After Quitting the Team, My Yun Yang Demon Queen Came True

I wrote a short essay of two thousand words and was immediately hidden. It made me so angry that the writer couldn't even hear a sharp voice. If I didn't like this book, I would be too busy to comment on it for you. If this is unacceptable, then I will speak more slowly this time. If it doesn't work, I won't be too lazy to continue. Let's talk about the advantages first. The pace of this book is very good. What needs to be done at each stage is very clear. The protagonist has strong mobility and what needs to be done does not take long, which greatly improves the viewing experience. The author's description of the growth of the protagonist and Magic Pill Girl is all game-oriented, intuitive and not procrastinating, and the step-by-step development is very interesting. The characters of the two Magic Pill Girls are pretty good, they are cute, sensible and strong, not toxic at all and there is nothing particularly disgusting about them. Then let's talk about the shortcomings. The biggest problem with this book is that it is not sure about its positioning and focus. It is classified as a light novel and labeled as easy daily development. As a result, most of the ink is spent on the battle to conquer the city and the planning of the territory, as if writing a lord novel. This leads to a very embarrassing situation. If you read this book as a light novel, it is too ink and too off-topic. If you read this book as a lord novel, it will be too omitted and too fast. You will get stuck here if you can't get up or down. Some people may think, oh, isn't this a good thing? It's suitable for people like me who like both light novels and lord novels. I thought so at the beginning, until I read the latest chapter from the beginning. The author's grasp of the degree was too bad. The light novel part and the lord novel part were not well combined. As a result, whether it was read as a light novel or a lord novel, it lacked that attractive part and the impression was very poor. Just like you like eating fried chicken and drinking Coke, this book is equivalent to serving chicken bones and Coke cans together. As a light novel, this book does not have the daily routine and relaxation it is labeled as. The protagonist initially wanders around the main world in order to catch up on resources to feed magic pills and go to the demon world. In the process, he is disgusted by the church and the brave team. Later, he is even more busy trying to dominate the world. The two magic pill girls even started out with a dog and all their equipment depended on feeding them. Ever since they were first selected by the protagonist, they have not stopped. They are developing day in and day out just like Superman, and there is no routine or ease at all. The only daily life is the "sweet" daily life of the protagonist and the team of gods and warriors, and the relaxation is achieved by relying on the system. To be honest, the most important aspects of cultivation and emotions are quite bad. The protagonist has a very different relationship with himself and Mamaru. He likes her and knows that Mamaru likes her, but she has to suppress it or hang on to it. The feeling shown is that the protagonist does not regard Mamaru as an equal at all. It is very strange and unnatural. The article where the author arranged for Mamaru to confess her feelings is really a disaster. To me, From the perspective of the protagonist, the protagonist is just showing that he pays attention to the magic pill, and just does Tai Chi and hangs the non-stick pan, and then the magic pill is coaxed away. During this period, the various "girls" and "silly girls" are really oily, young and greasy. The second magic pill is even used as a magic stick to strengthen the second magic pill's superstition and fanatical belief in the "god" of the protagonist. Is this really treating the magic pill mother as a human being? The development part is very simple, basically relying on the system. The male protagonist sends materials to the magic pills through the system, and then upgrades and obtains plug-ins by feeding them specific materials. In the early and mid-term, the protagonist is simply a resource point for the Magaru girls. He cannot observe or communicate. No matter what he does, he just relies on his feelings. When he is short of things, he bows to give him something. When he is short of morale, he bows to boost morale. It is not until they meet later that he finally has some sense of development. It is finally the protagonist who develops and improves the Magaru girls. To be honest, I don't see any improvement in the Magic Maru. From the very beginning, Northern Magic Maru has been accustomed to relying on others and being jealous of the protagonist. This is still the case later on. Southern Magic Maru has not yet developed to the later stage. After going through so many wars, conquests, constructions, and dominations, Kitamaru became the overlord, but in the end, he still had a little girl mentality. No matter what he did, he was still the same as before, without any courage or determination, so wasn't his role as overlord in vain? If you read this article as a lord article, it is even more true that territory can only be developed in the demon world, and important information, such as territorial scope, laws, population, resources, distribution, military information, resource consumption, technological level, education level, etc., Are not described in detail, not a single one. That is, Demon Pill Musume is oppressed: Oops, I go to Great Lynn, it is too great, haha, I resisted; Demon Pill Girl lacks an army: Oh, I go to Great Lynn, it is too great, haha, I won; Demon Pill Girl wants to rule: Oh, I go to Great Lynn, it is too great, haha, I rule. Child's play, I can only use these two words to describe the entire stage of conquest and domination. No matter what is done, there is no description. It is just to conquer this land and then conquer it. Beat, fail, cheat, issue laws, win, win. This process can cover the entire book. After the completion of the guide, the development stage of domination is still written in the same old omission way. It is really not written at all. I really don't know why such a good hydrological place is not written. Not only does the writing fail to grasp the key points, but the author also likes to focus on using words to disgust people, not only disgusting the protagonist but also disgusting the readers. I am talking about the brave team, from the beginning to the present, the super supreme super invincible war god Tyrannosaurus God ultimate invincible Promax brave team, at the beginning I still I thought that the introduction and background of this team of gods were very revealing, but it turned out that the author did not know whether he fell in love with these gods or wanted the protagonist and readers to fall in love with these gods. At least 20 to 30% of the chapters in this book are related to the brave team, and the scenes are so intense that the two Mamaru girls even surpassed the one Nanmamaru alone. I'm confused, author, you don't really want to write them as positive characters. The introduction and beginning are clearly about the abstraction and madness of these people, but you don't avoid them in the text, and you still try to read them even though you know it's a large portion. What do you think of the readers? There are also the combat power rating of 0 in the entire book and too many special effects descriptions. No matter what kind of battle it is, in the early stage, some mechanisms and damage determination are done like online games, but later on, they don't care at all. As soon as the plug-in is opened, a large number of descriptions of skill special effects, environmental special effects, atmospheric special effects, and lighting special effects will be described, and then the opponent will be kicked to death. It reaches its peak in a later chapter. More than 80% of the descriptions in the whole chapter are special effects. The effective information does not exceed one hundred words. After reading it, it feels like you have not read it. The most effective information is actually the title. Can you believe it. In fact, having said so much, the core point is that the author does not save the places he should save, and does not write about the places he should not save. All I can say is that I still need to write more.

