One Life to Open the Heavens

It's a bit inexplicable and mysterious. The writing style is like writing a short story, and the perspective narrative is like playing a single-player game, with missions and plots being triggered inexplicably. A bunch of flaws: 1: How big is this map? There are two big cities in the Eastern Wasteland, then some big towns, and then small towns. Your town is home to brothels, restaurants of various grades, and a branch of a top-notch religious priest? Are all the six chief executives out? Is this right? Describing a small town for a while and a city for a while, you might as well just write about a small town. Does the town have such complete supporting facilities? Then this Eastern Wasteland is not a wasteland either. At the beginning, I thought it was like the Great Northwest Mountains, but in the end it actually looks like the core developed areas of Jiangsu, Zhejiang and Shanghai, which is too unconventional. 2: The people in the emotional village have been eroded by the will of the tyrant next door. There are such practitioners in the small town, and the people in the village also know that there are practitioners, but then there is not a single practitioner in the village? He didn't show any yearning for cultivation or the pursuit of becoming a master. The atmosphere was not centered around cultivation, but just ordinary people. He also bullied Lin Hu and the protagonist who were suspected of being cultivators? There's nothing wrong with it. 3. The design of this practice system is also inexplicable. Let's just say that the protagonist's divine fire burns candles and lights the divine fire to illuminate the destiny. In essence, it still requires something like virtual quality. Virtual quality is similar to the aura of heaven and earth in other novels. When you practice, you need to use divine fire to refine the deficient constitution, and when you practice secretarial training, you also rely on the proficiency of the deficient liver. Isn't this contradictory? What is the point of breakthrough? Accumulating weak quality? Then if you practice secret techniques, you will consume virtual essence, won't it affect the speed of your own realm breakthrough? For the time being, I can see that no matter what system is in this book, it is essentially a different application of virtual matter. What is the use of illuminating the size of life? Distinguish between strong and weak? I haven't written it down yet. What is the purpose of the sign? Is it equivalent to a reminder from Heaven to mark a small map? The book also says that the way of heaven is evil, has no order, acts wantonly, brings harm to the world, and needs to be eradicated. Why does it give you a mark to remind you? 4: Is there no level of secret skills? How come you can use it casually? How to distinguish between strong and weak? For example, the virtualization secret technique of the protagonist's clone society is not clearly stated. Is it practiced by the woman in the clone's body or is it given by the Golden Finger Soul Shepherding Book? If it was given, it would be fine. If it was practiced by that woman, wouldn't the head of the Yun family know? Is that mask some kind of commercial product? Is there a portrait of the protagonist who is wanted when he comes out later? Discovered? After Yun finds out, will he not go to the dungeon to see if the maid is still there? Don't you want to fight a bunch of protagonists? Just practice inside as if nothing happened. Let's talk about this secret skill again. This is obviously a rule-based ability. If it wasn't given by the Soul Shepherding Book, it would be unreasonable. How could a maid know such a buggy secret skill? Or is it the unique ability of other cultivation paths? So this kind of imitates the system-like feeling of the Lord of Mysteries. Different paths have different abilities. Can you vote for fantasy? Can't it be a fantasy? 5: Why is that woman Shen Sha so inexplicably so nice to the protagonist? The family comes from one of the two major cities in the Eastern Wasteland. It shouldn't be a particularly weak family. It doesn't even have a single protector? Looking for the Soul Shepherding Book that the protagonist has cultivated? What's in it for her? The protagonist is still inexplicably getting close to you. He said before that he would be a little more modest. He didn't ask the woman carefully when the horn appeared in the life scene. People have seen your golden fingers. Are you afraid that the broken horn will be known? She speculated that the protagonist is the future genius of Donghuang. Does this conflict with their interests? If not, why not take him home and raise him, invest in him to win him over, and if there is a conflict of interest, why not just kill him? 6: Besides, are there no practitioners exploring the secret realm near that small town? How did the Yun family know? He also used formations to create an illusion to deceive that crazy old man, assuming that the old man is the prince of the Nine Swords Immortal Dynasty. What level does he have? The backhand formations he left behind can even deceive the thunder tribulation of heaven and blur the consciousness of heaven. How can you, Shankakayun family, be so virtuous and capable? ? Create an illusion to deceive people? This old man is also magical. He said that he practiced the secret technique of immortal golden body, which is the protagonist's secret technique of golden patterns. He blew it loudly, but why did he die without any movement? Can't you resist the catastrophe? Then he will be immortal for all eternity🔨 7: Let's talk about the realm of cultivation. There are six realms, and the fourth one is immortal, not counting the mortal realm. The protagonist is currently in the first realm, and the head of the Yun family is in the second realm. The gods of the earthly priests are also immortals. Of the six chief priests, the first five are all immortals? ? Then this local priest is obviously a cult and does not have a righteous force? Is there anything special about the protagonist? He was targeted when he was in the village, and then the village chief deliberately arranged for him to deliver offerings to the town without showing any sense of importance. It seemed like he was engaging in some conspiracy, so why not just arrest the protagonist and let him wander around? What is the connection between the protagonist and Shen, and do you want to use him to plot? The problem is that the woman was also caught casually. Moreover, the description of these six realms seems to be the division of the protagonist's cultivation. What about the divisions of other systems? Same? He also said that this path was powerful and dangerous to practice, so few people practiced it. As a result, all the people who appeared were those who practiced this path, including the clone maid. 8: Talking about Lin Hu, from the book it seems that he is an old man from the Nine Swords Immortal Dynasty. He specializes in guarding the secret realm, the crazy old man, waiting for the successor to appear. Why did he inexplicably teach the protagonist to practice? Later, when the protagonist lit the sacred fire candlestick, he was surprised by the protagonist's talent, which means that he didn't know it beforehand. I thought that the protagonist was a destined person, so he was kind to the protagonist, but the article was inconsistent. There is no one in the protagonist's village. There are ferocious beasts and evil spirits in the nearby forest, but no one is dealing with them. There is no cultivation atmosphere in the village. There are forest tigers in the protagonist's village that can frighten and protect them. So how did the other villages survive? Lin Hu calls the protagonist the hope of the East Wasteland, which means that there is no problem in other realms. The East Wasteland was previously ruled by the Nine Swords Immortal Dynasty, which was probably destroyed because of the failure to conquer the sky. Now that there is no guardian force, no one has sent people to occupy and invade nearby places such as the Northern Wasteland, the Southern Wasteland, the Middle Wasteland, and the Western Wasteland? To summarize, I have dug a lot of pits, made mysteries, and completed the plot in a single-player linear game. The narrative style is very similar to that of short fantasy novels, especially those written by women. I wonder if the author is a woman? In less than thirty chapters, a lot of mysteries have been thrown away. They dig holes for the sake of digging holes. The readers are confused, tired and have little information. After reading the first three chapters, they thought it was a slow-burn style, but then the plot suddenly rushed over. The story did not unfold step by step. The feeling of fragmentation was too strong. The author did not take the opportunity to change and optimize it.

