Hyperdimensional Player

Although the author's writing style is very stable and the plot is quite interesting, it cannot support digressions and the proportion of expository text is too heavy, which even affects the advancement speed of the plot. Moreover, there is also the problem of repetitive word count (as mentioned above, I will repeat it in another way below). As a result, this book is not that smooth in terms of look and feel. I can only say that it is almost at the level of grass jelly, which is considered to be top-notch food.

Your 123 chapters are a bit confusing, and there is no need to increase the value. It is just a novel. The first world is obviously a Western fantasy stage. The King of Britain swept across Europe. If you want to write about ancient Chinese history, you can open a separate world. Anyway, it is an infinite flow of species. What great people and great deeds? Write casually, don't keep inserting personal information. It's not very good to read without any foreshadowing. It's more like you added it in at random. The first dish the chef made was Western food, but the drink he served you was an authentic old Beijing bean juice 😥, which really messed up my old baby.

The book is very good, worthy of being an old author, but there are so many small problems 1. For example, the knight at the beginning has no horse, but he wears armor and coat and walks to a small village. The protagonist is tired after carrying the armor and cannot walk far beyond the village. The defeated rebel is stunned. He walked to the village with two followers and still had the strength to kill people. His physical strength was so good. 2. Everyone in the small village was killed, but the protagonist survived. However, the reason why the protagonist survived was that he was only punched in the head. The enemy When people were slaughtering the village, the protagonist was punched, and everyone else was chopped with swords and axes. The protagonist received preferential treatment 3. The witch could use spells to hide herself when she first appeared, but others subconsciously ignored her. After teaming up with the protagonist, this skill disappeared inexplicably, and the janitor found that she was in good shape 4. Unless it is a game world, otherwise, weapon combat skills are essentially about mastering certain skills, and you will not be able to cut with a knife just because you are superb with swords. Bullets, physical attributes and skills are two different things, so whenever I see the protagonist turning around to shoot an arrow, I want to complain. This skill essentially twists the upper body 180°, which can accurately hit the person behind you, without increasing the power of the arrow. If you want to increase the power of archery, it is better to face the enemy head-on and pull the bow vigorously, so that the arrow will be accurate and fast. Twisting the body 180° will make it difficult to use some muscles, and the strength of the bow will be reduced, which will cause a decrease in power, but will cause suddenness. 5. The protagonist is not very smart in combat. He shoots people first and shoots horses. If you want to run away, kill the enemy's horse and see if he can catch up with you. In addition, when you can't run away, the opponent's boss has such high attributes. Can you kill the minion first? If the minion is dead, you can surround him. When the opponent comes after him, it will be enough for the protagonist to shoot several arrows. It can only be said that the author is still resting on his laurels. The details are not described enough, and some plots lack logic and inconsistency.

Nothing else, just to complain, one chapter is half a chapter subscription, Chelugluan's words and Baidu information are flying all over the sky, let's go

It's so boring. It's so embarrassing to brag about the protagonist's many cheats every day. The protagonist only boasts about his achievements, so what does Napoleon mean to him? The war scenes are not well written either, so why not switch to the second world?

The combat power collapses too quickly. After killing hundreds of mortals, plus the giant monsters, sea monsters and banshees, you can kill the gods... The rest is basically a lengthy introduction to the settings, which is too watery.

It's a good book. The settings are relatively rigorous at the moment. There aren't so many inexplicable settings. The logic is smooth and not deceptive. Certified bookworm for 20 years.

Western fantasy novels always use Chinese things as metaphors. There are many problems, and what they say is not very reasonable. I feel that your understanding, the author, is not very comprehensive. Aren't you afraid of causing problems when you write like this?

The reason for co-writing the protagonist to be invincible is to build a real empire on which the sun never sets for King Arthur, right? What is King Arthur? Why should he inherit the protagonist's assets? It's so disgusting to watch.

Please write more about dragons. I like watching western fantasy. Don't like war

Many authors who like to change maps will have this problem. In the last volume, I killed the king of the four worlds. In the next volume, I am still fighting gangs after five chapters, and I am still eating tomatoes after ten chapters. If you meet someone who is relatively new and likes to talk about things, it will be a bad experience. I suggest that you don't use two in one in the future. You can only write about the water in one chapter and write something practical in the other. Let me save some money and don't spend twenty points reading half of it and still discussing irrelevant things.

If you don't want to give up the first world, don't bring out the third world. Not long after writing Human Body No. 3, I jumped back to Human Body No. 1. The more I read, the more interesting it became. Jumping around like this is a bad look.

I wonder what World No. 1 Will be like in a few hundred years. It is probably still a medieval template. The empire established by the protagonist has collapsed, but the farming technology and magical enlightenment are probably retained. The upper limit of power is expected to drop a bit if the protagonist is not able to support it. There may be some solidification of classes. After all, the blood of dragons and giants may not be passed down, but the regeneration ability can always be passed on, and the protagonist can even study it later. Give abilities and regenerate abilities to followers. In the survival of the fittest, tenacious vitality can always be passed on better. The disadvantage is that big nobles are not easy to die. Even if they are seriously injured, they still have a chance to be saved. Magical enlightenment plus herbalism may develop mature potion science. By then, a hundred knights may really be worth an army of 10,000. The official knights are all warriors with one against a hundred.

