Rebirth 08: Equipment God

Let me first talk about my overall impression of this book. Boss Xin's book adopts the classic urban rebirth structure, that is, the male protagonist is reborn as a student, grows stronger, changes his destiny, and ascends to the throne step by step with the help of his golden finger. As an old writer of urban literature LV5, Boss Xin must be very comfortable in writing. Compared with other articles on similar themes, I think this book is slightly better because Boss Xin's writing style is really good, and sometimes there is a sense of eternity in a few words. Moreover, the plot advancement pays attention to logic, not just emotional pulling. It is more delicate and engaging, has no flaws, and the reading experience is smoother. If I put it in a more elegant way, it would be that the reading of this book is more charming and stylish, and does not give people the sense of vulgarity like the face of the nouveau riche. If the time is extended, I believe that this book will stand the test of time better. … However, if we use more concrete words to describe it, the reading experience of this book is like an energy drink, and some refreshing articles are like carbonated drinks. The taste of functional drinks may not be worse than carbonated drinks. But when both are from unknown brands (new books), carbonated drinks are more consuming - readers may feel that it is not necessarily certain whether the book is good or not, but for carbonated drinks, at least the excitement of the bubbles when entering the mouth, that is, the refreshing feeling, can be determined. In an era when online articles are becoming more and more fast-food-oriented, the new book issue can be said to be volume after volume. Paying attention to the early experience, or to be precise, in theory, carbonated drinks that can at least guarantee the early experience are indeed more popular than functional drinks that are not sure whether the experience will be good or not. But here, I am not saying that Boss Xin should turn his book into a carbonated drink, nor do I recommend it. As the saying goes, strong-willed melons are not sweet. The writing style should be whatever it is. First, make sure that the content you write is what you are good at writing. This is more important than anything else. However, before the brand name is established, we can do our best to package the product as much as possible, give readers clearer reading expectations and reading guidance, and try to improve the conversion efficiency of the early stage of the work. Therefore, I personally think that there is still room for optimization in the packaging and guidance of the works in this book. —— Let me state that we are not teaching the author to change the text, nor do we need the author to change the text (plot), but while the plot remains unchanged, we should appropriately fine-tune the introduction and wording of the text, optimize the packaging, provide clearer reading expectations, and provide good reading guidance (referring to strengthening the sense of plot anticipation to stimulate follow-up reading). …… First, let's make it clear what this book is about. In my opinion, this book actually has three main plot lines. One is the emotional line, which goes without saying. With the author's writing style, it is not impossible to write about daily romance. As long as you keep playing, don't waver between single heroine and multiple heroines, and set the tone early. The second is the learning line with the golden finger equipment system as the core, or the learning mastery line. Third, it is the business line that can be called the technology line. Visual inspection will lead through the textile factory and lead out later. …… As for the emotional line, since the author is not writing a love story, it is just a daily adjustment, and the performance is stable, there is no need to say more or adjust it. Personally, the main thing is to make a choice between the study line and the career line, or the allocation of words. In urban themes, it is difficult to write a long story without a career line. Therefore, a book must introduce a career line. But the time the protagonist travels through is a few months before the college entrance examination. Even if you can start a business in college later, it is impossible to completely stop writing about college life. Based on this, the career line should gradually unfold in the middle and later stages, and gradually increase the writing. In the early stage, you only need to throw out some small plots from time to time, make small fuss, and maintain a sense of existence. Of course, if the outline is well prepared, these small plots can also form a hidden plot line. For