Simultaneous Time Travel: as for My Daily Life, I Will Be Miserable

After reading a chapter, I felt like every sentence was broken at the wrong place.

After reading a few chapters, I still feel that the protagonist is breathing heavily and pauses when speaking, which is strange.

The author should be suitable for writing about group portraits, but not for writing about people wearing the same clothes. The perspective feels a bit like watching movies, chatting and reminiscing, but it is too fragmented. In the content, a memory is divided into several fragments. Before a memory is finished, fragments of chats and other memories are inserted in the middle, which is too fragmented. The biggest weakness of the same story is that it is easy to have perspective problems. The author has magnified this problem. Similar to the book "Demon Slayer", I have watched more than thirty chapters so far and already have about five perspectives. If you count the ones inserted in the chat, the perspectives can be added. The writing is actually okay. If this was a group portrait article, it would be better. I have only read two group portrait articles, both of which are similar to the stage perspective of each player. Yours is very similar, but in comparison, it is relatively fragmented and incomplete.

The background story of Demon Slayer is the Taisho period of Japan, 1912-1921. At this time, the little devil is actively preparing to bring us trouble.

The writing is too messy, I'm just studying.

I don't understand, maybe it's because I have less exposure to memes? It makes it very uncomfortable to watch. For example, what does the dynasty code mean, what is the io kid, and what is the situation? Isn't it a shared space?

Don't have enough mental strength to receive many images? Do you think your novel dies quickly enough?

…. Not to mention the way the flashback is written, the word count, and the content are too off-topic. Your random punctuation marks make it difficult to read! While the number of words is low now, correct the problems that have been pointed out repeatedly. It is useless if there are many problems in the manuscript and it is not corrected. You will not be able to retain people.... Don't pick up the sesame seeds and lose the watermelon. Don't be reluctant to keep your manuscripts. If you post a bunch of questions, will you be able to retain readers? If not, what can I do if I keep it? The outline remains the same, but the writing and punctuation are modified to save this book.

Author, please write the word order better, I can read the content, but with this word order, it looks quite messy

Shouldn't Demon Slayer have 6 children? Is it because the timeline is different and they weren't born or something?

The beginning is just a bunch of nonsense, please keep it as short as possible, it's too watery.

How about the author learn how to use punctuation marks? Or read it yourself after writing it to see if it makes sense? It feels so bad in DaWuxiang

The writing is good, but unclear short sentences and transitions without any reminders make it more difficult to read.

😅 Hanako, Takekuma, Shigeru, where is Mrs. Six? Tanjuro's family has six children

Do you guys have a world you want to see?

I haven't watched the fan, but I've only watched the fanfic. It's a bit torturous to watch. There are various incomprehensible scenes, dialogues, character flashbacks, and those who have watched the fan will definitely be able to think of that scene. It's a pity.

The writing is still very good, but the punctuation marks are hard to comment on. Especially since I am a book reader, my impressions are hard to describe in words. I hope my writing will get better and better.

I have read dozens of chapters. The plot was quite good before and after it was released. However, the punctuation marks are very strange, and the frequency of typos is a bit more than in other novels, but the author said that he does not know how to be a eunuch. The plot is pretty good and I don't know how to be a eunuch. I think this novel is worth reading. Moreover, the world selection is very to your liking, and there are even super beasts.