Shennong's writing here is very good, except that when the protagonist faces the heroine, there is a sense of the old author's literary youth, what kind of love, love, fear of cowardice (when the heroine is written, the heroine automatically gives the protagonist wisdom and creates the plot, this kind of old author's style is too original, but in the current novel environment, it already belongs to fairy grass)

Without provoking a fight or rhythm, I will simply tell you my thoughts The second volume is about transforming your human body into a motor oil guy. I personally don't think it looks good at the moment, so I plan to wait for the third volume. (Don't blame me, I also spent money to read the book and voted for the monthly ticket. If you don't like it, just delete it. Don't say that you don't like it and leave it. If you want to leave it, leave it yourself first.) Is the price more expensive than the first volume? If it's the number of words, It has changed a lot, so that's okay (I didn't observe it carefully) Also, it's a bit strange to directly transfer from the Western medieval world view mixed with magic to a world like Omnic Crisis. The upper limit of omnics is too high, and it will be difficult to write later, and it will easily collapse.

Can you read and check it yourself after you finish writing? I wrote a large paragraph introduction in the front, and then repeated the content in a short introduction, repeating the hydrology with meaningless explanations, 😰

To be honest, the war scenes and the world situation are not well written and not attractive. In comparison, the descriptions of extraordinary battles and adventure upgrades are more interesting.

This book is history + fantasy, but the level is hard to describe. The level is not as good as the previous cute World War II, and it is not very popular among Xingyue fans The previous reader portraits were fantasy parts, which were subject to review. It turns out that the adventure turf is not easy to get, so maybe a little more history will be added this year. But the historical area is not a fantasy area that you just create. You can set up the fantasy area however you want. You need to have basic rules when it comes to history. The author's historical level is not up to standard even in the starting point historical area. For example, the simplest Huns are not uniformly called. The Huns recorded in Chinese books are used to describe the Huns. Now the history part has purely become a tool for the author to reduce the number of words. You can probably use it by checking the information and revising it. However, there are also great pseudo-historical commentators among readers, who can be regarded as bastards looking at mung beans Less about what you don't understand, more about fantasy, and don't ruin your own brand

The pace of this book is very comfortable. It is a pseudo-European historical fantasy that is digitized but not completely numerical. It is accessible but not completely unfamiliar. The timely background introduction is also very timely. Have voted for the month, author, please come on, I look forward to publishing more updates.

If you want to write about ancient times, why didn't you open a new world? You can write whatever you want. If you insist on writing, it will cause a mess of comments in the Western world. Anyway, we can open more worlds. The soul of the main account can wear the trumpet.

In fact, when Duncan inspected Merlin and established the Magic Academy, I didn't expect that the next chapter would jump so quickly. Destroying the Eastern Luo, destroying the nomads, establishing education, establishing institutions, and enfeoffing the countries, all of this was covered in one go. It was really fast 🙂. The subsequent retreat was also covered in one go, but it was really written down in detail. The story in the first chapter is a Western-themed book in the historical area called "Traveling through the Western Roman Period and I Founded the Second Roman Empire" 🤤

Can you stop pouring water? What does Che Luolun mean by saying things over and over again? It can be said in a few sentences, but you insist on talking about half a chapter. Did our money come from the strong wind? Are you here to see you drink water? Are you worthy of your readers? Doesn't your conscience hurt?

The same old talk started again, repeating things that can be explained in one sentence over and over again, and repeating them again every few chapters. I won't tell you what Star Caster will look like in the later stages, so you can make your own decision.

The book is very good, and the writing style is also good. However, the background descriptions are too protracted and wordy. They are all mentioned in one stroke, which is too obvious.

When the first world is gone, let's end it. Don't keep going back to the word count.

I feel like the author has a long-standing problem with writing books, that is, he pays attention to the rhythm and plot at the beginning. As the scenes get bigger later, the writing becomes more streamlined, and the rhythm breaks down throughout the paragraph.

When you update, subtle flaws will be magnified, and the greenness of the writing will be criticized. When you update twice, a little patience is born, and the progress of the plot is paid more attention to. When you watch the third watch, the slightest praise begins to sound, and the number of dead harvests begins to decrease. When you watch the fifth update, readers' support spontaneously forms, and the voices of praise become louder and louder. When you are at the tenth watch, the Confucian debates are deafening, and the tolerant attitude is implemented both internally and externally. When you are twenty, you will have a place in the bookworm's memories. Even in a long life, your name will leave a dazzling trace. Updating may not solve all difficulties, but more than 90% of the problems come from insufficient updates. So how long has it been and you are still trying to catch fish without updating? Are you worthy of everyone?

I have also heard about chapter 120. To be honest, this book is quite good, the plot progress is really slow. The most important thing is that this book is enjoyable. Is it exciting? ? Is there any? The author's writing style is quite good, and you can look forward to the development of the plot later on. I really can't stand it anymore, I can't stand it anymore

If you can tolerate half of the content writing about the history and mythology system of Middle-earth, you can read it For those who are not interested, it is just like chewing a stick.

The level of the story of Peer 3 has dropped significantly. It is a hammer in the east and a mallet in the west. It is not attractive. It is difficult to be original. It is not as good as the human world view, whether it is Warhammer or Stars, it is worse than it is now.