From Homeless Man's Liver to Immortality

Waiting for you to open your liver, there is a lot of meaningless things. To tell a joke, the refugees in Gaowu World rebelled.

Author, your start is too hopeless. You have to wait until Goldfinger is released on the shelves. The problem is that you will only cause trouble for the protagonist. The story before it is released is always mixed with despair, and it will never be released on the shelves! Not many people read the updated version after it was released, so how do you make money?

The writing is OK, but the worldview is a mess

It is tasteless to eat and a pity to throw away. Some are good, some are too useless, too watery and too slow.

If you write like this, you will definitely be offended. There are too many decorations, and saints are not popular nowadays.

Huh! There is no book with more than 100,000 words! How to see

The shortcoming of this book is that the writing is not refreshing enough. I want to write about the unrestrained and helpless world of the world, but I can only take a quick look at it. I travel east and west. My cultivation level increases year by year. However, the young opponents I encounter are all stronger than the protagonist. The age difference is not much different by default, which can be seen through the character. The martial arts is very hip-reaching, and the settings are very high-end, but a single operation turns out to be a low-level martial arts. From a conceptual point of view, it has deviated from the main plot. At the beginning, I took my brothers and sisters to survive, practiced golden fingers, generated characteristics, and then practiced martial arts, thinking about forming a force by my own ability, and working hard from the beginning. This is the main plot. Later, it gets more interesting. The protagonist is separated from his brothers and sisters. The plot has deviated by an unknown number of miles. The skill panel at the back basically has no effect and is completely integrated into the martial arts system. However, the martial arts settings are not reasonable at all. What a lofty Tao, those who follow the same Tao must be controlled by others. Only when the protagonist cannot defeat the opponent does he throw out a new trump card to turn defeat into victory. The third and fourth levels of the worldview basically have the highest combat power of a country, but a small eighth and seventh level starts to make nonsense. This system is much better than the panel. At the beginning, it looks like the number of words is like water, because there is no way to connect it later. Besides, the gap between ordinary people and warriors is huge, but the number of warriors is very small. It is very unreasonable for ordinary people to appear next to the protagonist and face a series of disputes and conflicts. Moreover, there are many scenes of people without martial arts, and the characters portrayed are more vivid than the protagonist. At least the protagonist thinks about this and that every time, fights this and that, either fights or asks for help, which is very boring. Look at the beginning, the protagonist just wants to seize his own destiny, but after gaining strength, he can no longer desire it. He seeks the eighth-level skill without any intelligence, which leads to a series of conflicts and finally almost kills an entire city. This kind of plot writing is off-putting. A tiger's will, eighth level strength, just turned into a monster. Are you saying you don't understand anything? At least you have entered the arsenal and read it, so your knowledge should also have skills. Every decision is made out of helplessness and ignorance, and is not in line with one's original intentions. There is no outline, just write it in random. At the beginning, the protagonist is responsible, and several plots show chivalry. Practicing a bunch of eighth-grade skills together is a waste of time, and the superimposed strength is just that. Each level must be practiced again, and each exercise is a path. Isn't this writing nonsense? The female characters' personalities are relatively clear, but often they are not aware of their origins, and a setting is directly assigned to the characters, leaving no trace in the end. The love-minded and kind-hearted character at the beginning, and the profit-seeking businessman and flat-faced little loli at the end. The upgrading flow of the protagonist blowing and beating all the way and being forced to fight back. All the familiar characters are no longer written, and the plot can only continue to be driven by the new martial arts settings. A book that opens high and goes low.

The writing is good, the characters are well drawn, and if you keep the story from being cliche and IQ online, you can get results by writing it slowly and without watering it down.

There is no shortage of skills. Can I develop it honestly for a while and toss it around every day?

You can go and watch The Blind Man Who Caught a Knife. The martial arts writing is more enjoyable than most martial arts.

Bring along the original work "Yuan Shen Dharma: Beginning from a Mortal to Become the Taoist" to read this excellent work. Please enjoy it and take a look. ——(Come and invest in Guafeng for income) This book is also called "Yuanshen Law: I Achieved Taoism with Fangzhongshu" What is the ancestor, and the origin of the soul method is the ancestor. What is a Heavenly Master? He acts as a teacher on behalf of Heaven and is called Heavenly Master. Yuanshen method - use spirit to refine form, use sex to cultivate life Yuanshen method - people have Yuanshen, gods have three or five changes, and immortals are born in them. Yuan Shen Dharma - the Tao is achieved by God, so its Tao is infinite, its Dharma is boundless, and its thoughts are endless. (Keywords: Urban cultivation, low-level diaosi counterattack, mortal flow, Yuan Shen soul system, cosmic hegemony) (Important reminder - the first four chapters are used to pave the way for him to be the bottom and to reasonably introduce the inheritance. If you don't know, just go to the fifth chapter without affecting the plot!) https://magev6. If. Qidian. Com/h5/share/book? Channel=qidianapp&activi tyId=bookshare_02&tt=0&tc=0&nc=&nd=&spdt=14&spdid=109&ex1=1044190173&shareUserCode=DKveU3up&bookId=1044190173&shareBookType=1&shareSource=2&_trace=qdappsfx