Wielding the Five Thunders Across Two Worlds

As a novel in which the protagonist majors in thunder magic, can open two gates, and takes his little brother to a different world to conquer demons and eliminate demons, the highlights of the plot are just a few: subduing demons and eliminating demons, solving suspense puzzles, fighting monsters and upgrading, taking adventures to seize treasures, Taoist masters from two realms, conquering the younger brother, and farming for hegemony. However: 1. When the protagonist is slaying demons and monsters, he does not solve the case through searching for clues, following traces, interrogating witnesses, etc., And avoids the exciting point of solving mysterious puzzles; 2. At the same time, the description of the battle is extremely sloppy, even more sloppy than the Pokémon battle. It is just a few lightning strikes to kill the monsters on the opposite side. The description of the experience value is also very sloppy, and there is no sense of satisfaction. This avoids the hot-blooded battle and monster fighting. The fun of upgrading and taking risks to seize treasures; 3. Although the protagonist uses red sandalwood from another world to resell it in the world and become a Taoist, the description is also extremely sloppy, and the process and results are completely ignored. How to hire people, cut down, transport, resell, profit, and influence I skipped all the elements and didn't write them down, and avoided the cool points of the Taoist masters of the two worlds; 4. When the protagonist has enough experience in fighting monsters, he can add an extra Pokmon Ball to collect a younger brother, but the process of recruiting a younger brother is also very simple, just asking the other person if they want to be a younger brother? The other party bowed to him without any twists and turns, and there was no foreshadowing or description of the younger brother, so the feeling of subduing the younger brother was also skipped; 5. Although the protagonist and the younger brother built a temple in another world, they had no idea of ​​using it as a base to conquer and conquer the other world. They never thought about expelling the demons and then ruling and taking over the surrounding territories, starting a farming model to improve people's livelihood or engage in industrial development, and avoided the excitement of farming for hegemony. The setting of this book is okay, but it is dragged down by the author's writing style and thinking. It clearly has the possibility of becoming a masterpiece, but the author chose to use strong writing skills to avoid all the exciting points. At least in the early stage, it presented readers with a plain-boiled novel with a dull plot, a bland story, and pale characterization.

I can't stand stallion stories, everything is female, and all animals are female

If the author can't write about women, don't write about them. I read more than 20 chapters in the beginning and it's really annoying. The women are stupid and looking for trouble. An ancient rural girl is hungry every day and hasn't cleaned anything. It's normal not to take a shower for a month in the environment with monsters and monsters everywhere. She often does farm work and is exposed to wind and sun. She can't be beautiful. There are also class distinctions. How can she find the confidence to stick to the male protagonist? The male protagonist often touches his head and gets close to him. He is a rich second generation and has not just been released. Normal people will not get close to him and will only keep away from him.

If this one doesn't work, I'll write a book called The Melon-eating Swordsman from Jin Yong's World.

The last book on martial arts was very popular. I look forward to your new book continuing to write about martial arts. Waiting until now, it turns out that you will write about the Second Realm Immortal Cultivation style. And there are too many people writing about this genre. All kinds of fun routines have been written. People who are looking forward to you hope that you will continue to write about martial arts. I have been advised to eat enough. Don't you understand?

Analyze the poisonous spots that take experienced people through. The time is too early. The protagonist has just developed and leads people through time in a hurry. It is unstable. It is more reasonable to put it back a little. When the strength is strong, it will be more reasonable. Moreover, the identity was exposed directly and voluntarily, and the contact was only for a short time. Do you believe in the character of the veteran so much? The third is that it destroys the uniqueness and becomes a cliché. The protagonist loses its specialness and the sense of satisfaction decreases. I still feel anxious. The protagonist should first develop candidates for thunder, then slowly lead people, and then design a place to make people who travel through the past think it is some special secret cave.

You have to let the Taoist priests roll up, who they want to pull, whether they want to pull in fellow disciples or juniors, you have to have rules and regulations. Use contributions in exchange for places. The protagonist takes a cut.

Who the hell wants to see you picking up girls? You're grinding and moaning and sticky and you're so tired. What I want to see is pig's feet pulling people's heads to form a team in the modern world. Cutting down mountains and ruining temples in other worlds. Killing demons and monsters. I want to see rivers of blood. Who the hell wants to see you fall in love?

The dialogue has no depth, the characters are not fleshed out, and it easily pulls people into another world, which is a mouthful of poison.

It's so ugly that I don't even know where your score came from. Did someone else give it to you?