example, the foreign trade list of the textile factory was pigeoned because the protagonist accidentally took away two Japanese people when reporting. In short, when readers enter this book, the first thing they come into contact with is the learning line. There is actually a gap between high school and entrepreneurship, so there is no need to establish too much presence for the career line in the early stage. Therefore, I personally suggest that in the introduction of the work, the positive feedback brought by the learning line should be strengthened, the introduction of the career line should be weakened, and only the career line should be retained as the long-term goal of the book. …… Let's talk about the learning line. In this book, the learning line is actually organically combined with the equipment line. Through the progress made in the equipment line, the protagonist can quickly realize cash in the learning line. In layman's terms, the equipment line corresponds to plot obstacles and controls the ups and downs of the plot's rhythm; the learning line corresponds to the positive feedback of the plot, and is responsible for making readers feel happy and can pretend to be saints in fancy ways. With this understanding, you can easily get that the learning line is actually the academic line, which is responsible for creating one plot node after another that makes the saint appear in front of others. As long as the nodes are designed in advance, the exciting rhythm of the plot can be grasped as a whole. …… The equipment line is equivalent to the side task list of the work. The process from discovering equipment to obtaining equipment is the embodiment of plot obstacles, which corresponds to the tight and tight rhythm of whether the plot is progressing to the end or not. At the same time, the equipment line can also play the role of plot clues and plot prompts, responsible for organically connecting the small plots of the love line or career line. It can be said that from a creative perspective, the structure of this book is very reliable. You don't have to worry about not knowing what to write at the end of the writing and you will have to run around doing it. …… So, what exactly is equipment? Although the equipment system is a little fancy, in fact, from a creative perspective, it is equivalent to the previously popular entry system. Compared with the entry system, the advantage of the equipment system is that it is more flexible and can serve as plot clues to connect the plot. But the shortcoming is that the equipment system has a certain understanding threshold, although it is not high, unlike the entry system where readers can easily understand it. Then, what we should do at this time is to lower the threshold of understanding, simplify complex things, and try our best to allow passerby readers to have the most basic intuitive impression of the golden finger of the equipment system. Therefore, I personally suggest that in the introduction of the work, you can omit the setting of equipment synthesis, and only focus on the various special effects that the equipment can bring. At the same time, for the definition of the equipment system, the simpler the words and the more precise the description, the better. There is no need to use plural nouns for vague explanations (the text can be used as a supplementary explanation with examples). …… Attached below is a brief introduction to the book that I personally edited for reference (there is still room for further polishing and optimization): Human beings are the soul of all things. The strong power of the spiritual level will infect the objects, making them seem to be sustenance of life, including joy, anger, sorrow and joy, as well as regrets and dreams. Zhai Da was reborn and returned to the small town high school in 2008. He awakened the [Life Equipment Synthesis System], which allowed him to enlighten special items and refine them into equipment for his own use. [Old Man TV], will the content played make people addicted? Zhai Da took out the serious disc with his backhand and became addicted to knowledge. [Artistic Girl's Pen] Will writing down the content deepen your memory? Zhai Da fell in love when he saw it and flirted with her decisively: I will copy your pen! …… Pieces of equipment and passages of life dazzled Zhai Da. At first, he just wanted to be a top student, a rich man, change his destiny against the will of nature, and enjoy a cheating life. Later he discovered that he could do more than just be a top student; he could change more than himself. "I will realize your dreams; I will make up for your regrets." "If one day you are willing to be proud of me. Then I promise that this day will start from today!" ————

