From Yuan Gou with Ten Times Life Span to Golden Elixir for Longevity

If you were writing "Daily Life in Old Beijing", everyone would think it was reasonable and authentic. But what you wrote was "Cultivation of Immortality" and the name should be to show the ruthlessness of time. In fact, the way you wrote it made you want every supporting character to write an autobiography. The one who rescued the neighbor's mother, I can barely understand that you and he became close friends. But the one I collected was the ink grinder, You pay, and they work, but you don't provide any extra help to them. They start to suffer psychological problems after being deceived, and you don't do anything. In the article, there are crazy words like "nothing to say" and people get sad after they die, and they start to miss them at every turn There is also the chapter about Jin Dan, which is written like an authentic old man in Beijing. Jin Dan is two or three hundred years old, showing off his descendants. At that age, in the stage of life, it is equivalent to only passing half, or even a small half, not so sluggish The summary is that this is not how immortals are cultivated, and neither is Gou Dao. There are fewer passers-by, especially passers-by who rush to the street very quickly. You can use a lead to introduce the plot, but not everyone wants to introduce it

Tomato's writing style and quality make it difficult to break through on the big stage of Qidian. There is a missing hook at the front. Normally in this kind of book, there will be a childhood sweetheart girl at the front to make you look forward to it. The author did nothing, not even behind, no hostile people, very flat.

I beg you to read the new book. Please turn to the end of the chapter to read it. If you are willing to vote for one of the monthly votes, thank you. I am so grateful that I shed tears 🙂

The plot without conflict seems boring, but I can watch it, why, because it is a running account The plot with conflict seems even more boring, because it is not handled well, and it can be dismissed directly I originally wanted to complain about the author's last sentence at the end of almost every chapter, but it seems that this is the only point in this book that can be used as a memory point

To be honest, I personally like this novel very much, but the author's updates are too exaggerated. I don't even have the slightest motivation to pursue reading. You know, the author is a complete newcomer. This is his first time writing a novel. He can't even update it enough, and he still wants to achieve results and daydream.

I'm exhausted. It's so bland. I just want a glass of boiled water.

This book doesn't look like a fairy tale, it looks like a martial arts novel, or a low-level martial arts novel.

The writing is young, the narration is mediocre, and the characterization is abrupt. At first glance, it looks like a newcomer, but it is barely watchable. Give the newcomer some tolerance and stop trolling.

Every time I see this type of gold finger, I wonder what everyone would choose between a billion in deposits and a thousand years of life.

Very well written. Listening to the book brings a sense of sadness

It feels like I want to write about life and death, the ups and downs of life, the confluence of fate and the separation of fate, but the writing is not strong enough, and it makes my toes pinched and awkward .

There is nothing too poisonous about the plot, and the conflict arrangements in the plot are not forced conflicts, but rather flat. The holes dug will be filled (the characters who appear have plots and arrangements instead of writing a supporting role that is inexplicable and useless. However, it is relatively easy to arrange the supporting roles in the longevity novel), which is a good habit. The level of writing is the level of the top 50 monthly votes ten years ago. Nowadays, I am much more picky, and it is difficult to get into the top 100, not to mention the level of updated articles. First, there is nothing wrong with the portrayal of the protagonist. Changsheng-ryu is the greatest wealth. Changsheng-ryu takes risks for a little thing. I really feel that my IQ is being rubbed. After living for hundreds or thousands of years, I still take risks. It's like there is an opportunity to make 200,000 yuan, but you have to exchange it for 50 million yuan. This is a flaw in most immortal streams. The author does not have this problem The second is the writing style. The writing style is relatively old. I am not saying that I am sophisticated, but I am learning from those old people. Various descriptions bring up one thing and it is over before the chapter is finished. But it is true that I can continue to read it at the age of thirty, and the description is appropriate. The main problem is still that sentence, the tenth update has its own great scholars, and the shortcomings of the first update are magnified. Book shortage➕As I get older, I can read this kind of slow writing. The quality is passable. I heard that it is the author's first book, which is very good. The level of writing is much better than that of brushing dragons, but the financial resources are probably not comparable. I just write what I want to write to earn money for practice and food. There are almost no people who immediately become rich with the first book The disadvantage is that I am not a person who pursues books, especially slow articles, let alone reading. I add bookshelves and slowly keep them. If the author is still a student, please stick with it. After graduation, you can work as a side job. If you do well, you can become the main job and earn hundreds of thousands of monthly votes for a year. The ending is much better than eunuchs. The important thing is that eunuchs can only be used once and countless times. It is difficult for people who have been eunuchs two or three times to get on the monthly voting list.