Have you ever had a blast? I just write things randomly and take it for granted.

It's tiring to read at first glance

The following are some reports related to this book. 1. Regarding the plot rhythm of the first twenty chapters. This is because I didn't control this well when I first started the book, and I tended to write in an outline style. (9.19 Record has been revised in general and the reading can be considered smooth. The rhythm of the narrative in the later chapters will be better. When I have time, I will revise the previous ones and strive to be the best.) (9.24 For the record, the first chapter has been rewritten and revised, and the rest of the text has also been partially adjusted. There may be friends whose book reviews are missing. Please forgive me. ｡°(°¯᷄◠¯᷅°)°｡) 2. This book is very poorly readable. You can check out the latest chapters. If you are a book reader, please give a follow-up or recommendation vote to encourage the author. Thanks🙏 3. The author is indeed a newbie and is still learning many things. (๑•̀ㅂ•́)و✧ In addition, if I have enough time for coding, I will write the first draft first, then delete and rewrite it. Such a chapter would take at least two hours. In addition, my typing is slow and I haven't saved my manuscript, so I can only write about four a day for the time being. (I'm practicing my coding speed, so I can do more in the future.) 4. If you have any questions about the plot or other places, you can tell me. Thanks. It doesn't involve subsequent plot development. If it can be changed, it will be changed. 5. The author surfs intensively, comments and interactions are welcome!

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I came from Douyin. If this is really my first time writing a book, then my talent is really good and I would be considered platinum.

The first twenty or so chapters progressed too fast and were a bit hazy, but it was much more comfortable to read later. The plot is a bit green, but overall it's okay, the writing is worthy of praise, and the visuals are good. The protagonist Tianjiao is set (surprisingly not a loser). The world view can be seen to be very large and dark (is this a ghost place like the Eastern Wasteland?). I also feel that the author wants to write some warm content. Let's see if the balance can be found later. Looking at it so far, the realm set is biased towards cultivating the mind (is the difficulty of cultivation at the beginning too high?) ​​And there are quite a lot of foreshadowings. This is the first time I have seen a picture scroll used as a spiritual pet. Supplementary information: The mysterious and immortal way of all things is transcendent, greedy, angry, foolish, conceited and doubtful. This sentence runs throughout the current story.

After reading the first few pictures, I was so tired that I didn't remember anything. Can this young man stand it?

I came here through Douyin. To be honest, I don't know where the signing was. I read a few chapters but didn't remember any of the content.

Unlike newcomers, demons from outside the territory come.