After entering college, I felt that the content was a bit divergent. First, selling alcohol all of a sudden? It's strange, it feels very disconnected from Harbin Institute of Technology. I thought that after attending Harbin Institute of Technology, I would learn some things, but the content of the study was just a brief talk about classes and exams. The main character who has just entered the freshman year, his skills are high-precision machine tool operation, and the other skills are writing? High school science content? Don't you want to develop well? Second, to become a disciple of Mr. Qian, based on a novel? Ideas for the future? Any ideas that can be realized? No, buddy, Li Liyuan has done a good job, right? Third, Android system? When you go to Harbin Institute of Technology, you don't engage in hardware, but software? Want the whole cash cow thing? Provide funding for future research? Fourth, the ability system of the book was so confusing to me, especially the magic suit. I only felt awkward when performing magic. Summary: Before Chapter 300, I wanted to call it food, but after Chapter 300, I felt that it was becoming more and more chaotic. There was no main line, and I just wrote whatever I thought of.

The biggest feeling I had after reading this rebirth novel is: the word elegance. Elegance goes without saying. Both the writing and the plot arrangement have a free and easy and cheerful feeling. This is particularly rare in many urban rebirth novels and is actually a source of food.

So when I saw some friends talking about whether it should be a single heroine or a dual heroine, I personally feel that Luwei is still not that good and has no soul, and her portrayal is not as good as Xiaolu. If the single heroine is Luwei, it feels like she is just a person set up to match the plot and the protagonist. She is very hollow, like a machine, and very dull. Do you think so? Even classmates like Lin are portrayed more vividly than the heroine. It is recommended to have two or three female protagonists. After it was released, the male protagonist became more multi-faceted and had a hand in every position. It was very complicated and messy. The robot heroine was brought in to hand out dog food to lubricate the article. The latter part was very dry, but the first part was very good. I always feel that the author wants to write about a protagonist who serves the country and leads a new social trend, but there seems to be too many ideas to fill in the article all at once, without a focus or in parallel. Lin obviously has a better portrayal and is more popular, but Lu Wei still can't support the single heroine structure I think the best situation is two big heroines who have a formal relationship. Lin is the little heroine below. I like the relationship between Xiao Lu and Big Man the most, followed by Lin and Lu Wei. Although many people talk about Lin Cha, but I think this is the state of a good-looking female high school student.

It is worth recommending and subscribing to. This book is one of the hundreds of books I have read in the past few years that can make people sigh. I will not spoil the specific content There are also small flaws. There are some things that are wrong at the back, but they are only about the last 5%. There are too many elements, but the problem is not big. Maybe some people just like it, but I feel it is a bit messy.

Are there any book friends who read the comments first before reading the book? I suggest you just read it and wait until chapter 50. At first I thought this was just a pretentious and slap-in-the-face novel written by a novice. Now I have read about 60 chapters. I saw the ideal post on the blackboard in the classroom and couldn't help but recommend it in the comment area. After reading this book, I was really shocked by the author's writing style. At first, I saw the writing style of a veteran, and later it incorporated ideal descriptions such as the feelings of family and country, "get rich first, get rich together." It's easy to really fall in love with a book, it moved me! I don't know how to write tweets, but I recommend this book!

Can you tell me whether it is a single heroine, dual heroines, or multiple heroines? There is only one Lu Wei in the character list without a label. Is it all a matter of guessing?

The author's writing is very good. I will add more updates as soon as possible. I hope it will maintain this level in the future. I stayed up late watching the show and fell asleep

Have seen the latest chapter. General comment: He has the qualities of an immortal. In terms of plot: The outline seems to be there, and there are many clues buried in the plot. At present, there is a clear main line as a whole, and there are also branch lines caused by the system and people around me. In terms of character design: The protagonist's character has a ruffianistic feel, but the ruffianism is not that thorough, and he is on the verge of being disliked by me. Because I prefer protagonists with a higher sense of morality (including doing bad things in the name of morality is acceptable). Mainly, the protagonist who clearly states that the novel he writes can be unfinished at any time is still a bit uncomfortable. The heroine and the supporting characters also have their own characters. The character design is not established simply by mentioning a sentence, but through small stories. It can only be said that it has surpassed the starting point of a lot of novels. In terms of poisonous points: It has not poisoned me yet, I will look at it later. Written at the end: I hope there won't be too many female protagonists. In the current 150,000 words, the plot of the female protagonists has already taken up about 50%. If there are more female protagonists in the future, I am really afraid that the author will turn a good novel into a stallion novel.

