The End of the World Is Coming to Ask for Help? I'll Report It to the Country

This is the first time I write this kind of personal opinion. After reading more than a dozen chapters, I can't stand it. Let me share my personal feelings. 1. Messy. The whole article gave me a sense of confusion, with a hammer here and there, a complete mismatch between the preface and the follower. 3. Self-righteous remarks do not mean that you are not allowed to make remarks, but if you directly insert remarks into the article and add a long paragraph, it really ruins the perception. You also emphasize things like "the character knows that the reader does not know" and "XXX is crucial". It is difficult not to make people disgusted. 4. It's slow and the article is not on topic. Chapter ten has not yet entered the main plot for the first time, and there is basically no portrayal of the apocalyptic atmosphere. Then your main word has a shitty apocalypse, don't talk nonsense about what will happen in the later stage. If you can't retain people in the early stage, how can anyone be willing to chase you in the later stage? 5. There is too much nonsense, and many things written are completely meaningless. There is a feeling of "Is it really necessary here?" "Is this a waste of word count?" "Is it really necessary to repeat this?"

Due to the limitation of the subject matter of this book, I have no choice but to comment on the value of fans. Please forgive me.

It seems that I am ready to enter the palace. This kind of subject matter actually has a large audience. Most of the authors who write this kind of subject are not capable enough and cannot write a majestic feeling. Authors with this kind of ability have better subject matter to choose from.

What kind of rubbish did you write? What's the word count here? A lot of nonsense? Tomato ones are prettier than yours

I hope the author can write a few million words, and if he can write these dozens of chapters, he will definitely be able to continue writing! ! ! I believe in you, come on, come on, come on

The writing is okay. If you can keep it up, it should be a high-quality product. Come on, it's best to put it on the shelves to get more updates.

It looks like a mess, and the donkey's lips are not what the horse's mouth is.

Recently, a lot of interesting new books have been written about eunuchs, and the old author just occupies his own three-thirds of an acre of land without moving. I really can't see anything interesting in this online article. I always feel that the novel will be developed into a short video explaining the movie.

There is a kind of beauty that I don't know what I'm writing about

Reporting is basically 💩. 99.999 Percent

Can the author take a good look at his book title before writing it? Take a good look at your outline. If you don't write about the apocalypse in the theme of doomsday, you have been writing about pretending to fight in reality. Otherwise, you can change the title of the book.

Don't say that you will write down the reminder later, and then explain the reason for doing this more than once. You will ruin the good impression by writing like this.

I can't understand it at all. I was confused after reading the first three chapters.

This novel can still be read if it doesn't have a main world and faces the end of the world, but it's not worth reading if it has such an SB setting.

Every time I read a sentence, I have to add a patch to the front. I'm a little tired.

Why hasn't this novel been reviewed yet? Don't the countries where it's submitted usually have the most reviews? I think the rationale for this book is not to overwhelm the other books.

With these messy paragraphs, one period after another, do you think writing a novel is just chatting?

The idea is quite good, but there are too many private goods It's not that the private goods mixed in are bad or wrong, but there are too many and I feel tired from reading.

What's it about? I've read so many chapters and it feels so confusing.

I couldn't stand it after reading a few chapters, so I put various explanations from the author in the text.

The author's writing was too conservative. I thought it was due to the powerful operation of the state machine and the protagonist's bad behavior. As a result, the country's fate was like a dragonfly skimming water, but the protagonist's bad behavior was neither normal nor normal. It turned out to be a tasteless article. If you want to write about the failure of the protagonist, you should write about how the protagonist fell flat and some outrageous operations, as well as the dwarf in the body of a giant in your heart. If you want to write about the fate of the country, you should write about the grandeur of the crazy army of the scientific research boss, the mobilization of personnel, and the changes in the ordinary people. Maybe this is the reason why the author's performance is not satisfactory.

Chapter 6 did not enter the first apocalyptic world. I talked about a lot of invalid content but did not advance the plot. I talked for 2 hours like a school principal in a meeting just to show that I could say the same thing. The content of these three chapters 4-5-6 can be combined into one panel to condense, why should it be reflected in character dialogue. Directly World coordinates: xxx plane Doomsday type: non-man-made natural extinction type Doomsday brief description: The harsh weather of year-round hail, rain and snow has restricted the normal development of human civilization. Strong beasts have evolved the ability to withstand the harsh environment. As a cost, they will suffer from hemophilia, which will make them lose their reason and fear, and destroy everything they can see regardless of the cost. Now they are eyeing the few remaining survival territories of mankind. Plane Request: The civilization of this plane needs a normal beast as a reference to create a potion to eliminate the beast's bloodthirsty. Reward: xxx Then the last film described the dimensional environment, the environment of a small stronghold in human civilization, the clothes and weapons used by people, and then the bloodthirsty beasts appeared madly. The two sides fought fiercely, and humans lost. Then add a twist, some beasts in the tribe who don't suffer from bloodthirsty help the remaining humans transfer rescue. Then after releasing the description reward, which attracts the country, then jumps directly in time, the country comes up with personnel, equipment, and plans, and then accompanies the protagonist to start the mission. Then after entering the plane world, we further described the environment, released the drone for reconnaissance, and found that the crazy beast decided to capture one as a sample to take back for research. We found that Hailstorm was coming to look for bunkers, and we encountered people from the small stronghold who were fleeing. One party needed a guide, and the other needed shelter. The two parties formed a large force and moved towards the target point. Up to 3 chapters

There is also the beginning, the three golden chapters. The dialogue content, authority, and personality of the characters written in these three chapters are very unclear and unnecessary. It is very simple for the protagonist to prove his ability to speak. He disappears directly in front of a bunch of people and cameras in the police station. When he comes back, he is covered in snow and holding a rabbit with blue fur and blue eyes. The tail of the rabbit's snake-like tail keeps lashing the protagonist's legs in an attempt to break free. In this paragraph, even a fool knows the protagonist's ability. Then report it, a professional person comes in and starts a conversation about why the protagonist turned it in to the system. The protagonist says that he is a loser and cannot resist this system task. Then he talks about the task to further expand the protagonist's ability, system task content, rewards, and pictures. The supervisor decides to take the task and goes to a meeting. Then the protagonist can ask if he can slice it. The supervisor will look at the protagonist like a fool. Why does an old hen that keeps laying golden eggs do that kind of thing like killing chickens to get eggs? Then there is the supporting treatment provided by the country to the protagonist. After the protagonist enjoys life, he starts the mission.

I didn't get through the third chapter of Golden Chapter. I rambled here and there and I don't know what I was doing.

It's a mess without any clue, it's written in a purely self-proclaimed way, and there are a lot of pronouns with unclear meanings, ps, it's written in a way that makes everyone understand A running account is more comfortable to read than your book

It's a bad habit to have a low word count. Read it yourself and see if you can find any problems.

Dear friends, I have written a novel "Huh?" Which is about deep sea fantasy and pets raised in the clouds. My electric eel shatters the darkness with thunder? ", Writing about various sea worlds, I hope you all like it o(╥╥)o

To read this, it is better to read a book written by AI. In memory of the ten minutes I wasted.

The first paragraph at the beginning is that xx, who is a police officer, has received professional training. No matter how big things happen, he will remain calm until he meets the young man in front of him who is holding a blue-haired snake-tailed rabbit in his hand.