I don't want to pursue reading anymore, I want to keep books. I won't read it again until it has a million words. I let this book gather dust on my bookshelf.

The progress is too slow, and there's nothing exciting about it 🙂. It's too flat and too stable! Can you have some orgasm 😅

Advantages: Long-lasting and well-established, there is an audience of readers. The writing is quite fluent (but I only saw the daily flow, and I don't know about the rest) Disadvantages: The starting point is extremely daily. Chapters 2 and 3 of the school, conversations with friends, and teacher lectures are all setting up the world view. There is no sense of crisis, and at the same time, there is no sense of immortality. There is only a daily plot of cultivating immortality, which is very bland. The sense of expectation is not enough. I only heard about a conference on ascending to immortality and the practice of refining spiritual liquid similar to water droplets, and building a hundred layers of foundations. The short-term expectation did not catch me Evaluation: It was very slow in the early stage, three chapters of daily life, simple structural logic, which requires the introduction of a lot of highlights and smooth writing.

The green turtle is pretending to be dead again. Why don't you go over here and get some traffic?

You can be reincarnated, and your lifespan will be a hundred times longer in the first life. After such a long time, you should have learned all the elixirs, talismans, weapons, and formations. After learning the puppet technique, you will also have ways to protect yourself in the next life.

I can watch it if it's peaceful. The protagonist's five spiritual roots are not as good as four or three spiritual roots. There are cheating weaknesses. I have seen too many five spiritual roots in the beginning. Also, the protagonist I like should not hurt the spring and autumn. He can give alms casually instead of investing in emotions. It is best to be ruthless. A few feelings are enough at most. He should be the main one. Others are just a little condiment on the road to immortality, but they are unnecessary!

The first time I saw this type of book, my eyes lit up. It's hard to write this kind of thing, because many people must not be able to stand the blandness and abandon the book. But I like it, so I can only give you more support. I will give you a monthly ticket until you stop reading (I guess you may stop reading if you want to live in reality, I hope you slap me in the face)

Are you tired of the protagonist just replying "hmm" no matter what others say? Looking at it makes me want to slap him

The author is great, is there a female protagonist 🤓🤓

The life of the protagonist is plain and boring, and novels always describe some passerby characters. This book is not a cool novel. It might have been interesting a few years ago, but now, it is a bit difficult to come up with good results.

You're a pure vegetarian, your skills, pills, and magic weapons are all ordinary. You just lived to be the Taoist ancestor. What's the point of me watching?

Very beautiful, I will follow it every day. Maybe I haven't read much recently, but I will definitely get up. Come on, author.

Just don't imitate Emperor Shitian 🤓

Tall buildings rise from the ground. How can you know the sky until you grow old? I wish the author a great success in making this book a success. Polite borrowing: Meeting is fate, guest, do you want to come and see me, "Nirvana Immortal Tribe", group portraits, big background Family cultivation, power plot, delicate writing, emotions of each character Online, non-routine, original story, if you think it is still interesting, please comment and support.

Grain and grass are edible and not poisonous at the moment. Gou Daowen is quite stable.

Daily settlement, start cultivating immortality from a handyman

It took me a long time to choose a place to leave the sect, but it was still a border city. Next time, I will find a safe place to slowly develop! It hasn't been long since you've been here, and you've been in danger several times.

I hope the author will figure out that the boy was killed because the protagonist was targeted. Don't do anything. You have already reminded me of that rhetoric. Why, I never believe in pie in the sky. You already understand why the boy came. Just say a few unclear words and it's over? Tell me that I have been targeted by Jie Xiu, and the things you collected were just to lure me out of the city to trap me. Don't say anything and it will be over if you don't accept it. Why don't you say that you don't want to be targeted? It will be over. Can you lower your status by saying something clear?