The large cup is of a high standard and is a good grass worth a look. The characters in the team have distinct personalities (laughs): arrogant and pressure monster, selfish hermaphrodite, and SB fairy. Each has its own characteristics, and its skills are astonishing. It is reasonable for the male protagonist to take the initiative (should?) To quit the team, unlike those mentally retarded people who were kicked out of the team and sent to the big daddy. The male protagonist has a good outlook on life, is strong (in terms of combat, not logistical assistance, the protagonist has already cultivated a demon queen in the first chapter, thus gaining strong combat effectiveness), and is not restricted by others. Golden Finger is a system for cultivating the Demon Queen. Through cultivating the Demon Queen, she acquires powerful abilities. The Demon Queen is obedient, sensible, ambitious, and wants to save the lower-level demons and create a peaceful and beautiful demon world. Although the protagonist thinks it's a game at first, he soon learns that the demon queen he raised actually exists. The content is relatively stable, and there are no major twists and turns in the plot (it's not a problem, it's just a snack, used to relax). The plot is that the protagonist leaves the team and wanders around, and then encounters some things, but the protagonist is strong and can deal with it easily. He also provides logistical supplies to the Demon Queen from time to time, so that the Demon Queen can rise up in the demon world and become the king. Gua! I want to see the protagonist kill three humanoid former teammates! ! ! If you don't open a new map and look at it from now on, I feel like there won't be much content later. I can roughly guess that the Demon World has been successfully ruled by the protagonist's two Demon Queens (in the current situation, the protagonist may only have two Demon Queens, unless there is an alien world) to rule the North and South Realm respectively, and then fight out from the Demon World to liberate the Human World (the Human World is still a feudal society), and then kill the evil god, invade from another world, or have a world crisis.

So far, the writing is pretty good. I voted for three monthly votes. Come on.

The tickets are for you, come on

How can I put it this way? What were those who quit the team before? They were in the life department and the logistics were full. Regardless of whether the team is a female protagonist or not, the protagonist is not the main character fighting monsters, and her character is also Asasi. After watching it, I always feel something is wrong. After reading this book, I finally knew what I wanted to read, which is that the protagonists are essentially turtle male variants. Why do you keep being a babysitter? He gives me the impression that he is a jerk. Everyone in the team is actually used to his cooking and tactics. After that, he actually has a crush on the protagonist and is nothing but a tsundere. It feels like one of those husband-chasing stories about not touching the CEO's wife after three years of marriage. She is obviously capable but doesn't join the family's group and cooks at home every day. People think it's useless and that it's not good for the heroine's life. The heroine is just like the turtle boy who pulls her back again and again after she realizes how good he is after she leaves him, he is so tough 🐢.

This cover of the Demon King is so good that not even the X series of heroes can resist it.

Don't let good women go, don't waste bad women. Apart from personality, there is no better human being on the racial level than them. Demons want to commit adultery, and humans also want to commit adultery. Only in this way can they be called healthy.

10,000 times better than the time travel game next door where the disgusting heroine usurps the achievements of her previous life. That one is so disgusting.

