Huangting Refining the Way

The plot is too cliche. Now that the family has separated, don't show it again in the future. Isn't it going to be a cliché of dressing up and getting slapped in the face?

The protagonist has a tortoise-like personality, which doesn't fit our feelings, but why don't you kill his whole family?

Fantasy fixed template, exchange students in another world on earth, gold fingers are given at the beginning, parents are dead and a younger sister is born, the family is in a difficult situation, everyone is being bullied by gangs, loan sharks in villages and towns, hunting and cutting firewood, fishing at the same time, repaying debts and destroying gangs, accepting conscience and doing errands, a powerful family knows the current affairs, saves life and comes as a lackey, throws it aside after killing monsters, no memory after ten chapters, AI is a good copy of the novel

I saw Chapter 18, "Kill people and don't take advantage of them. If you kill someone the day before, you have to receive the benefits the next day." That's the IQ. A little bit but not much

I have read about twenty chapters, what can I say? The overall story is pretty good for now. But the male protagonist is somewhat cold-blooded. It's not that the male protagonist of the novel needs to be a saint, but he should have at least some humanity. . In addition to being insensitive, the male protagonist here can't seem to have any fluctuations in his heart. Let's talk about his father giving him money first. Although his stepmother and his father were not very kind to him, his father did not show any affection for him. When the family was separated, they asked for fifty taels and gave him a hundred taels plus a butcher shop. When he heard that the butcher shop had been robbed, he sneaked away to give him money. Even if the male protagonist has traveled through time and his original emotions have faded away, as a person who occupies the brain and thinking of the original owner, are you not touched at all? Like the walking dead. Let's also explain that you know that hundreds of innocent people will die. Even if you are incapable of fearing exposure, why don't you secretly write an anonymous letter to the government or communicate with your master and watch the incident happen? .

The writing style is okay, although the writing is half-written, but my personal style is good. However, when I saw that chapter, I really couldn't stand it, something was running away, and then I wrote "Walking through mountains and forests, and before I knew it, in two or three hours, the fifty or sixty miles of mountain road was behind me." Then we arrived at the villa. . I don't say it's a road that can be traveled by horse-drawn carriages, it's just a mountain road, with a speed of 5 kilometers per hour, 1.3 Meters per second, and 100 meters in 76 seconds. At this time, Chapter 54 has been completed. The average value of ordinary people is 1, and the protagonist is more than five points. It's really 🐮🍺. Man, I gave up on a novel before because the values ​​were not enough for my brain. The value in that book was more than half of the value. Ordinary people who have not set a world record on the road are fast for long-distance running. It is the whole distance (I am not using the 100-meter dash). The world record for stabbing is based on a person who has a record of running farther than the protagonist. Then the protagonist passed out and slept for several days and nights when he got there. It is really outrageous. I am comparing it to a man named Cliff Young), 😅, 😅, here is an even more outrageous person who can encounter the villa. If there is a road, even ordinary people are not as good as it. If it is a pure mountain road with a speed of 1.3 Meters per second, it is difficult to judge by a Mercedes-Benz. I can't think of it.

It's difficult to adjust the writing speed, but the author's own rhythm is good now. He introduces new attributes, enters the blood, and goes smoothly in the next step. But be careful to get tired after forming the inherent breakthrough mode, that is, taste the herbs → accumulate attributes → learn the skills → integrate the skills → break through. However, this process can be supported by interspersing the main and branch lines. Generally speaking, it is attractive to look forward to. Come on By the way, are there single female protagonists and multiple female protagonists or are they single? I would like to advise you not to have any emotional connections if you are not sure. The map is small and there is not much room to expand it. The map is too big to carry around with you. The opponent's genius makes the protagonist look stupid. The opponent's Muggles will soon fall behind.

Chapter 1: In ancient times, a woman who had a son and ran away from home really dissuaded most people.

Now that I see it, I don't have any other opinions, except that I'm really unhappy about growing taller as my skills improve. As long as your martial arts improves, you will grow taller. It is better to grow more than ten meters tall. In the author's mind, it will be more majestic and handsome. Maybe it will become Pangu, which will directly be the title of your book "Tao". What kind of stereotype is this? It's really bad for your senses.

They are all eunuchs. Qidian also pushed me. I am convinced.

It's nothing to look at. This golden finger seems to be useful but is actually useless. It only doesn't play a big role when the protagonist is the weakest and most in need of strength and protection. It seems that this golden finger needs a long time to grow.

I've always written about my stepmother and two brothers being disgusting. I'm convinced.

You might as well start as an orphan. If you don't know how to write, don't write. It's disgusting. What good will it do to you?

Why do all immortals and heroes now have to learn martial arts?

It's old-fashioned and 💩, full of purity

It's so verbose, why is it written in such an ex-text, it makes me inexplicably irritated.

The first picture shows my mother abandoning her husband and son and running away from home. It's awesome. I don't want to see it anymore.

Not a cultivator? Why do you keep practicing martial arts?

After reading the first five chapters, too many modern words were used, which was very alienating. For example, "retirement", "extraction", "plan", "percent", "deformation", "correction" and "model" To practice martial arts, you also need to build a personal model? Laughing to Death

If you are a habitual offender, fine, avoid this trap in the future.