by step. He has been a peerless genius in a certain field since he was a child, but has not been discovered. In the end, he realizes his talent on a tortuous road for revenge, suffers humiliation, defeats countless powerful enemies, and climbs the mountain. At the top, others can only look up at his back. After he succeeded, he was betrayed by his beloved man and completely blackened. The already invincible sword has now lost its only scabbard and fallen into the devil. I can't imagine how such a strong man will make the world fear and tremble in the future! ! ! You are almost like this kind of person. You can joke with us and be very easy-going at ordinary times, but if you touch your reverse scales, you will let us know what true darkness is. This kind of person is a child-faced wolf, innocent and innocent on the surface, but actually smooth and transparent. It's impossible to plot against you because it was planned by you from the beginning. You are the chess player, and we are just chess pieces. If we disobey you, you will let us know what cruelty and darkness are. You have never lacked thunderous means and a bodhisattva heart. You have Buddhas and demons in your heart, but you have sealed the demons deeply, leaving only the Buddha. You originally wanted to face everyone with a bodhisattva heart, but some people insist that you unseal the demons in your heart. Then I want to ask you, when you face a real demon in the world, it is impossible for us to guess you, because you have seen through us from the beginning. It vanished into ashes with a wave of his hand. You are the one who holds the pole, and they are just fish. If we rebel against you and you commit murder, then they will know that the fear of the gods coming is like the god of murder! ! !

Just tell me your own thoughts, it's not a criticism As far as the title and introduction are concerned, the author wrote some strategic calculations in the previous life and some panel content at the beginning of the text, and basically didn't mention it in the follow-up Looking at various panel system articles, panel attributes that appear once in two or three chapters are the most basic. Of course, the author only gave the protagonist a skill slot, and there is no materialization of attributes. This is actually a bit confusing, because there is no way to reflect the achievements of the protagonist without specific numerical improvements. Long, this is a panel article that loses a lot of appeal Then again, if you can't write a panel well, don't write it. If it weren't for your introduction, these wouldn't be a problem The next thing to say is the rhythm issue. I was thinking about it when I was reading the book a few days ago. Qiu, that is only a problem in the foundation building stage, not to mention that there is not much pen and ink to focus on describing Furthermore, there is no pen and ink spent on the power system to introduce how powerful monks of various cultivation levels are, and there is no powerful description of the power system. There is no description of the difficulty involved in the painting. To be honest, when I was watching it, I only felt that Qi training had no sense of existence. Foundation building was just like that. The author of Dan Jie described it a little bit, but the feeling was just like that. There was no feeling of awe due to the disparity in power. Basically, I rely on myself to imagine how powerful this cultivation level is And the power level is too high as in this book, and the map is too large. Look at the map you drew. It clearly shows the power of the horns of three sects, plus an empire. Except for the Ancient Soldiers Domain, there is no scope of activity. Isn't this a trap for yourself? Other books try to give the map a broad feel, because it is more maneuverable and the protagonist can run anywhere. But once your map comes out, what can the protagonist do? There is no other land except the Ancient Soldier Realm And there are also problems with the depiction of the Ancient Soldier Realm. I read that the article keeps saying how dangerous and dangerous this place is, but I really don't feel anything about it. It gives me the impression that it is just a mixed area with fish and dragons, and the appearance of the environment is unclear Back to reincarnation. In terms of subject matter, the last book was about directly returning the cultivation level to zero. In fact, there is no problem. However, if this thing is not written well, it will easily give readers a sense of frustration. I have been reading it for so long. The protagonist's cultivation level for dozens of chapters is directly reset to zero because of some nonsense, and then he has to write it all over again starting from Qi training? It's too lengthy and too hard to accept. The few books when Baisei-ryu started all skipped over the reconstruction very quickly. This is actually a cool point and needs to be grasped. Of course, if the plot can be shaped well, the reconstruction can also be fake. This depends on the writing skills This book starts with more than 100 chapters of other books. In fact, many things cannot be written. It's hard to imagine what the protagonist's previous life was like with just a few lines of description. Personally, I'm more optimistic about someone who came up from the mortal world, because it doesn't hurt to write it to death, and it also allows readers to be more involved. It's also interesting to use life to open a map, and maybe it can also write a legendary story about the field of immortal cultivation Finally, I hope the author gets better and better as he writes, and can bring a better story next time.

The detailed description is very appropriate, with a slight flavor of historical officialdom, but it does not overwhelm the guest and dominate the scene, making people feel that it is not a fairy tale. It feels similar to the language style of the Da Jin section of the Mortal's Journey to Immortality.

The recent chapters gave me more of a feeling that the interaction between the characters and the plot was written very smoothly, but you asked me to think carefully about where the protagonist used the backhand from his previous life. To be honest, there are only banks and manors, and even when entering the ancient soldier field, only those experiences are available It feels like the protagonist's previous life as a foundation-building old thing did not leave much The less loyal back-end organization has somewhat lowered the tone of foundation building. The sense of mastery that powerful power can bring is very bland throughout the article, as if it is mediocre when it comes to Jindan Although the protagonist has made steady progress now, it is too bland and boring. So many battle strategies written on Lianqi seem to be making a fuss out of a molehill. There are not many descriptions of the sect, but it also gave me a sense of internal division and running out of time. Maybe a skinny camel is bigger than a horse, but every time I see other sects trying to attack the sect, I still feel uneasy The conspiracy and tricks of Qi training are really like frying fish in the low-end game for the protagonist who has already built the foundation once, and he still enjoys it. The author is on The third reincarnation of this book is also in that big sect after rebirth. The dignified Jindan ancestor actually needs to continue writing about Qi training. Therefore, the plot requires it, and it can't help but make people tired to read it. As this book is still in the new book period, you can continue to wait and see. I also hope that the author can write wonderful stories and become a great master! Come on!

It's well written, but why are there so few people?

If you don't speed through the whole thing, there will be problems later.

Is the author a girl? She feels so gentle and cute

After reading this book, I also read the author's previous book. They were all very well written. It was the only book I stayed up late to read since I started working. Unfortunately, I cut them all. If the author is really a novice, then I sincerely hope that the author can write a complete novel with good results in the future. If it is the reincarnation of a eunuch, then haha

Baishi Cultivation: I can fix talents. It is very popular. The author can learn from it. I feel that you have not learned the advantages and essence of Baishi Liu.

There is only one picture, although it is a bit shabby, but I still want to send it to support

To be honest, I was a little confused about what the author wanted to write, or the key points were a bit confused When I read this book, I thought it was written like an introduction. Power levelers in real-life games travel through the game to conquer the world or take benefits based on their top-level understanding Looking at the results, the writing is good, but it basically has nothing to do with the introduction. The protagonist has basically no knowledge of power leveling before time travel, and he can only rely on his own brain. And the on-the-spot reaction of several reincarnations, not to mention the understanding of cultivation beyond the version, I don't even know many secrets, cultivation is all hard work and sweat (system Hmm... I just don't find this exciting at all. I can't get the pleasure of crushing the indigenous people, and I don't have the mentality of modern people Although it gives me a feeling that the protagonist is going smoothly, it is too bland. It feels that the protagonist has been assimilated into the indigenous people, not distinctive or unique.