A Literary Master in Another World: Starting by Writing About the Hero’s Party Disbanding

The consequences of the manuscript appointment are too serious. Although I explained a lot, I still feel that the consequences of the manuscript appointment are not that serious.

It's okay, but the memes are too dense, and I don't even know how to get enough of many of them. It feels too homely to me. It's easier to screen readers this way

It's a bit too white for a Western fantasy novel, but for a novice novel, it's a big taboo to suppress the protagonist before he feels comfortable.

When I saw Ellen asking the protagonist for a manuscript, I thought the protagonist would write a fairy tale, but unexpectedly he wrote "The Hobbit". There is a saying that you can really write some fairy tales, such as "The Little Prince" or "One Thousand and One Nights" or "Andersen's Fairy Tales". Children also need book enlightenment. "Lord of the Rings" is too grand but not suitable for children's whims.

The character creation is okay, the plot is smooth, and it can be regarded as food in itself. But there are two big problems. One is excessive fun. Appropriate memes can make the atmosphere relaxed, while excessive memes can make people uncomfortable. Especially the memes that don't fit the background of another world will be very confusing if there is no magic modification . For example, in the recent chapter of Mad Thursday, the protagonist forcibly retained the V part of the V fifty in this meme, which was confusing. There was no monetary unit after fifty, and it was just a meme for the sake of it. This is the same as pre-made dishes. I accept you making pre-made dishes (making fun of meme), but I don't accept the price at which you use pre-made dishes to sell me real food (paying for a subscription to watch you make a lot of meme I saw online). Another aspect is the homogeneity of the plot settings. Conflict in a remote town: The protagonist wants to write a book to make money, but the villain refuses to let him do it. He comes to cause trouble. The nobles help, but the protagonist fights back. Conflict in the capital: The famous protagonist wants to write a book, but the villain refuses to let him do it. He comes to cause trouble, and the protagonist fights back. The routines are so similar, even though the villain's methods are different and the plots interspersed are different, it is still obvious when watching. The adventure group had nothing to do all day long, just waiting to read the book. The rebate system disappeared after it appeared. The book-loving adventurers were useless except for cheering. There were no alien races except dwarves. The role of the newly added Holy See was to change the skin of the adventurers. The impact of the book was simply "good-looking"... If you expand these things, you can get a good plot. There is no need to always stare at the plot of "the nobles don't let you write the book, I will kill you". To be honest, writing it as it is now may not necessarily fail, but I want to see something better.

Did the author come from outside to preach? Or is it the reincarnation of Lao Deng? He has a profound writing skills, and his essays and allusions are mixed together. There are no three or five books that cannot reach this level. Please take a previous work and bring it out for us to taste and appreciate.

The content is not bad, but it's a pity that the withdrawal stream that was used as a cover persuaded me to quit the team for a long time.

The recent content is still focused on business wars, which doesn't feel exciting enough. I can't catch up anymore. It's too dry.

The style is too "light". In fact, this kind of writing can be more in the direction of orthodox Western fantasy.

Disadvantages The villain who wanted to use his noble status to coerce the protagonist signed a gambling agreement with the protagonist and did not receive any major punishment, but lost some gold coins. It doesn't make people feel refreshed, and it's not enough. The progress of the emotional drama is completely inferior to that of the career line, which makes people feel a bit boring, so they should be progressed at the same time. Advantages The theme is unique and innovative, and the writing rhythm is okay