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The dragon must add the finishing touch. In the era of online writing, writing a book requires a golden finger. . The so-called golden finger refers specifically to what makes the protagonist unique. It is also the reason why the protagonist can grow and become stronger compared to others. Today, there are all kinds of golden fingers in many online articles, which can be said to be all kinds and strange. But few people have noticed that the architectural design of Goldfinger is actually closely related to the final length of the work. Let me tell you what is going on. ———— I think based on my humble opinion, so I won't say anything unreasonable; the opinions of one family may be biased. If there is anything wrong, please let me know. If you have any different opinions, please enlighten me. . Due to the needs of creation, in order to continuously provide readers with a sense of freshness, as the plot progresses, the golden fingers of the work will be refined and perfected. For example, in articles with card collection elements, the card collection progress is updated; For example, in articles with system directly, new system functions are unlocked; For example, in articles with noble people in urban backgrounds helping each other, new noble people appear, etc. In short, although the forms of expression may be diverse, the essence, in a nutshell, is to constantly unlock the sub-functions of the golden finger. . It should also be noted that the protagonist's gains during the advancement of the plot, such as skills and props, are also golden fingers that strengthen the protagonist in terms of macro concept. It's just that this kind of cheat is not a core cheat. It is a very detailed phased or even temporary cheat. It is usually called a task reward or a trophy. Here, I will use the word "harvest" to refer generally to such refined golden fingers. . Many authors know that in the process of advancing the plot of a long online article, it is necessary to give readers positive feedback from time to time in order to guide readers to continue reading. Therefore, as the plot progresses, authors generally have the consciousness of constantly arranging "harvests" for the protagonists. But new authors rarely realize that "harvest" needs to be realized through "harvest realization" to have practical significance. This leads to the problem that in the plot design of new authors, it is easy for the protagonist to have a lot of "gains" but no sense of existence and value. . For example, in dungeon flow novels, the protagonist completes dungeon tasks at a fast pace and receives a bunch of task rewards, ranging from skills to props. However, in the subsequent plot design, these new "harvests" obtained by the protagonist are very likely to remain in the dust and have no chance to appear. This makes the "gain" only give the reader positive feedback when the protagonist obtains it, but it will quickly decay, causing the reader's threshold to increase rapidly, and the protagonist will become less and less interested in subsequent similar "harvests". . There is a theory in the creation of movie scripts. The general idea is that if a gun appears in the first scene, then this gun will definitely be fired in the subsequent plot. The creation of online novels is similar to this. Some principles can be said to be roughly the same. The "harvest" needs to reflect a sense of existence before it can be called value. Personally, I call it "harvest realization". . The "harvest" that has not been realized is extremely lacking in reality. Especially online articles are long. After a while, the so-called "gain" that has no sense of existence and has never been realized will be easily forgotten by readers and even the author. This kind of "harvest" is not in quantity, but it can only be said to be fancy. . So, how to carry out "harvest realization"? To put it bluntly, it is actually very simple. It is to match the corresponding plot to the "harvest" and make use of it. In written terms, it is the plot design, which should complement and match the golden finger design. . Take "Rebirth 08: Equipment God" as an example. I once wrote a review for this book, summarizing its core cheat, that is, the equipment system, which is equivalent to the side task list of the book. The process from discovering equipment to obtaining it can be regarded as the control valve and regulator of the plot rhythm. At the same time, different equipment can also play the role of plot clues and plot prompts, responsible for organically connecting different small plots of the love line or career line. . In my opinion, or in my personal theoretical model, the different equipment as "harvest" are several staged or even temporary cheats after the core cheats of this book are refined. Recently, I met book friends to discuss whether the protagonist should give up his career after the college entrance examination and pursue equipment collection with all his strength, in order to gain extraordinary power that is not particularly supported by the equipment system but is indeed slightly possible. . Putting aside all concrete issues such as protagonist cognition and plot logic, I would like to ask a question only from the perspective of creative theory. If the protagonist focuses on collecting equipment and travels all over the country just to find equipment, assuming that he can really find a piece of equipment every once in a while, but because he focuses on collecting equipment, there will be no matching career line or other side plots. In this way, there is only a story of constant "harvest", can you still watch it? . So, what's your answer? {"NickName":"Book Friends 20190301093852010","UserId":328697602} . Above, golden finger designRealizationEquipment Goddess

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With a single female lead, I feel that the female lead has too many scenes and is all about love. The most important thing is that the female supporting role is not well controlled, which is really annoying.

Personally, I feel that this current book is much better than the previous ones written by the author (Purely personal opinion)

The wheat is ripe thousands of times, but the people are ripe for the first time! Just this sentence can deeply understand people's recognition of great men in that era!

I have seen this title many times and thought it was a boring show about growing up as a top student, but I didn't expect that I clicked in and read it in one go. It feels like a new era of online writing. The writing is sophisticated, full of emotion, and the plot is unconventional. It is exciting and easy to read.