Have you ever been a stress freak? Some things are written randomly, taking it for granted

The cover looks familiar. Isn't this the Demon King from Series X? ? 🙂🙂

The previous parts written by the author are quite commendable and interesting. Whether it is the interaction between the protagonist and the Kamito team or the interaction with the Demon Queen, the characters are well created. But starting from the second Demon King, I felt like it took a turn for the worse. The rhythm of the story was completely rushed. The first Demon King had a relatively clear growth path, the second Demon King basically changed from a slave to a demon king after being given the power, and the third one was even more heavyweight. After being given the power, she could directly start to unify the human and demon clans. It seemed as if she had no ideology of her own and was a puppet of the protagonist. Then the protagonist originally went all the way north to the Demon Realm gate to go to the Demon Realm, but somehow he was thrown directly there, and then he basically ignored the human world, which means he completely gave up the interaction with the God-man team here. So who can help me fill in the slap in the face that I want to see. Furthermore, the protagonist's part in the demon world is also heavyweight. He relies on Tai Chi to respond to his emotions towards the first demon queen. He plays tricks on the second demon queen and assumes a condescending attitude. He doesn't even have a chance to see the second demon queen. His combat power collapsed suddenly. He had spent a long time and many chapters fighting a swollen girl in the human world, but he suddenly became invincible in the demon world. He began to go deep into the demon world alone and killed people at will. As a result, he lost his ability in the holy realm, killed a saint in seconds, and was suddenly contaminated by the saint again. As a result, the Demon Queen, who had been able to steadily push forward with a flanking attack from both sides, was forced to attack forcefully and was seriously injured to save the protagonist. The other issue is the world view. It is said that there are many gods, but specifically there are two and a half. The evil god is the protagonist who throws shit into the human world; the demon god is the quick passage for the protagonist to enter the demon world; These three gods did nothing else. Sanctuary was originally said to collect souls to create gods, but then it suddenly said at the end that collecting soul power was not to create gods, but to fill the hole between the two worlds. The protagonist liberated the people here, but had to fill the hole himself. It's not bad to work with the Six Saints. No one's world has exploded long ago, and the gods on both sides don't care. There is also the witch, who was described as having a secret in the previous descriptions, but in the end it was not said that she had any secret. She was released into the void, and then the other two members of the God Man team were also inexplicably cleared. All in all, it would be good if the novel followed the rhythm at the beginning. I don't know why the rhythm suddenly got messed up at the end, going here and there. As you get to the back, you can clearly see the urgency of sitting and catching up on the plot. I don't have a good grasp of what the readers really want to see, and I avoid writing all the points that I personally feel would be very refreshing and fun.

I still can't understand why former teammates who quit the team are so smart But I was relieved after hearing the sharp voice 😁 Ready-made examples

It's weird. From the second Demon King, she has been avoiding the important and taking the easy, avoiding conflicts and crazily advancing the plot. It's like Luffy going to practice in One Piece. Could it be that the author forgot all his ideas after the car accident? It can only end badly.

Later, I felt that there were too many branch plots, so I couldn't tell what the main plot was, and I couldn't figure out the strength and positioning of the protagonist at all. It looked a bit messy, and even when I finally managed to show my strength, it didn't feel satisfying at all.

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It's getting boring, from being disgusted at first to skipping chapter after chapter to now not wanting to click in. The pacing is not good, and the fight against the evil god's retinue and the archduke is a bit slow. It has a tiger's head but a snake's body and a dog's tail. It's smelly and long. There must be something at the end to disgust you. The description of the protagonist seems to be invincible, but he is always a little bit close, and he is happy and unhappy at the same time. He will give you a stop. There are also multi-threaded descriptions, one now and another, which is annoying to watch, and the interaction between Vesperus and the protagonist, I personally feel that it is not handled well, and I make a comment from time to time, which makes me dislike her less and less. I hope the author can take good care of his body, adjust his condition, and write better and better. I want to see the protagonist kill his former teammate Kouga! ! !

Several years later, the three brave men finally arrived at the Demon King's Palace after all the hardships. They saw the male protagonist sitting on the throne, stroking the Demon King on his knees and saying in a deep voice: You don't even want to call me the Demon King.

The trend of quitting the team is the most popular one. I didn't expect it to really have a second spring, but could it? Can it really be done? It depends on whether the author can break out of the fate of being thrown into the street, come on.

This cover is the juice devil sauce. .

God cover🙂🙂🙂

That's bad. I've been raising it for a while and now I'm looking at it. How did the protagonist get the ability to erase withering? I forgot.

It's a bit putting the cart before the horse. Where is the light novel I want?

Why is there so many CS jokes in this book 😂 It's so funny

After the author got into a car accident, it didn't look good anymore, and it wasn't as interesting as it was in the early stage.

Well written

I have actually seen the cover😰

In my memory, the author seemed to have been in a car accident last time. Is this an update again?

Damn it, I've been looking for this novel for a long time and it's finished?

Guys, if this book can be a trap, please give me some advice 🙏🙏🙏