There used to be a self-superhero, but the heroine was more brilliantly written, and a bunch of people just left it there to make a single heroine. The author was originally doing a good job, but suddenly cut off a lot of other character branches, and finally ran out of work and started to complain about the writing of others. The author just writes according to his own ideas. There is no shortage of readers in Qidian. These are the indispensable things to write well.

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I finished reading the two hundred and forty-four chapters in one go. I felt very happy. I will go and read the previous book first.

Overall, this is a good read and worth a read. Of course, I personally think there are several shortcomings. The first is the inner teacher. The character is too superficial and does not look like a real person. He is just an NPC arranged by the author. The author is also a Riddler. We only know that he is a top student who graduated from Renmin University and eats free time in school. He does not know anything else. But the energy is quite high, and the level of thought is even higher to a certain extent, giving him the appearance of a hermit and an expert. The second drawback is the teaching and training program established during the summer vacation. First of all, I feel that the money earned is too much, which is unrealistic. Two hundred students earned over six million in two months. On average, a student has to pay 20,000 to 30,000 yuan in tuition. This was in a poor county in 2008. It is too far away from reality. The second is the issue of distribution. Most students just do odd jobs, but they earn a hundred times as much as they paid for their labor. This is actually the protagonist giving his share of the money to these classmates. This is a handout, not reality. Later, when students enter society, they realize that society does not work like this. I'm afraid that the author will later portray the protagonist as a Madonna to build a utopia that is divorced from the real world.

This book was particularly good to read before the college entrance examination. The protagonist is witty and humorous, and the emotional scenes are pretty good. The part about the grandfather in the back is crooked. In fact, if it takes Chen Gou's route, this book might become more popular. The early descriptions of Lu Wei and Xiaolu are very soulful. It's a pity.

[Mottled Conference Whiteboard] Green: A magnetic whiteboard with a rusty frame, and the scrawled writing "2003 Hot Topic Plan" remains in the corner Source of belief: The start-up team used it to collide in this office 17 core business models were developed, and the whiteboard pen was written many times until the ink ran out Equipment effect: Resonance of inspiration: When the team stood around the whiteboard for discussion, the "Thinking Storm Field" was randomly triggered, and scattered ideas were automatically integrated into a complete solution Unblocking task: Use this whiteboard for strategic analysis during strategic cooperation with three industry leading companies (0/3) ​ (After unblocking) Special effects: Decision-making reflection: When using the whiteboard to analyze business strategies, the wall will project "potential results of different decision paths" (visible only to decision-makers) Remarks: This is the most critical time and must not fail With pictures

I never expected that the provincial top science student would go to Harbin Institute of Technology. Why? It's because my grandpa graduated from Harbin Institute of Technology. If your grandpa were still around, it would be better if he had connections. He has been dead for many years. What are you going to do there? Your goal at the beginning was to "get rich first and get rich together". Wouldn't it be better to go to Qingbei?

What I wrote before is really good. It's a bit overwhelming to start a business and run a cram school during the summer vacation. I'm probably not the only one who thinks so 😴

The equipment card is currently under intense original creation. You can post your thoughts about [Equipment] here. Includes the following format: Equipment rarity, name, description, and effects. Add a playful note at the end. If an idea is borrowed in the text, I will point it out in the writer's words and thank you. Everyone's imagination is needed! Imagine boldly and create interesting sparks!

The provincial champion chooses Harbin Institute of Technology? Isn't this Wu Jing? Forced patriotism. Seeing this abandoned is so unrealistic.

The college entrance examination training is a big failure. You explained which students are partners and not labor force, but which students are not given money first, secondly no creativity, thirdly no technology, fourthly protagonists, and they are given wages higher than the times. Fifthly, they are not indispensable. If you give a higher salary, you can recruit other workers. The staff you said is difficult to manage, just give more money to hire a professional management team. In the short term, you don't need so much money at all, and the efficiency will be better. As you said in the article, distribution according to work really means distribution according to work, not according to work? Is it reasonable? ? Which students' 58 days of labor are worthy of the 250,000 yuan in 2008?

My Great God's Light

I'll probably finish the book next time if I raise it again

It looks a bit like a big player, and it's pretty cool.